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''Run Away''
Contributed by
drtylilsecret
on
Friday, 17th February 2006 @ 03:16:50 PM in AEST
Topic:
anguished
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Do you tell them?
Shut your mouth!
Do you open up?
I don't dare
You're all alone--no one cares
It's the dark you can't light up
It the blood you can't wash off
Run, run, run away from here
Don't come--no looking--back
Don't wanna, don't stop
Outrun those voices
Screaming in your head
Hide the knife
Stifle the pain
Cause it's hopeless--
All is lost
Dont come--dont look-back
Run, run, run away from here
It's harder to forget
Than to remember
Even when forgetting
Is your only escape
It's better--It's easier
Ignorance is bliss
Forget, ignore, close your eyes
If you don't wanna see
The world crashing around me
Shut your ears
If you don't wanna hear
And run
run
run
If you wanna escape
To get away
If you don't wanna be here
If you don't know
Where you wanna be
Hidden deep
Parallel universe
Heaven
Cause hell doesn't seem as real
Once it's on earth
In your damned life
So you run
When the world surrounding crashes
When life collapses
When everything around you
Isn't real anymore
When it's just a nightmare
And you can't wake up
So you run--
Don't stop--
Don't look back--
Outrun the voices
Screaming in your head
Run from yourself
Run from everyone else
Hide the knife
Stifle the pain
Wash away the blood
That's set and stained your soul
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drtylilsecret
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2006-02-17 15:16:50] (Date/Time posted on
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Re: ''Run Away''
(User Rating: 1 ) by Jackee_line on
Friday, 17th February 2006 @ 03:18:32 PM AEST (User
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well done |
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Re: ''Run Away''
(User Rating: 1 ) by SmileSkinDeep on
Friday, 17th February 2006 @ 11:54:09 PM AEST (User
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Well, I like it but it seems to be missing something. Of course you are just starting out on this site and I don't know how long you have been writing poetry but you're doing great. The repetition is good. How do I explain it? It needs more of a story. You're off to a great start!
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Re: ''Run Away''
(User Rating: 1 ) by Vampirequeen on
Sunday, 19th February 2006 @ 01:33:49 AM AEST (User
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I thought it was well done.
in my opinion its deep and very emotional write.
I like it |
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Re: ''Run Away''
(User Rating: 1 ) by bobb-goodjob on
Monday, 20th February 2006 @ 06:57:38 PM AEST (User
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good poem/song
musician?
send me a message w/explanations.
i luvd the dark,angry mood
good job,
bobb
ps:im expecting more poems!
keep up the good work |
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Re: ''Run Away''
(User Rating: 1 ) by hearts4pain on
Saturday, 25th February 2006 @ 03:32:44 AM AEST (User
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i love this poem. its...just...its very..idunno its like open for the reader to think of what situation your talking about. kinda just in general. its good that you dont have a "story" to it.
i really love this poem. its awesome!!!
keeeep on writting! cant wait to read ur new stuff |
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Re: ''Run Away''
(User Rating: 1 ) by JockPhillips on
Tuesday, 22nd August 2006 @ 03:50:09 PM AEST (User
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A few edits:
Emotions and other things
Wanting to run like a pretty girl in a big open field of green grass who is happy
Rain drops dew mist
With not liking the current situation
With running for the doing good |
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