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[aid] => mick
[title] => Tonight Beneath the Stars
[time] => 2006-05-19 07:51:59
[hometext] => My first romantic write in a long long time... please be kind as I'm kinda rusty
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Come love, lay thee by my side
Upon the softness of the grass
Beneath the glow of faintest stars
And I'll command the hours to pass
So slowly as to make the dawn
To seem a thousand years away
Come love, lay thee by my side
Within my arms 'til morning stay
Come love, lay thee by my side
In darkness now and all alone
And let me feel thy surging heart
That beats in rhythm with my own
The velvet touch of tender hands
The warmth of bare and trembling flesh
Come love, lay thee by my side
And let our souls in silence mesh
Come love, lay thee by my side
Let tongues and bodies there entwine
Allow thy longing lips to taste
The sweetness of desire's wine
With whispered sighs we'll tell our tale
Of passion 'til the breaking light
Come love, lay thee by my side
And join with me as one tonight
L. Carling c2006
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Tonight Beneath the Stars
Contributed by
Rakerman1999
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Friday, 19th May 2006 @ 07:51:59 AM in AEST
Topic:
LovePoetry
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Come love, lay thee by my side
Upon the softness of the grass
Beneath the glow of faintest stars
And I'll command the hours to pass
So slowly as to make the dawn
To seem a thousand years away
Come love, lay thee by my side
Within my arms 'til morning stay
Come love, lay thee by my side
In darkness now and all alone
And let me feel thy surging heart
That beats in rhythm with my own
The velvet touch of tender hands
The warmth of bare and trembling flesh
Come love, lay thee by my side
And let our souls in silence mesh
Come love, lay thee by my side
Let tongues and bodies there entwine
Allow thy longing lips to taste
The sweetness of desire's wine
With whispered sighs we'll tell our tale
Of passion 'til the breaking light
Come love, lay thee by my side
And join with me as one tonight
L. Carling c2006
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Re: Tonight Beneath the Stars
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by ludders on
Friday, 19th May 2006 @ 07:55:04 AM AEST
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| rusty??? i'd say polished. Brilliant poem.. keep writing them |
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Re: Tonight Beneath the Stars
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by Avarice_Riot on
Friday, 19th May 2006 @ 08:54:12 AM AEST
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*melts* Wow. This is a bit simpler than your other romantic poems, Larry, but it's still powerful and a pleasure to read. Rusted, you say? Not as much as you think. ;)
~Ave |
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Re: Tonight Beneath the Stars
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by ever1der on
Friday, 19th May 2006 @ 09:37:27 AM AEST
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| hmmmmm...well, it sounds kind of abstract as if you aren't writing for anyone real.. but it's pretty. |
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Re: Tonight Beneath the Stars
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by brooken_22 on
Friday, 19th May 2006 @ 10:05:28 AM AEST
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okay, so if this is rusty....what is your writing at full-force....
a big fan,
brooken_22 |
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Re: Tonight Beneath the Stars
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by Nazmythian on
Friday, 19th May 2006 @ 10:13:57 AM AEST
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Ya know Larry, somethings ... like roller skating or riding a bike ... you just don't forget. I think that romantic poetry, for you, is quite possibly the same. There is an innate ability within you and your words to capture beautiful moments and lay them down for the rest of us to experience. I hope this indicates an upswing of sorts to recent moods or even just a step in that direction. Peace to you sir, may your pen always be full.
Nazzy ~ |
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Re: Tonight Beneath the Stars
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by Former_Member on
Friday, 19th May 2006 @ 12:36:00 PM AEST
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| Rusty? Thy words are stainless steel by a master. |
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Re: Tonight Beneath the Stars
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by Former_Member on
Friday, 19th May 2006 @ 01:14:05 PM AEST
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| I would not use the word "rusty", if anything I sense a hesistation on your part from letting loose completely. I think you'll surprise yourself if you do, for this, this is good work! |
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Re: Tonight Beneath the Stars
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by Silent-No-More on
Friday, 19th May 2006 @ 04:52:33 PM AEST
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You knowwwwwwwww..... a rather wonderful and wise man recently told me that the merit of a poem has mostly to do with how its words "slip into the heart and soul of the reader". Having reviewed this with that in mind.... I can think of no better word to describe it than.... beautiful.
Rusty? Nah..... I ain't buyin' it. *smiles*
~Snemmy
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Re: Tonight Beneath the Stars
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by Eternal_Dreamer on
Friday, 19th May 2006 @ 06:35:49 PM AEST
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Larry~
It's so great to see u posting ur beautiful love poetry again. Rusty, far from it. You're a true poetic master who pens the most remarkable masterpieces. May ur pen always flow eloquently with such beautiful poetic verses.
hugs galore from ur fan,
~*suzie Q*~ |
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Re: Tonight Beneath the Stars
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by Former_Member on
Friday, 19th May 2006 @ 10:36:51 PM AEST
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Whoa,
~fans face~ Very romantic and lovely,
LG |
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Re: Tonight Beneath the Stars
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by emystar on
Friday, 19th May 2006 @ 11:34:41 PM AEST
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Woo friend,
if ya get any better at this we wont be able to read them.
Seriously very well written, tender, soft romance.
huggs, smiles,
emy |
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Re: Tonight Beneath the Stars
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 22nd May 2006 @ 08:17:15 AM AEST
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| Write on Larry. Your writes are always impressive....Mike |
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Re: Tonight Beneath the Stars
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 22nd May 2006 @ 08:56:08 AM AEST
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Completely beautiful Larry, as always. Your writes could never rust.
(As they are not made of metal, but of soft dreams and gentle sighs)
I adore the title of this and what follows is breath-taking hun.
(How could we expect less from the man who holds the roses?)
wonderfully heart hugging.
~Breezy |
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Re: Tonight Beneath the Stars
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by Vampirequeen on
Friday, 26th May 2006 @ 06:01:18 PM AEST
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Will i would say your not at all rusty at this.
This is quite beautiful piece of poetry .
Every time i read your stuff i am quite impress.Anyways enough of my blabbering lol.Awsome job
hugs |
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Re: Tonight Beneath the Stars
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by lovingcritters on
Friday, 26th May 2006 @ 08:39:10 PM AEST
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Larry such beautiful words, it's so nice to have the "romantic" you back again.
Now if you can find a fine lady that you can write about.........lucky she..........
I remember all of your beautiful poems of years back...........you haven't lost your wonderful romantic touch.......you still have it very much!
Warm love
consue |
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Re: Tonight Beneath the Stars
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by EternitysLyre on
Thursday, 22nd June 2006 @ 06:01:31 PM AEST
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| And I've lost my touch. Shall I call you lyre as well? *laughs* |
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Re: Tonight Beneath the Stars
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by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 17th January 2007 @ 11:15:04 PM AEST
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| sorry...but you could never be rusty!!! lol...Shari :) |
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Re: Tonight Beneath the Stars
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by JamesStockdale on
Wednesday, 26th August 2020 @ 11:32:06 PM AEST
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| Lovely indeed!!! |
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