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[title] => I Can't Do This Anymore
[time] => 2005-12-30 22:34:02
[hometext] => This may not look like a poem or even rythm like a poem...but not all poems are perfect
[bodytext] => These emotions have been building up day by day. Seeing you smile makes them go away. But only for a minute. Cause then I see her and I fall back again. Back into this darkness...this depression that I've locked away. You can't see it past the lieing smiles and the fake bubbly attitude. It's all an act. Can't you see that? It's the only way I can push myself through another day. I smile at you and you smile back. But there is nothing between the looks in our eyes. I try to show you how much I love you just by being the way I am. True...natural. But you don't even give me a second glance. You just walk by like you and I had nothing between us. But you can't deny all that we've been through and everything we've done. Especially that night under the stars on that hot summer night. How could you forget the love we felt for each other then? Or was it just another way for you to get some? Is that all that you use me for? I just wish to know what you feel inside for me. Don't you remember all the times we spent together? All the times we sat in my living room just hanging out and playing some music. I can remember, like it was yesterday, when you would play the drums in my living room. The windows would be open and a slight and cool breeze would be coming in. The rays of the sun would hit your drums and send sparkles around the room. And your music. It made me melt. I couldn't get enough of it. When I watched you play, everything else would just fade away and all I could hear was your perfect beats and all I could see was your beautiful face. I loved you then and I love you now. I can't think of a single thing that could stop what I feel for you. I love all your flaws and I adore all your perfections. You are perfect and invincable in my eyes. I couldn't ask for anyone better. I just wish I was perfect to you. Because I want to spend my life with you. And you know it. I love you. I truely and deeply do. I just hope that you realize it someday soon. But until then, I will wait in the shadows like I always have. And fake my smiles so that you see how beautiful I can be. I love you, Christopher. Always have and always will.
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I Can't Do This Anymore
Contributed by
Breezer08
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Friday, 30th December 2005 @ 10:34:02 PM in AEST
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These emotions have been building up day by day. Seeing you smile makes them go away. But only for a minute. Cause then I see her and I fall back again. Back into this darkness...this depression that I've locked away. You can't see it past the lieing smiles and the fake bubbly attitude. It's all an act. Can't you see that? It's the only way I can push myself through another day. I smile at you and you smile back. But there is nothing between the looks in our eyes. I try to show you how much I love you just by being the way I am. True...natural. But you don't even give me a second glance. You just walk by like you and I had nothing between us. But you can't deny all that we've been through and everything we've done. Especially that night under the stars on that hot summer night. How could you forget the love we felt for each other then? Or was it just another way for you to get some? Is that all that you use me for? I just wish to know what you feel inside for me. Don't you remember all the times we spent together? All the times we sat in my living room just hanging out and playing some music. I can remember, like it was yesterday, when you would play the drums in my living room. The windows would be open and a slight and cool breeze would be coming in. The rays of the sun would hit your drums and send sparkles around the room. And your music. It made me melt. I couldn't get enough of it. When I watched you play, everything else would just fade away and all I could hear was your perfect beats and all I could see was your beautiful face. I loved you then and I love you now. I can't think of a single thing that could stop what I feel for you. I love all your flaws and I adore all your perfections. You are perfect and invincable in my eyes. I couldn't ask for anyone better. I just wish I was perfect to you. Because I want to spend my life with you. And you know it. I love you. I truely and deeply do. I just hope that you realize it someday soon. But until then, I will wait in the shadows like I always have. And fake my smiles so that you see how beautiful I can be. I love you, Christopher. Always have and always will.
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Re: I Can't Do This Anymore
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by jessejames on
Friday, 30th December 2005 @ 10:43:11 PM AEST
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| what you have here is a good rough draft. thats good you could make a good poem with this you just have to cut it down to size and put it in form and it doesnt have to rhyme most poems dont good write |
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Re: I Can't Do This Anymore
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by emystar on
Friday, 30th December 2005 @ 10:53:47 PM AEST
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Call it what will but this is great writing!
Don't change a thing, please.
By all means keep writing as u have the natural talent. Any one can learn to write but what I see hear is all natural.
huggs,
emy
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Re: I Can't Do This Anymore
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by gizmo2010 on
Friday, 30th December 2005 @ 10:57:10 PM AEST
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| i really felt the emotion in your writing just hang in there he will come around. plus i know how you feel |
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Re: I Can't Do This Anymore
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by humboldtsweetie33 on
Saturday, 31st December 2005 @ 12:26:31 AM AEST
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| i think that this is great...very sweet and emotional..keep it up |
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