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[aid] => mick
[title] => Flight (Into Collision)
[time] => 2006-03-09 01:16:20
[hometext] => *** I spend an unbelievable amount of time careening through the cosmos... so much so, I almost posted this in the 'obsession' category. lol. (I opted for the 'surreal' category if only because the topic/concept/reality of it leaves me awe struck) ***
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I am but the shadow of a whisper in the night
Trembling from the last blow of a secret inner fight
Careening through the heavens like a soon exploding star
My future out of focus, the distance all too far
Amid tornado winds, the thunder dins
The night becomes alive
As rain begins, time knows no end
When even clouds have cried
Hurling through the night sky holding only to a dream
There's no point in asking why nothing is as it once seemed
When a galaxy collapses and spawns a hurricane
It comes as no surprise, that everything has changed
When the winds adjust, from the dust
New stars are being born
The old will die, gone from the sky
Before the light of morn
Rushing into the collision that I’m intended for
I pause not for decision as there’s not one anymore
For Fate and I cannot deny the tug of gravity
Predetermined is my place in this reality
With eyes wide open, always hoping
That destiny will be kind
There’s no question now, I know somehow
The choice will not be mine
[comments] => 11
[counter] => 445
[topic] => 74
[informant] => Silent-No-More
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[alanguage] => english
[acomm] => 0
[haspoll] => 0
[pollID] => 0
[score] => 28
[ratings] => 10
[editpoem] => 1
[associated] =>
[topicname] => surreal
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Flight (Into Collision)
Contributed by
Silent-No-More
on
Thursday, 9th March 2006 @ 01:16:20 AM in AEST
Topic:
surreal
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I am but the shadow of a whisper in the night
Trembling from the last blow of a secret inner fight
Careening through the heavens like a soon exploding star
My future out of focus, the distance all too far
Amid tornado winds, the thunder dins
The night becomes alive
As rain begins, time knows no end
When even clouds have cried
Hurling through the night sky holding only to a dream
There's no point in asking why nothing is as it once seemed
When a galaxy collapses and spawns a hurricane
It comes as no surprise, that everything has changed
When the winds adjust, from the dust
New stars are being born
The old will die, gone from the sky
Before the light of morn
Rushing into the collision that I’m intended for
I pause not for decision as there’s not one anymore
For Fate and I cannot deny the tug of gravity
Predetermined is my place in this reality
With eyes wide open, always hoping
That destiny will be kind
There’s no question now, I know somehow
The choice will not be mine
Copyright ©
Silent-No-More
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2006-03-09 01:16:20]
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Re: Flight (Into Collision)
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by Jackee_line on
Thursday, 9th March 2006 @ 06:05:02 AM AEST
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| awesome write, well done |
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Re: Flight (Into Collision)
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by Vampirequeen on
Sunday, 12th March 2006 @ 11:26:37 PM AEST
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| wow that is awsome |
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Re: Flight (Into Collision)
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 13th March 2006 @ 05:26:23 AM AEST
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An excellent well written piece.
J |
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Re: Flight (Into Collision)
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by Spike on
Tuesday, 14th March 2006 @ 05:51:39 AM AEST
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Hiya Snem,
A well turned exposition on destiny, life direction and the minimal input we seem to have in how things turn out (at least we know where its going ie lots of daisy pushing).
As Max Power (aka Homer Simpson) once so deftly stated " just strap yourself in and feel the G's!"
Spike |
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Re: Flight (Into Collision)
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by Willofree on
Wednesday, 15th March 2006 @ 10:49:54 AM AEST
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I really enjoyed this piece, the topic is one that has always facinated me....time fate and predetermism versus determinism and choice. Often we may think we have a choice, but very often we are dealing with powers way beyond us. Perhaps our attitude toward things is a choice of sorts.
Well done,
Will |
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Re: Flight (Into Collision)
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by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 15th March 2006 @ 02:31:45 PM AEST
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This is among the deepest writes I have read authored by you. I am completely in awe of this one, for the same reason you placed this in the surreal category. I am more struck by the differences in perceived reality from one person to the next then my own perception of it.
I thank you for this look into your reality, and wish you many more wonderful works such as this.
Brilliant and Inspiring!
- SCM |
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Re: Flight (Into Collision)
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by DarkFaerie on
Wednesday, 15th March 2006 @ 09:14:09 PM AEST
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For Fate and I cannot deny the tug of gravity
Predetermined is my place in this reality
Wow Silent, beautiful powerful write. |
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Re: Flight (Into Collision)
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by TheSpiritx on
Wednesday, 15th March 2006 @ 11:33:21 PM AEST
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I chose you specifically to comment on... now I remember why.
The content of this poem is great. Nothing too heavy and still enough to feel the ride with you.
The form is what gets me. It's great! Allow me to tear it up here...
Your bold stanzas make exceptional (and pleasing) use of internal rhyme! I love it!
You followed suit with AABB in the regular stanzas and still kept the poem spontaneous with the bold sections that seemed to chose their own rhyme scheme. For instance, the first bold stanza was ABAB and the second was ABCB, which was really not even important after the internal rhyme. (I am a sucker for complex rhyme scehems.. lol)
You finished the final regular text stanza up with some pretty good iambs that allowed the poem's content to be conveyed clearly with a non-forced feeling to it. Very nicely done.
All in all, I dig this piece. Thanks for posting. :D |
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Re: Flight (Into Collision)
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by Former_Member on
Sunday, 26th March 2006 @ 01:30:07 AM AEST
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*applauds emphatically*
So brilliant, so beautiful, Snemmy. And hints of sadness.
This seriously brought tears to my eyes. "There’s no question now, I know somehow
The choice will not be mine"
Incredible. Thank you ever so much.
I'm reading that again!!!!
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Re: Flight (Into Collision)
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by Former_Member on
Sunday, 26th March 2006 @ 01:31:32 AM AEST
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| This should be set to music. |
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Re: Flight (Into Collision)
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by ButchHoward on
Wednesday, 3rd May 2006 @ 09:15:17 AM AEST
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Brilliant in form and feeling. An accurate commentary which illuminates the fact that we are all just along for the ride. I felt like I was "Hurling through the night sky" ....."hoping That destiny will be kind." I especially love the first line....
Butch
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