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Untitled III
Contributed by
lost_in_the_darkness09
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Sunday, 23rd July 2006 @ 12:27:19 AM in AEST
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oops
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I feel like my insides are bleeding,
Imagine how bad I must be feeling.
I don't think I'm strong enough to deal with it,
So all I do is evade it.
Everytime I see you, I feel a pain in my chest.
I remember all of it but the best.
I can't believe I ever went back again.
I guess deep down I was hoping you would change.
I never could understand what made you that way.
Your identity was displayed that awful day.
I can't belive you hit me,
That day I swore I wouldn't let anyone else hurt me.
Then you said you were sorry, that it wouldn't happen again.
I thought you would change, but only found more pain.
Your words said one thing, but your actions said another.
I realized we could no longer be together.
It's been about seventeen days,
Since we each went our seperate ways.
I still carry around your memory,
But I figured out what I'm supposed to be.
A spirit full of strength and dignity,
That doesn't let herself be hurt by anybody.
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Re: Untitled III
(User Rating: 1 ) by RyChee on
Sunday, 23rd July 2006 @ 01:43:50 PM AEST (User
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I is a pretty descriptive poems with good parts. There are just some parts that I call "weak" a little, and these parts feel like they didn't really "click" into the poem. I liked it though and I like the feelings and strong, strong emotions that it can make a single person feel. It was a great job, and I liked it. |
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Re: Untitled III
(User Rating: 1 ) by kttykttywfreckls on
Sunday, 23rd July 2006 @ 02:42:30 PM AEST (User
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EXCELLENT, and AMEN... |
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