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Fear
Contributed by
Sasha
on
Friday, 14th July 2006 @ 11:27:36 PM in AEST
Topic:
DarkPoetry
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Grey stealth crept on the innocent night
Preying down on her uneasy slumber
Predator warnings tolled their menace
A dark prelude to doom’s descent
The stalker roomed into claim his stake
Licensed to hunt with the title he donned
A husband who was sworn into nurture
On a contract that spilt blood every night
Proximity would rain blows that blinded
Submission would color revulsion darker
Her fragile body would stiffen to endure
As her steel mind sprouted wings to escape
Sun dappled streams to tow fun-filled days
Waterfalls to sing haunting lush green tunes
Spaces she belonged to, places to go
Soon she believed, long before the end....
Copyright ©
Sasha
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2006-07-14 23:27:36] (Date/Time posted on
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Re: Fear
(User Rating: 1 ) by Spike on
Saturday, 26th August 2006 @ 06:25:53 PM AEST (User
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Sasha,
a richly imagined take on spousal abuse that goes further to encapsulate forces on a broader object level eg victim/ persecutor and further to an abstract, thematic level- dark/light, good/evil, reality/escapism.
The first stanza was a real hook - amazing metaphors and smooth construction. And it definitely deserves a raft of comments. You've got mine, anyway.
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Re: Fear
(User Rating: 1 ) by V-I on
Sunday, 14th January 2007 @ 02:34:12 AM AEST (User
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Status: Taken Aback
Your writing style is so intense and original,
everyone of your pieces is magnificent.
On a contract that spilt blood every night
More people should be aware of your artistry.
~
V-I
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