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Array ( [sid] => 119739 [catid] => 1 [aid] => mick [title] => WHEN YOU'RE DOWN [time] => 2006-05-09 08:54:57 [hometext] => COMMENTS PLEASE [bodytext] => when you're down

When you're down
I wanna make you happy
so i put my effort in
and give you a large kiss
and look you in your eyes
and say i love you
no resort to stay
no wait
you will always know
i won't hide
you will be the one
that gives me pain of love
so much love i cant even hold
everything will be fine when i'm around
and that's every second because i'm with you
i'm your soul and you're mine
with out us it's nothing.

BY BRANDEN GOODRICH [comments] => 4 [counter] => 220 [topic] => 2 [informant] => BEE [notes] => Edited for spelling as requested. In the future, if you are to ask for a spell check, please do not use word shortcuts. Thankyou. - Moderator_16 [ihome] => 0 [alanguage] => english [acomm] => 0 [haspoll] => 0 [pollID] => 0 [score] => 0 [ratings] => 0 [editpoem] => 0 [associated] => [topicname] => LovePoetry )

WHEN YOU'RE DOWN

Contributed by BEE on Tuesday, 9th May 2006 @ 08:54:57 AM in AEST
Topic: LovePoetry

when you're down

When you're down
I wanna make you happy
so i put my effort in
and give you a large kiss
and look you in your eyes
and say i love you
no resort to stay
no wait
you will always know
i won't hide
you will be the one
that gives me pain of love
so much love i cant even hold
everything will be fine when i'm around
and that's every second because i'm with you
i'm your soul and you're mine
with out us it's nothing.

BY BRANDEN GOODRICH

Copyright © BEE ... [ 2006-05-09 08:54:57]
(Date/Time posted on site)

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Re: WHEN YOU'RE DOWN (User Rating: 1 )
by diablohate on Tuesday, 9th May 2006 @ 09:24:13 AM AEST
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it went together pretty well.....but what is "sould"
but good work.

Re: WHEN YOU'RE DOWN (User Rating: 1 )
by ever1der on Tuesday, 9th May 2006 @ 09:38:47 AM AEST
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It's a new age, and even the writing is changing. It's kind of hard to follow because you write as you speak I guess; but it's only a matter of us who are older learning that new language.

Re: WHEN YOU'RE DOWN (User Rating: 1 )
by Former_Member on Tuesday, 9th May 2006 @ 11:42:32 AM AEST
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We cowboys be tearin' up the English language somethin' awful when we talk and when cowboy poets write that talk, but we gotta be careful the substance of our collective mass of words is still readable and understandable. Timeless poets write for generational appreciation both forward and backward in age.
wabl
KenMoore
cowboy

Re: WHEN YOU'RE DOWN (User Rating: 1 )
by kaitee on Tuesday, 9th May 2006 @ 02:25:19 PM AEST
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aww

~Kaitee

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