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Array ( [sid] => 117104 [catid] => 1 [aid] => mick [title] => breaking point [time] => 2006-03-26 17:00:27 [hometext] => sometimes it gets a little crazy living in a squat house... [bodytext] => I’m only 3 minutes from my breaking point,
As the clock smashes against the wall.
Frantically searching for a cigarette,
In the mist of my downfall.

Our squat house rules are abandoned now,
We’re just 5 people in a two bedroom pigsty,
No food or pot or happy times,
Just dirty dishes stacked high.

The doors been kicked down for over a month,
The bathtubs broken too,
My apartment has fallen apart,
And I don’t know what to do.

My car is gone for the second day,
With no note to explain,
So I’m trapped in this ***** hole again,
Left alone to dwell on my pain.

[comments] => 5 [counter] => 220 [topic] => 63 [informant] => hardcoreputa [notes] => [ihome] => 0 [alanguage] => english [acomm] => 0 [haspoll] => 0 [pollID] => 0 [score] => 5 [ratings] => 1 [editpoem] => 1 [associated] => [topicname] => hbadday )
breaking point

Contributed by hardcoreputa on Sunday, 26th March 2006 @ 05:00:27 PM in AEST
Topic: hbadday



I’m only 3 minutes from my breaking point,
As the clock smashes against the wall.
Frantically searching for a cigarette,
In the mist of my downfall.

Our squat house rules are abandoned now,
We’re just 5 people in a two bedroom pigsty,
No food or pot or happy times,
Just dirty dishes stacked high.

The doors been kicked down for over a month,
The bathtubs broken too,
My apartment has fallen apart,
And I don’t know what to do.

My car is gone for the second day,
With no note to explain,
So I’m trapped in this ***** hole again,
Left alone to dwell on my pain.





Copyright © hardcoreputa ... [ 2006-03-26 17:00:27]
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Re: breaking point (User Rating: 1 )
by drewgreeno on Sunday, 26th March 2006 @ 05:38:40 PM AEST
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Great piece. Good balance of tone and rhythm.

I can totally relate to that level of fustration.

If not for writing and music I would lose my mind!

Drew
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Re: breaking point (User Rating: 1 )
by Alison on Sunday, 26th March 2006 @ 06:40:56 PM AEST
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good write, you know most ppl go through what the poem is talk'n about. and what i always do when my life is not going well, i get up and do something about it! even if nothing really changes, at least i tried.


Re: breaking point (User Rating: 1 )
by Former_Member on Monday, 27th March 2006 @ 01:28:28 PM AEST
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S**** sounds like a few places I've lived in!

drawing from your life experience though has produced an excellent poem.

J.


Re: breaking point (User Rating: 1 )
by snowflake on Monday, 27th March 2006 @ 09:25:31 PM AEST
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i like this alot i can't really relate but i can sorta understand where you are coming from i wish it would have continued nice flow i like it alot


Re: breaking point (User Rating: 1 )
by whiteleo1984 on Thursday, 30th March 2006 @ 04:35:36 AM AEST
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great write... now act




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