Is it petty, I wonder…

The package of perpetual irritants
That I seem to continually lay down…
The litany of minor lamentations,
Unwrapped from tin foil
And set out on the blanket
Before you… again, again.
I wonder if it bothers you, asking
On occasion if it does – only
To lose your answer
Underneath the worry
That you might not know
Why my voice quivers so
Everytime I do.

So, I ask again,
And then…

Again, I worry
That I’m

Burdening you.

~ ~ ~

Before a rock, by a river, ‘neath a tree –
A picnic of my burdens,

You,

Me…

Singing, still,
That same old song

As time… rolls… on.








(Thank you)

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Rock (No Hiding Place) Contributed by Silent-No-More on Wednesday, 5th April 2006 @ 01:13:32 AM in AEST Topic: spiritual Is it petty, I wonder… The package of perpetual irritants That I seem to continually lay down… The litany of minor lamentations, Unwrapped from tin foil And set out on the blanket Before you… again, again. I wonder if it bothers you, asking On occasion if it does – only To lose your answer Underneath the worry That you might not know Why my voice quivers so Everytime I do. So, I ask again, And then… Again, I worry That I’m Burdening you. ~ ~ ~ Before a rock, by a river, ‘neath a tree – A picnic of my burdens, You, Me… Singing, still, That same old song As time… rolls… on. (Thank you) Copyright © Silent-No-More ... [ 2006-04-05 01:13:32] (Date/Time posted on site) Advertisments: Previous Posted Poem         | |         Next Posted Poem

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Re: Rock (No Hiding Place) (User Rating: 1 ) by Former_Member on Wednesday, 5th April 2006 @ 01:19:47 AM AEST (User Info | Send a Message) For lack of better words, this is just simply ,quietly ,lovely and amazing. The level of depth in this write is tremendous, well done LG

Re: Rock (No Hiding Place) (User Rating: 1 ) by Former_Member on Wednesday, 5th April 2006 @ 01:50:38 AM AEST (User Info | Send a Message) *somehow...thinks that you'd never be a bruden* That, simply put, is a beautiful poem, Snemmy. Thank you, Tim :-)

Re: Rock (No Hiding Place) (User Rating: 1 ) by Fionndruinne on Wednesday, 5th April 2006 @ 06:36:22 AM AEST (User Info | Send a Message) *thinks he sees the quality of the abovementioned stretch, and nods in agreement* I like the way the words slow down, so to speak, as the poem rolls on toward its end, yet they pick up more sense and depth as they do. This is well done, o thou of the rambling crown, well done. Andrew

Re: Rock (No Hiding Place) (User Rating: 1 ) by shelby on Wednesday, 5th April 2006 @ 01:32:35 PM AEST (User Info | Send a Message) A lovely write, so insightful and meaningful. Thats something I love about your work. Your depth of meaning inside poetic words. Michelle

Re: Rock (No Hiding Place) (User Rating: 1 ) by Former_Member on Friday, 7th April 2006 @ 12:42:03 AM AEST (User Info | Send a Message) I had this big praising speech, then I realized I have given you them before, and they probably are beginning to sound the same. So instead of the great big paragraph full of different words that mean the same thing the last several comments I made on your work did. I will simply state. See your other works that I have commented on. You always leave me captivated! MARVELOUS! SCM

Re: Rock (No Hiding Place) (User Rating: 1 ) by JGB on Friday, 7th April 2006 @ 04:35:48 PM AEST (User Info | Send a Message) It's not a stretch, it's the right category and believe it or not it gave me chills and I'm not sure why. It's just where it needs to be.

Re: Rock (No Hiding Place) (User Rating: 1 ) by Willofree on Saturday, 8th April 2006 @ 10:15:09 AM AEST (User Info | Send a Message) I really like the image of a picnic, used so effectively in dealing with concerns and apprehensions covered and wrapped in one's "basket." The underneath (underlying) worries and uncertainties very effectively conveyed; and all of nature (one's spirit) portrayed....maybe this is a reach? Very well done, Snemmy Will

Re: Rock (No Hiding Place) (User Rating: 1 ) by Former_Member on Sunday, 9th April 2006 @ 09:18:50 AM AEST (User Info | Send a Message) I have my ideas but they are just ideas,as to what the rock,the river and the tree may symbolise ,at the picnic of life,where we may open our burdens.Petty as we may think they appear,I'm sure to whom you speak,does not see it that way.To feel spiritually that burdens are considered,is a blessing,which I'm sure your 'Thank you' recognises. Never do you get it wrong,another absorbing write, Den

Re: Rock (No Hiding Place) (User Rating: 1 ) by Archie on Thursday, 13th April 2006 @ 01:45:00 PM AEST (User Info | Send a Message) You are welcome if you are thanking me for reading this. I read some 2 to 5 poems when i come on site and i must say this is a poem i have enjoyed very much. I do not think it is a burden to read and share thoughts and opinions with another. I am ofcourse limiting my answers to my own views and to another reader this poem may well say something different.

Re: Rock (No Hiding Place) (User Rating: 1 ) by lovingcritters on Friday, 14th April 2006 @ 01:46:25 PM AEST (User Info | Send a Message) Not petty at all my dear Is inviting, and I hear........ your thank you too Not necessary for you! So nice to hear from you and thank you for your splendid comment Warm love consue I thought your writing was great!