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[title] => The Wait
[time] => 2006-07-10 07:41:42
[hometext] => Okay ... this is a vilanelle, been taking a course and we are experimenting with different forms, the vilanelle was hardest for me .. check this out if you don't know about villanelle : http://members.optushome.com.au/kazoom/poetry/villanelle.html
[bodytext] => or read dylan thomas' "do not go gentle into that good night"
The Wait
Your lasting love for me is gone, so you plainly state.
You’re just messed up, I will forgive you… and so
In solitude amongst the ruins of our love, I wait
Your harsh words or actions I could not berate.
I sit alone and languish, hopelessly longing, even though
Your lasting love for me is gone, so you plainly state.
Your eyes casting daggers, of torment and hate.
The wounds run deep within my heart, and you know
In solitude amongst the ruins of our love, I wait
I have pledged my being to you, there is no debate.
Still hopeful am I for one last embrace, although
Your lasting love for me is gone, so you plainly state.
Like an animal, my love for you is pure - innate
Yours is fleeting in psychotic fog, sure to return. Ergo
In solitude amongst the ruins of our love, I wait
Waiting forever might be this broken lovers fate
Hope may supplant you forever, and I will remain alone.
Your lasting love for me is gone, so you plainly state.
In solitude amongst the ruins of our love, I wait
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The Wait
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poet_in_waiting
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Monday, 10th July 2006 @ 07:41:42 AM in AEST
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LostLove
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or read dylan thomas' "do not go gentle into that good night"
The Wait
Your lasting love for me is gone, so you plainly state.
You’re just messed up, I will forgive you… and so
In solitude amongst the ruins of our love, I wait
Your harsh words or actions I could not berate.
I sit alone and languish, hopelessly longing, even though
Your lasting love for me is gone, so you plainly state.
Your eyes casting daggers, of torment and hate.
The wounds run deep within my heart, and you know
In solitude amongst the ruins of our love, I wait
I have pledged my being to you, there is no debate.
Still hopeful am I for one last embrace, although
Your lasting love for me is gone, so you plainly state.
Like an animal, my love for you is pure - innate
Yours is fleeting in psychotic fog, sure to return. Ergo
In solitude amongst the ruins of our love, I wait
Waiting forever might be this broken lovers fate
Hope may supplant you forever, and I will remain alone.
Your lasting love for me is gone, so you plainly state.
In solitude amongst the ruins of our love, I wait
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Re: The Wait
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by jerseysue on
Monday, 10th July 2006 @ 01:26:36 PM AEST
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| I read up on this verse, and you have done it so well. It is a beautiful piece. Think I would like to try something like this. I really enjoyed this stle of poetry and your words very much. Sue x |
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Re: The Wait
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by lovespoetic0518 on
Monday, 10th July 2006 @ 03:57:50 PM AEST
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| You really nailed this style, I always liked this type of writing. Your writing skills really bring out this technique. Very well written. take care, Kimberly |
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Re: The Wait
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by candysears on
Monday, 10th July 2006 @ 05:00:41 PM AEST
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I love that write by Dylan Thomas very good..
Great write...
God Bless |
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