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The Sound Of A Heartbreak
Contributed by
lilbabe
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Wednesday, 19th April 2006 @ 09:29:40 PM in AEST
Topic:
LostLove
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The words on this paper
Paint an image in my head
Leading my heart into a journey of the past
And you're there
I reach out to touch you
But I can't
Every single step I take forward,
You take two back
No, I try to shout
But there is a disturbing silence
Rupturing the void in my heart
My soul bears immense pain
And the waves of emotion break within my heart
They cascade into the canyons of my soul,
Echoing in my ears and I collapse in self pity
Listening to the sound of a heartbreak
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lilbabe
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2006-04-19 21:29:40] (Date/Time posted on
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Re: The Sound Of A Heartbreak
(User Rating: 1 ) by Aspiring on
Wednesday, 19th April 2006 @ 09:35:48 PM AEST (User
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I like it!
I am sorry for whatever caused you to write this...it sounds very sad.
Anyhow, it is short and sweet and meaningful and I love the rhythm to it...
keep up the good work
-Aspiring |
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Re: The Sound Of A Heartbreak
(User Rating: 1 ) by Craze on
Friday, 21st April 2006 @ 08:21:52 AM AEST (User
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Great job I've felt this way before you painted a vivid picture in my head. |
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Re: The Sound Of A Heartbreak
(User Rating: 1 ) by FRANCO on
Saturday, 22nd April 2006 @ 11:16:08 AM AEST (User
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It is a very painful poem; written with great care, specially those last couple of verses "Echoing in my ears and I collapse in self pity
Listening to the sound of a heartbreak"
give's life to your poem. Good work friend.
FRANCO
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