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[aid] => mick
[title] => Through the dark valley
[time] => 2005-12-21 01:03:56
[hometext] => My first in a while. I was thinking about the site when I wrote this. No comments or reads are necessary for this poem
[bodytext] => Champion the cause of those who falter
Bless the one whose always being cursed
Lift the burdens from the one who carries
things within his heart that he can not verse
If I have helped you walk through the dark valley
Do not lead me to a path that is despair
Don't place upon your neighbor heavy burdens
he already lives a life with many cares
I think that every person is important
especially the ones who help others
I think that every person has a wellspring
where sweet or bitter waters gather in
But what we give to others can be sweetened
if salt has made our burdens hard to bear
every story has a lesson
if u look hard enough
every purpose soon will be laid bare
If i helped you to find joy for just a moment
If I made you rethink actions to give up
Don't cast people upon the rock of torment
encourage them with sweet words in their cup
I know my speech seems to be in riddles
but really all is clear and plain as day
show me a discouraging person
I'll show you someone who has hidden pain
It does not take to much to help when you are happy
it takes much more to help when you're in pain.
[comments] => 16
[counter] => 433
[topic] => 21
[informant] => Archie
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[alanguage] => english
[acomm] => 0
[haspoll] => 0
[pollID] => 0
[score] => 53
[ratings] => 11
[editpoem] => 1
[associated] =>
[topicname] => Lifepoems
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Through the dark valley
Contributed by
Archie
on
Wednesday, 21st December 2005 @ 01:03:56 AM in AEST
Topic:
Lifepoems
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Champion the cause of those who falter
Bless the one whose always being cursed
Lift the burdens from the one who carries
things within his heart that he can not verse
If I have helped you walk through the dark valley
Do not lead me to a path that is despair
Don't place upon your neighbor heavy burdens
he already lives a life with many cares
I think that every person is important
especially the ones who help others
I think that every person has a wellspring
where sweet or bitter waters gather in
But what we give to others can be sweetened
if salt has made our burdens hard to bear
every story has a lesson
if u look hard enough
every purpose soon will be laid bare
If i helped you to find joy for just a moment
If I made you rethink actions to give up
Don't cast people upon the rock of torment
encourage them with sweet words in their cup
I know my speech seems to be in riddles
but really all is clear and plain as day
show me a discouraging person
I'll show you someone who has hidden pain
It does not take to much to help when you are happy
it takes much more to help when you're in pain.
Copyright ©
Archie
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2005-12-21 01:03:56]
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Re: Through the dark valley
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by holderofthestone on
Wednesday, 21st December 2005 @ 02:00:31 AM AEST
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"It does not take to much to help when you are happy
it takes much more to help when you're in pain."
the poem as a whole was incredible but these words at the end spoke the loudest... wow... i think you nailed exactly what im feeling its kinda scary... excellent write! A++++ i really enjoyed this thanks for posting and welcome back...
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Re: Through the dark valley
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by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 21st December 2005 @ 08:18:13 AM AEST
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awww Archie..of course I HAVE to comment on this write. It is so full of honest sentiment and heartfelt truths. It shows the kindness in your soul.
A very well crafted and lovely piece!! |
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Re: Through the dark valley
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by shelby on
Wednesday, 21st December 2005 @ 01:38:08 PM AEST
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your heart is huge Archie .
another lovely verse from you full of spirit and love. Your a wonderful poet , man and friend
Michelle |
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Re: Through the dark valley
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by Former_Member on
Thursday, 22nd December 2005 @ 02:07:50 PM AEST
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beautiful write arch as always your poems r that of insperation and hope . . .
Ben |
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Re: Through the dark valley
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by Eternal_Dreamer on
Friday, 23rd December 2005 @ 07:16:15 AM AEST
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*sue* is so happy to see Archie post again. Welcome back my dear friend. Once a poet always a poet. You have a big, pure heart of gold Archie. A remarkable and excellently penned piece of poetry.
It does not take to much to help when you are happy
it takes much more to help when you're in pain.
You absolutely nailed it with this my dear friend. Well done.
*hugs*
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Re: Through the dark valley
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by hauntedscorp on
Saturday, 24th December 2005 @ 08:56:50 PM AEST
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ARCHIE!!!!! How wonderful to see you back again, and posting too! You and your work have been missed. I must say though---that author's note...no comments or reads are necessary for this poem...Yeah right! I beg to differ!! This is a thought-provoking write, and the message is clear. It's an important one too, and you couldn't have said it better. Hard to pick a favourite part here, but I'll say the fourth stanza is my fave, with the fifth stanza bearing the most important part of your message. Love that ending too, and so very, very true. Very good write Arch...Welcome back : )
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Re: Through the dark valley
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 26th December 2005 @ 09:41:38 PM AEST
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Archie, this poem is incredible in so many ways: it's inspirational, it's beautiful, and I can relate to it in so many ways. I simply love it! Great write and I need to read it again....and again.
Thanks,
Tim
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Re: Through the dark valley
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by Spazzo on
Tuesday, 27th December 2005 @ 04:04:51 PM AEST
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This is an awesome poem, I really like it, it's so true.
Take care.
Scott |
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Re: Through the dark valley
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by Willofree on
Thursday, 29th December 2005 @ 05:08:39 PM AEST
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Well written and it sends a good message. I think that this is a poem that should be read. It shares a concept of people helping people; and we sure need plenty of that.
Well done,
Will |
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Re: Through the dark valley
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by emystar on
Sunday, 1st January 2006 @ 05:53:06 AM AEST
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Hi friend,
Welcome back and awesome write.
huggs,
emy |
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Re: Through the dark valley
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by Former_Member on
Sunday, 12th February 2006 @ 10:41:20 PM AEST
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It does not take to much to help when you are happy
it takes much more to help when you're in pain.
Archie, your poem is chock full of wisdom. You are very wise. Love breeds love. raquelLeah
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Re: Through the dark valley
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by freespirit on
Thursday, 23rd February 2006 @ 07:47:10 PM AEST
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Hi Archie
I havent been on for a long time so have missed reading your poems
I also started writing again I realy like what you have written God Bless
Freespirt |
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Re: Through the dark valley
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by wizard on
Tuesday, 14th March 2006 @ 07:30:16 AM AEST
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very nicely done.
wiz |
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Re: Through the dark valley
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by Vampirequeen on
Thursday, 16th March 2006 @ 02:45:11 PM AEST
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I would say nicely done too.
awsome job |
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Re: Through the dark valley
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by Wachumiri on
Thursday, 16th March 2006 @ 03:09:43 PM AEST
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Awesome poem. I feel it, it's very uplifting, it touches the heart.
Again, good to see you here after so long.
Take care.
David |
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Re: Through the dark valley
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by ladyfawn on
Thursday, 31st July 2014 @ 02:37:22 PM AEST
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so true! written sooo beautifully, i love this archie, certainly one of your best ever!
hugs n' love nessa |
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