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The path of life is crowded
With overgrown foliage
Tree limbs stretch across the opening

Rays of sunlight
Peek through the branches
Casting shadows in the distance

Grass grows between the patches
Of a much used right-of-way
An occasional four-leaf-clover can be spotted

The journey down this path is long
Complicated with narrow and steep terrain
One must stay focused to not get lost

Yet at journeys end
Rewards will be handed out
To those to finished faithfully
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The Path Of Life

Contributed by Jeff_Scott_Morehead on Wednesday, 1st March 2006 @ 12:18:40 PM in AEST
Topic: InspirationalPoems

The Path Of Life
~~~~
The path of life is crowded
With overgrown foliage
Tree limbs stretch across the opening

Rays of sunlight
Peek through the branches
Casting shadows in the distance

Grass grows between the patches
Of a much used right-of-way
An occasional four-leaf-clover can be spotted

The journey down this path is long
Complicated with narrow and steep terrain
One must stay focused to not get lost

Yet at journeys end
Rewards will be handed out
To those to finished faithfully

Copyright © Jeff_Scott_Morehead ... [ 2006-03-01 12:18:40]
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Re: The Path Of Life (User Rating: 1 )
by shelby on Wednesday, 1st March 2006 @ 12:30:20 PM AEST
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a picture of beauty you have painted with these words. This moved me. Seems we all have something in common this new year. A journey and a sprititual path awaits us all.
Thanks for this and the strength in its message.
Michelle

Re: The Path Of Life (User Rating: 1 )
by kraydel on Wednesday, 1st March 2006 @ 12:37:32 PM AEST
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I really like the opening, as there's some high quality descriptive language that you use. Not sure if you're looking for criticism, but the end seems forced and truncated. To me, it seems like you were painting this great picture, and then you kind of just threw something into the foreground. I really liked the ambience, that bnears repeating; maybe I'm just not a fan of inspirational poetry, though : )

Re: The Path Of Life (User Rating: 1 )
by twick on Wednesday, 1st March 2006 @ 12:58:59 PM AEST
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I also think it gets cut off at the end. The beginning has this great detail oriented imagery and it feels like there was more trying to be said. Either way the message is heard loud and clear at the end.

Re: The Path Of Life (User Rating: 1 )
by Jenni_K on Wednesday, 1st March 2006 @ 04:33:23 PM AEST
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Thanks for sharing this, Jeff... lovely analogy.
Hugs
Jenni

Re: The Path Of Life (User Rating: 1 )
by Former_Member on Wednesday, 1st March 2006 @ 05:04:00 PM AEST
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Nice write I liked it, in fact I liked it a lot,,yer a star,,,Eddy

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