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The Only Thing
Contributed by
bigduck6769
on
Wednesday, 19th April 2006 @ 09:42:27 PM in AEST
Topic:
DreamsandWishes
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The only thing i want to hear
when i go to sleep
is you breathing, soft and deep
laying very near.
The only thing i want to breath
while i am dreaming
is the scent of air that is teeming
of love that will never leave.
The only thing i want to see
when i wake up
is you with no make up
looking back at me.
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bigduck6769
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2006-04-19 21:42:27] (Date/Time posted on
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Re: The Only Thing
(User Rating: 1 ) by Aspiring on
Wednesday, 19th April 2006 @ 09:45:53 PM AEST (User
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mmmm...
this is a refreshing change,
good write, and powerful
you expressed your reeling well and without dragging it out
keep it up!
-Aspiring |
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Re: The Only Thing
(User Rating: 1 ) by Sena on
Wednesday, 19th April 2006 @ 10:00:31 PM AEST (User
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I think its good...you should continue it. =) |
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Re: The Only Thing
(User Rating: 1 ) by violet on
Thursday, 20th April 2006 @ 04:12:24 PM AEST (User
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it feel unfinished...i think you should continue it.......but other than that it's good. |
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Re: The Only Thing
(User Rating: 1 ) by Eternal_Dreamer on
Friday, 28th April 2006 @ 10:35:20 AM AEST (User
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You have done a real good job on this write, but I only wished it was a little longer. Would love to say u expand on it. Otherwise a beautiful and well penned write.
*warm hugs*
~*suzie Q*~ |
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Re: The Only Thing
(User Rating: 1 ) by Lo2681 on
Friday, 12th May 2006 @ 12:21:41 AM AEST (User
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It's a beautiful thing when we have the one we love so close while we are sleeping is'nt it. Very touching:) ~Lo |
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Re: The Only Thing
(User Rating: 1 ) by lovingcritters on
Wednesday, 24th May 2006 @ 02:55:44 PM AEST (User
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BRAVO!BRAVO!BRAVO! Ryan, this is so romantic! Simplicity is beauty, and your poem is the epitome of that! WELCOME To YPDC............you're going to love it here, and we're so happy to welcome you aboard too!
Keep up the good work! Very enjoyable!
Warm love
consue |
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