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What I Think
Contributed by
BEE
on
Wednesday, 19th April 2006 @ 10:15:20 PM in AEST
Topic:
LovePoetry
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What I Think
Ive been with some
ive been single
but when i saw you
the world spent fast
but i know it will last
last soo long
but the first time
i saw you
you blew me away
blew me right out my shoes
your like a billion...
a billion crystals
with nothing to lose
i call you my angel
as you fly over me
helping me threw life
you run my life
like a blue moon
showing me nothing to lose
i just dont want....
i dont want to lose you
with out your name
i would have nothing
nothing blowing threw my mind
can i just speak
one small little line
and tell you how i feel
can i ask you
do you feel for me
do you care for me
will you love me
now that i know
threw thine eyes
im telling you the feeling i have
your beautiful
your amazing
threw my heart soul and mind
thats how i feel
do you now know how i feel
or do i need to go deeper
you change my mind
you make me be my self
your great
you have everything ive ever wanted
your heart is large
your mind is contagius
and you show me the world
as i say these things your mind flows
with lyrical words
your eyes glaze like an angel
they glow like the moon
they shine like gloss
there color is the color of a beautiful rainbow
everything about you is amazing
i wanna be your one
and its life between us
life together is great
BY BRANDEN GOODRICH
Copyright ©
BEE
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2006-04-19 22:15:20] (Date/Time posted on
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Re: What I Think
(User Rating: 1 ) by Aspiring on
Wednesday, 19th April 2006 @ 10:24:07 PM AEST (User
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i like the format, and the words are powerful, but i especially like the short line format!
good write
keep it up
-Aspiring
P.s. i would love it if u told me what u think of my poem, "freedom of the forgotten" please read...great poem
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Re: What I Think
(User Rating: 1 ) by Gigi_15 on
Wednesday, 19th April 2006 @ 11:00:20 PM AEST (User
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I love it that ur 'phrases' are short and yet powerful and the way it completely fully rhymes and it all makes sence..( ur not just rhyming..to rhyme..it actually all makes sence together)...I love how I can see how romantic you are...you can really see..feel the emotion..I love that..:)..great write!
If you're not too busy please read a poem or two of mine:)
Gigi |
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