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[aid] => mick
[title] => ~*Where Love Once Dwelt*~
[time] => 2006-04-07 09:25:47
[hometext] => I'm sorry, I wished I could write a happier write. It actually reflects alot on how I've been feeling lately :~(
[bodytext] => In the darkest of hours
Where sleepy eyes do rest
My heavy burdened heart
Is challenged to contest
The safe haven it once knew
Now slowly ceases to exist
Where love once happily dwelt
Torment and misery consist
Sadness seeks itself refuge
From a battle from far within
Bad choices are often made
Affairs of the heart can be a sin
My eyes see no more light
Tears evade their cosy place
Bloodied thoughts called memories
Trigger what I try to replace
The sunrise of a new day
Breaks the motion of pain
Until the moon dons the sky
This painful cycle begins again
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[informant] => eternal_dreamer
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[score] => 52
[ratings] => 11
[editpoem] => 1
[associated] =>
[topicname] => EmotionalPoetry
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~*Where Love Once Dwelt*~
Contributed by
eternal_dreamer
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Friday, 7th April 2006 @ 09:25:47 AM in AEST
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In the darkest of hours
Where sleepy eyes do rest
My heavy burdened heart
Is challenged to contest
The safe haven it once knew
Now slowly ceases to exist
Where love once happily dwelt
Torment and misery consist
Sadness seeks itself refuge
From a battle from far within
Bad choices are often made
Affairs of the heart can be a sin
My eyes see no more light
Tears evade their cosy place
Bloodied thoughts called memories
Trigger what I try to replace
The sunrise of a new day
Breaks the motion of pain
Until the moon dons the sky
This painful cycle begins again
Copyright ©
eternal_dreamer
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2006-04-07 09:25:47]
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Re: ~*Where Love Once Dwelt*~
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by NoSaint on
Friday, 7th April 2006 @ 12:25:31 PM AEST
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:::Hugs::: Those nights can make the mind wander and the hurt return...I wish you healing
Shari |
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by Jenni_K on
Friday, 7th April 2006 @ 03:26:15 PM AEST
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Aww hun, I am sorry you feel like this..Hope you feel better soon..
Good write though...well done..
Hugs
Jenni |
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by Former_Member on
Friday, 7th April 2006 @ 07:47:31 PM AEST
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| Very well put together werite, deep with sadness...Mike |
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Re: ~*Where Love Once Dwelt*~
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by Former_Member on
Saturday, 8th April 2006 @ 11:35:03 AM AEST
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((((((((Sue)))))))))) Sorry 4 your pain my friend.
love is more often than none, based on cruel misconceptions.The heart is wise but also vulnerable. wish u well.
((((Sue))))
Ben |
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by Former_Member on
Saturday, 8th April 2006 @ 08:51:55 PM AEST
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| My Dearest SusieQ. Come on sweetheart, let go and let God. I know you can do this, let Him control your life and your burdens will be lifted. I love you.. RaquelLeah |
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by Sinned on
Sunday, 9th April 2006 @ 09:46:14 AM AEST
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Eternal_Dreamer
Emontial Indeed !
Keep getting those feelings out.You are such a good writer and poems like this can & will help you and others.
Today may be Hell
Tomorrow will tell
Time makes all things well
Sinned |
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Re: ~*Where Love Once Dwelt*~
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by Former_Member on
Sunday, 9th April 2006 @ 01:17:30 PM AEST
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Oh, sweet SusieQ (seems my nickname for you has stuck eh? lol)
Such excruciating sadness in this one, hun. I'm sorry for your pain darlin', but as you
always say to me . . chin up, sweet girl. The lows are only there so we can recognize the
highs, and do not apologize for writing what you feel sweetie. This was beautiful
sadness and so very well penned. A monumental piece of darkness clouding the
soul. Very emotive. I feel ya sweets.
love and hugs always,
~Breezy |
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Re: ~*Where Love Once Dwelt*~
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by In_a_while on
Monday, 10th April 2006 @ 07:19:20 PM AEST
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Hey there Sue,
I see such a painful write and it pains me to know
this is how you've been feeling...especially for someone
of such a kind and giving nature. I hope that your
writing and the comments given by the great people
here on the site will help to lift your spirits.
You have my very best
Take care
Dwayne |
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Re: ~*Where Love Once Dwelt*~
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by Lilly-Quill on
Wednesday, 12th April 2006 @ 02:47:03 AM AEST
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~*Suzie Q*~
Love is never lost. If not reciprocated, it will flow back and soften and purify the heart. Perhaps it’s like the clouds that sometimes block the sun. The walls people often build around the heart can also keep out the joy. The word “happiness” would lose its meaning if it were not balanced by sadness.
“Yet be sad, good Sister,
For, by my faith, it very well becomes you.
Sorrow so royally in you appears
That I will deeply put the fashion on
And wear it in my heart”
We look before and after,
And pine for what is not,
Our sincerest laughter
With some pain is fraught:
Our sweetest songs are those that tell of saddest thought.
~warm huggers, special friend~
Lilly-Quill
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Re: ~*Where Love Once Dwelt*~
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by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 12th April 2006 @ 04:10:02 AM AEST
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Aw, Susie Q!!! That is soooo sad. You do however, write brilliantly and the poetic thoughts do just seem to flow from you.
Yeah, like Breezy said and you tell me, "Chin up, sweet girl!"
*ginormous hug*
Love,
opTIMist
:-)
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Re: ~*Where Love Once Dwelt*~
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by lovingcritters on
Wednesday, 12th April 2006 @ 12:26:23 PM AEST
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Oh My Dear Susie Q.
I can't hope to say I know just how you feel.
But your path I once walked, I know it's truly real!
Your HeartWrenching poem will infact help you to heal!
You're in my prayers dear Susie Q, the pain is intense, but please, continue to feel!
Buried pain will someday surface so with each poem my dear
Open your heart of feelings, and know that we are all here for you............we're all very near!
Warm love and hugs galore!
momconsue
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Re: ~*Where Love Once Dwelt*~
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by bobotheclown on
Wednesday, 12th April 2006 @ 09:10:49 PM AEST
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My friend this was beautiful and I can
definitely relate. For some reason the 2nd to
last stanza stood out to me, in particular the
last 2 lines. The imagery and emotion in this
write made it a joy to read... I only wish this
isn't actually how you felt. Once again thank
you for your comments on my two poems I
always look forward to them.
Bobo (Joel) |
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Re: ~*Where Love Once Dwelt*~
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 17th April 2006 @ 12:27:16 AM AEST
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Sue,
This night you and Roxy have captured my heart like never before on this site. How tragic, the heart breaks of you two are. I can only pray that you will find that happiness that you deserve. Same as I feel about Roxy and many others on this site. Everyone, in fact deserves hapiness. Though, the poet is a soul that cannot be tamed, it can be caged and hurt by the exhaustion of others and their games.
None are more foolish, romantic, and vulnerable than the artist. You are an amazing writer. I know the scars hurt but they are also those things that make us feel. If we did not know pain, then we would not know what hapiness was. The journey of the jester to the kingdom that makes him king, or her queen. Thus is the life of the poet.
Love will dwell again, I promise you.
What you captured here, as did Breezy in her latest work was a tremendous reality that heart break casts. The poem as a whole is excellent but the final stanza is one of the most real and personal felt stanzas I have read in some time.
WELL DONE!
My prayers and thoughts are with you. As they are for all who find pain in the exhausting search for love.
SCM |
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by EmptyGirl on
Monday, 17th April 2006 @ 04:04:54 PM AEST
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| I need to be careful, because you could break my own heart with this poem. :) As it stands, I've felt very much the same way, still do sometimes, so this really hit home. Just... wow |
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by wizard on
Wednesday, 19th April 2006 @ 04:45:33 PM AEST
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no need for apologies..this was a great write. i think we all (well, at least, I) feel exactly this way at times, perhaps more often than not...but my motto is 'it could always be worse'.
i hope you find your way out of the doldrums soon.
wiz |
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by Man_On_High on
Wednesday, 19th April 2006 @ 08:01:35 PM AEST
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very telling..and so tragically beautiful luv-
your fianl 4 lines had chills running all up and down me..
My love and prayers.. as alway~
Yours-
B |
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by Michael_Bevins on
Wednesday, 19th April 2006 @ 08:07:21 PM AEST
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| Very nice indeed. I enjoyed. Great write, keep it up! |
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by Former_Member on
Thursday, 20th April 2006 @ 07:44:35 PM AEST
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To this I can truely relate as of late.
sigh...dang, I thought I was past this....oh so felt!! |
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by moses on
Friday, 21st April 2006 @ 05:59:12 PM AEST
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Hey Sue,
I'm usually the first one or at least I try to be one of the first ones to catch your new poems. Guess I didn't this time. Love your work. We all feel down sometimes, do what makes you happy. Take a break from whatever your doing. Dwelling on whats going wrong or badly in your life only makes it worse. Hope you feel better, but no matter how your feeling your poems always turn out beautiful.
Well done again...I'm going to try to get back on this website more often, I've been slacking lately.
Your friend/fan,
-moses |
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Re: ~*Where Love Once Dwelt*~
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by Former_Member on
Sunday, 23rd April 2006 @ 09:36:34 AM AEST
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The night is a lonely place when we're feeling low and memories are harsh. Life is a sea of emotional troughs and crests and there is a crest ahead . I wish you all speed to its height.No need to apologise for posting such an open and emotional poem,writing is always cathartic.Wishing you happier days ahead,
Den |
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Re: ~*Where Love Once Dwelt*~
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by Spazzo on
Monday, 24th April 2006 @ 07:45:50 PM AEST
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I hope things get better for you.
This is a very beautifuly writen poem.
Take care.
Scott |
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Re: ~*Where Love Once Dwelt*~
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by Archie on
Tuesday, 25th April 2006 @ 09:08:06 AM AEST
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| I know how you feel. It is hard to love when you feel that love is letting you down. But I think you are one of the best ppl to find a way to love any way |
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by Man_On_High on
Tuesday, 25th April 2006 @ 10:41:21 PM AEST
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( I cannot respond in kind.. knowing how much pain you've been through and how much you mean to me..)
and so I say:
Lest sorrow exist,
then I would have you living under the wing of a dove.. in paradise.. forever~
Thinking of you.. Sue- always..
Billy |
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by emystar on
Friday, 28th April 2006 @ 02:34:53 AM AEST
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Hi friend,
yeah, I'm back, missed you too and everyone else.
I know the feelings here. Even tho it's sad it's greatly written.
hope you feel better really soon and things turn around for you very fast.
I'll keep you in my prayers and if ya ever need to talk just know I'm here for you.
luv, huggs, prayer.
emy |
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by lovingcritters on
Sunday, 30th April 2006 @ 01:07:44 AM AEST
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My dear SusieQ never apologize dear for being sad, 'tis just as much a part of life as joy I think!
We all love you here and can empathize with your feelings.........we're all poets and can feel what you''re feeling inside.
I especially appreciated the way you put it.
"This painful cycle begins again"
But one day my dear friend, you'll awake, and not remember when...............that cycle came to an end. Hang in there until that happens.....then you'll know you win!
Warm love
momconsue |
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by lil_noel09 on
Wednesday, 24th May 2006 @ 09:45:28 PM AEST
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| excellent write! your words definately set a mood and convey emotion. beautifully put. things will get better :D |
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Re: ~*Where Love Once Dwelt*~
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 6th June 2006 @ 05:46:56 PM AEST
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Write what your heart feels for whatever it is you write sue it'll always hold a most magical magnificence. and it'll speak of good as well as bad for you are an artist of distinction as well as a finely tuned instrument of poetry.
truly beautiful work.
((((Sue))))
Ben |
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by hauntedscorp on
Tuesday, 13th June 2006 @ 09:17:31 AM AEST
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((((((((((((((((((((((((((((((Sue)))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))
This is written beautifully, even if it is terribly sad. The emotions are real, and are fully felt by the reader, and you should never have to apologize for how you feel. I sure hope this awful sadness is now a thing of the past for you...
Scorp. |
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by Wachumiri on
Sunday, 21st January 2007 @ 10:29:34 PM AEST
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Sadness has its place, especially in writing. I like this, many good lines. I really like 'Bloodied thoughts called memories', an interesting picture...
Take care,
David |
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by ladyfawn on
Wednesday, 25th April 2007 @ 05:29:25 PM AEST
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even through your pain, you write so beautifully...
love n' hugs nessa
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