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Array ( [sid] => 111975 [catid] => 1 [aid] => mick [title] => Brain Sharks [time] => 2005-12-22 21:22:01 [hometext] => The words of authors past, began to swim within my head ... along side those of others, that misread what I have said [bodytext] => I don't create poetry, I create myself ... for me, my poems are a way to me. ~ Edith Södergran



To withdraw myself from myself has ever been my sole, my entire, my sincere motive in scribbling at all. ~ Lord Byron




So, there I find myself …
Embedded within the words
Buried under metaphor
Disguised as
What you’ve heard

Do you see me?


I won’t open up the truth …
Only part the veil slightly
Allowing you a subtle view
To interpret
As is likely

Does it fit your life?


See in me who you could be
Or maybe you once were?
Perhaps you’ve lived
All I could dream
And you need not defer

What brings you then?


For once again, I find you here
Lying in the dark
Peering through my curtain
Pointing fingers
At my heart

Would you be so quick to judge yourself?


I have become the victim ...
For portrayal of my soul
In a way you can relate to
Offensive pieces
Of your whole

What if you didn’t know?


I lie hinting at exposure
Running naked through your head
You see only what you wish to
In those words
That you have read

Do they apply to you?


I’m not seeking your forgiveness
I don’t need your clemency
For creation of myself
Is mostly just
For me to see

Why exactly am I here?


To pave the way for others
Who might think the way I do
Encourage them to brave the waters
Infested by
Brain sharks like you


And there ...

I find myself
~

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Brain Sharks

Contributed by Nazmythian on Thursday, 22nd December 2005 @ 09:22:01 PM in AEST
Topic: ambiguous



I don't create poetry, I create myself ... for me, my poems are a way to me. ~ Edith Södergran



To withdraw myself from myself has ever been my sole, my entire, my sincere motive in scribbling at all. ~ Lord Byron




So, there I find myself …
Embedded within the words
Buried under metaphor
Disguised as
What you’ve heard

Do you see me?


I won’t open up the truth …
Only part the veil slightly
Allowing you a subtle view
To interpret
As is likely

Does it fit your life?


See in me who you could be
Or maybe you once were?
Perhaps you’ve lived
All I could dream
And you need not defer

What brings you then?


For once again, I find you here
Lying in the dark
Peering through my curtain
Pointing fingers
At my heart

Would you be so quick to judge yourself?


I have become the victim ...
For portrayal of my soul
In a way you can relate to
Offensive pieces
Of your whole

What if you didn’t know?


I lie hinting at exposure
Running naked through your head
You see only what you wish to
In those words
That you have read

Do they apply to you?


I’m not seeking your forgiveness
I don’t need your clemency
For creation of myself
Is mostly just
For me to see

Why exactly am I here?


To pave the way for others
Who might think the way I do
Encourage them to brave the waters
Infested by
Brain sharks like you


And there ...

I find myself
~





Copyright © Nazmythian ... [ 2005-12-22 21:22:01]
(Date/Time posted on site)





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Re: Brain Sharks (User Rating: 1 )
by Aquaelius on Thursday, 22nd December 2005 @ 09:44:35 PM AEST
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I found this to be very well written. An let me say an ultimate truth... you don't need anyone else to be yourself.
Thanks for sharing.

Aq.


Re: Brain Sharks (User Rating: 1 )
by Spike on Friday, 23rd December 2005 @ 07:54:39 AM AEST
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Pertinent subject matter for any writer and reader. Very interesting imagery, well written, and I liked the rhyming pattern.

Only parting the veil slightly - sweet!

Spike


Re: Brain Sharks (User Rating: 1 )
by Former_Member on Friday, 23rd December 2005 @ 11:10:17 AM AEST
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Well now, ambiguous or not, one aspect of this is very clear!
A diffrent format for you? it works!!
Great to see you back here more often!!!


Re: Brain Sharks (User Rating: 1 )
by Former_Member on Monday, 26th December 2005 @ 12:12:04 AM AEST
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"We can never judge the lives of others, because each person knows only their own pain and renunciation. It's one thing to feel that you are on the right path, but it's another to think that yours is the only path" ~ Paulo Coelho

So often we find ourselves in a situation where a person thinks they know, but quite clearly, they do not. It is not enough to read one's poetry or converse with them to know them as a whole. OR even to assume we can judge them or their actions. So much of what we base our opinions on, comes from very limited information. And quite often, those perceptions are not accurate.

Much of what you incorporate into your writes, I could very well appertain to my own life. I felt this piece greatly. Magnificent, Scotty as always. And the quotes at the beginning were so aptly appropriate. I do believe, my dear naz, that it is clearly impossible for you to write anything less than exceptional !


*So loves this!*
~Breezy


Re: Brain Sharks (User Rating: 1 )
by Willofree on Wednesday, 4th January 2006 @ 12:33:15 PM AEST
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Naz, what an interesting title.... I really like it. They can be real scanvagers, which really seems to connect to your poem. Indeed, how we may all disguise ourselves so others may contemplate a connection of some sort..Ah yes we see and interpret as we choose. It seems somewhat of a paradox that we want to remain somewhat anonymous, yet we frequently want to be understood.

Well penned my friend,

Will/Terry


Re: Brain Sharks (User Rating: 1 )
by Former_Member on Thursday, 18th May 2006 @ 05:16:24 PM AEST
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BRAVO to a kindred soul! Fantastic write. Where your veil is only slightly opened, I tend t' throw mine wide open and stand naked in my thoughts to challenge the sharks to attack so that I may shove an iron rod of reason down their throat and into their pea-sized 'n' shrinking brains!

But that's just me. Marvelous work!

wabl
KenMoore
cowboy




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