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[aid] => mick
[title] => Answering The Storm
[time] => 2006-06-19 15:53:52
[hometext] => Another Phil and Phil collaboration between Jecks and I. Thank you again for being such a pleasure to write with, Phil.
[bodytext] => Boxed in tight but one way out
So through the door I went
Wound up tight so wrapped in pain
There seemed no way to vent
Through pouring rain I walked away,
As upwards hurled my cries,
I thundered out my blackest thoughts,
Beneath the darkened skies.
In answer to my outward thrust
around me lightning flashed
Harder pounded hallowed drops
While raging thunder crashed
I stood within the frozen storm,
As rainfall washed me clean,
Then broken clouds receeded, and,
Were lost within my scream.
Soaking wet I shiver thrills
As once again I'm whole
There at my feet my troubles pooled
While rain drips off my soul.
[comments] => 15
[counter] => 354
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[informant] => lostinmyself
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[acomm] => 0
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[pollID] => 0
[score] => 50
[ratings] => 10
[editpoem] => 1
[associated] =>
[topicname] => toughstuff
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Answering The Storm
Contributed by
lostinmyself
on
Monday, 19th June 2006 @ 03:53:52 PM in AEST
Topic:
toughstuff
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Boxed in tight but one way out
So through the door I went
Wound up tight so wrapped in pain
There seemed no way to vent
Through pouring rain I walked away,
As upwards hurled my cries,
I thundered out my blackest thoughts,
Beneath the darkened skies.
In answer to my outward thrust
around me lightning flashed
Harder pounded hallowed drops
While raging thunder crashed
I stood within the frozen storm,
As rainfall washed me clean,
Then broken clouds receeded, and,
Were lost within my scream.
Soaking wet I shiver thrills
As once again I'm whole
There at my feet my troubles pooled
While rain drips off my soul.
Copyright ©
lostinmyself
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2006-06-19 15:53:52]
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Re: Answering The Storm
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 19th June 2006 @ 03:58:54 PM AEST
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Oh Phyllis! It turned out beautiful!
THANK YOU for doing this with me! I thoroughly enjoyed it!!! |
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Re: Answering The Storm
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 19th June 2006 @ 07:02:34 PM AEST
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Beautiful poem, i like the discriptive darkness in this poem, the last line speaks
4 itself. nice colaberation.
Ben |
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Re: Answering The Storm
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by ever1der on
Monday, 19th June 2006 @ 09:14:15 PM AEST
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| amazing..there are no seams and I can't tell who wrote what. kuddos..(clap clap clap) |
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Re: Answering The Storm
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by wizard on
Monday, 19th June 2006 @ 09:19:36 PM AEST
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awesome write!...nicely done!
wiz |
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Re: Answering The Storm
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by Nazmythian on
Monday, 19th June 2006 @ 10:20:54 PM AEST
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I concour ... seemless. A wonderful read. The best collaborations are those that leave one guessing ... who wrote what, and this ... does just that. Kudos to you both.
Nazzy ~ |
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Re: Answering The Storm
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 19th June 2006 @ 10:48:44 PM AEST
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Omigosh you two!! Incredible!! I love the last two
stanzas the best. They are exceptionally worded.
I love writes that leave you stained with emotion ...
and this one does just that..
SOAKED CLEAN THROUGH TO THE BONE!!
Awesome!
*hugs*
~Breezy
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Re: Answering The Storm
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 19th June 2006 @ 11:01:12 PM AEST
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Wow, this is really an enjoyable read. And yes, seamless. You two did really good here and uh, I was gonna say what my favorite lines were but then would I be complimenting one over the other?
Naaaaa.....just applauds and says you two did a wonderful job!
Timmy
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Re: Answering The Storm
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by shelby on
Tuesday, 20th June 2006 @ 12:39:00 AM AEST
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I bow to your talent, the two of you blended perfectly. Im so happy I was here to read this one! Bravo Bravo!!!!!!!!!
Michelle |
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Re: Answering The Storm
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by emystar on
Tuesday, 20th June 2006 @ 01:16:54 AM AEST
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Wow this is a masterpeice!
Incredible u 2 are together.
luv, huggs, smiles,
emy
It rocks! |
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Re: Answering The Storm
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by Vampirequeen on
Tuesday, 20th June 2006 @ 09:32:55 AM AEST
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wow philly girl and Jecks i am amaze at this writing truely beautiful.
You two make a great team.
hugs |
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Re: Answering The Storm
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by jerseysue on
Tuesday, 20th June 2006 @ 02:53:03 PM AEST
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| I can almost feel the atmosphere in this poem, truly awesome . A wonderful write. Sue x |
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Re: Answering The Storm
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by Eternal_Dreamer on
Tuesday, 20th June 2006 @ 06:07:03 PM AEST
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Phil & Jecks~
OMG, this is absolutely awesome. A beautiful masterpiece penned by two very gifted and talented poets. You two make a dynamic combination. Hats off to ya both and may we see some more co-writes by u two real soon. Well done Phil & Jecks~
warm hugs,
~*suzie Q*~ |
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Re: Answering The Storm
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by ButchHoward on
Wednesday, 21st June 2006 @ 07:23:58 PM AEST
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I know you both must be very proud of this. It is a captivating poem with perfect rythm and flow and emotes powerful imagery. I love that it is uplifting at the end -outstanding choice of words. I felt a unique sense of relief after reading this, in empathy with the persona -that's pretty powerful stuff...
10 stars
*****
*****
Butch |
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Re: Answering The Storm
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by Willofree on
Thursday, 22nd June 2006 @ 04:46:40 PM AEST
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Very well done, and excellent use of metaphor in the storm. There is some powerful imagery in this poem. A very good collaborative effort here.
Well done,
Will |
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Re: Answering The Storm
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by Naughtygurl on
Saturday, 27th January 2007 @ 09:27:26 PM AEST
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So i think your a wonderful writer.
I think this gave me a little inspiration, so far even though it seems sad, your poem is the only one that didn't make me sick from being so morbid... Anyway very good job... I love your use of vocabulary and the flow of the words.
--> Bitty ♥ |
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