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Array ( [sid] => 114701 [catid] => 1 [aid] => mick [title] => hurting me deeply [time] => 2006-02-12 15:37:38 [hometext] => this is about someone close to me who is going through a rough time.. i dunno if its all that good [bodytext] => Been so long
since the time we dated
I never thought the one
I deeply loved is the one
person that is hated

Wake up
see me!
HEAR ME!
I stand before you with out stretched arms
My heart bleeds in agony from the wounds you pound into it
over and over again

Do you not see me bleed?
I'm ripping to shreds
going insane
from your thoughtless games

A pawn in your palm
and you expect me to be fine...

**JENNI** [comments] => 11 [counter] => 336 [topic] => 48 [informant] => PhantomVampyress [notes] => [ihome] => 0 [alanguage] => english [acomm] => 0 [haspoll] => 0 [pollID] => 0 [score] => 41 [ratings] => 9 [editpoem] => 1 [associated] => [topicname] => EmotionalPoetry )

hurting me deeply

Contributed by PhantomVampyress on Sunday, 12th February 2006 @ 03:37:38 PM in AEST
Topic: EmotionalPoetry

Been so long
since the time we dated
I never thought the one
I deeply loved is the one
person that is hated

Wake up
see me!
HEAR ME!
I stand before you with out stretched arms
My heart bleeds in agony from the wounds you pound into it
over and over again

Do you not see me bleed?
I'm ripping to shreds
going insane
from your thoughtless games

A pawn in your palm
and you expect me to be fine...

**JENNI**

Copyright © PhantomVampyress ... [ 2006-02-12 15:37:38]
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Re: hurting me deeply (User Rating: 1 )
by shelby on Sunday, 12th February 2006 @ 03:52:35 PM AEST
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Incredible Jenni, such emotion.
Its sad though and I hope that your going to be ok.
Hugsssss
Michelle

Re: hurting me deeply (User Rating: 1 )
by all_that_i_can_be on Sunday, 12th February 2006 @ 06:14:43 PM AEST
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"Do you not see me bleed?
I'm ripping to shreds
going insane
from your thoughtless games"
i can relate to that. amazing write. so much feeling. i love it.

Re: hurting me deeply (User Rating: 1 )
by deadheadpoet on Sunday, 12th February 2006 @ 10:45:35 PM AEST
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Wow Jen, that felt like getting hit in the head with a 2X4. Overwhelming power here. Excellent write. Thanks for sharing, Peace to you, Laura

Re: hurting me deeply (User Rating: 1 )
by In_a_while on Monday, 13th February 2006 @ 11:07:27 AM AEST
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excellent write! honest, and brutal

A pawn in your palm
and you expect me to be fine...

great imagery and a lot of emotion in those two lines
hope all is well! take care

Re: hurting me deeply (User Rating: 1 )
by Sinned on Wednesday, 15th February 2006 @ 01:47:48 PM AEST
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Emotions----------------------------Ouch

Sinned

Re: hurting me deeply (User Rating: 1 )
by emystar on Tuesday, 21st February 2006 @ 02:11:37 AM AEST
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Sad but beautifully written.
huggs,
emy
I'm sure your friend will appreciate it.

Re: hurting me deeply (User Rating: 1 )
by Former_Member on Friday, 24th February 2006 @ 05:17:08 PM AEST
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I hear your outburst.. I pray you are well.. hugs.. raquelLeah

Re: hurting me deeply (User Rating: 1 )
by lostinmyself on Sunday, 26th February 2006 @ 11:51:41 PM AEST
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Ouch, I really like this. It's such a powerful and honest outpouring.

I loe how short it is, yet says exactly what it's meant to, in such a wonderful, simple, yet well done way.

I especially like the first stanza.

Great write hun,
*hugs*
Phil xxx

Re: hurting me deeply (User Rating: 1 )
by Former_Member on Wednesday, 22nd March 2006 @ 12:31:23 AM AEST
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That was powerful stuff Jenni.
Well done.

J.

Re: hurting me deeply (User Rating: 1 )
by Former_Member on Thursday, 30th March 2006 @ 12:23:23 AM AEST
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Very well written, Jennittude. I could really feel the emotion. I really like the imagery in the second stanza a lot.

Thank you.

Take care,

Tim
:-)

Re: hurting me deeply (User Rating: 1 )
by myheartsvoice on Saturday, 27th January 2007 @ 11:30:09 AM AEST
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Strong words depicting a very trying situation, love is like that and can erode one's heart as the sea erode's the shore. A true artful and touching poem. Nice work.

myheartsvoice

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