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[aid] => mick
[title] => Time for Plan B
[time] => 2005-12-20 13:32:43
[hometext] => Parts of this may seem painfully obvious, but I assure you, this isn't under this category for no reason. It is a layered write, and dealing with various aspects of different stuff. And yeah...it's also in a bit of a state of disarray...lol
[bodytext] => Let me pimp out my heart, to solicit a sale
charged with prostitution, force a grant of bail
He tried to book without reason, for trespassing and treason
We'll discuss the birds and bees and, the weather, or the season
Grant a promise to appear, for the one who's forsaken
a contusion rendered coma, will his dreams to awaken
Embark on a fairytale, a sleepy story to regale
of a train, destined to derail, the carnage sheds a bloody trail
The conductor walks away shaken, from the grisly scene
an eerie silence blankets the air, that's far from pristine
Flash forward several years, make note of the now dried tears
karma's destiny reappears, making sure guilt adheres
An angel with two first names continues on her lonely trek
bloody and limping, nevertheless; survives the train wreck
An opportunity missed, another one crossed off the list
reached out to be kissed, instead was categorically dismissed
And in conclusion, your honor, regarding my tale of woe
I'll point you to the resting place, where my heart lay six feet below
Now sir; kindly if you will, hand me that arsenic pill
once swallowed, my body grows still; joins my heart upon the hill
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[topic] => 64
[informant] => hauntedscorp
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[score] => 80
[ratings] => 28
[editpoem] => 1
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Time for Plan B
Contributed by
hauntedscorp
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Tuesday, 20th December 2005 @ 01:32:43 PM in AEST
Topic:
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Let me pimp out my heart, to solicit a sale
charged with prostitution, force a grant of bail
He tried to book without reason, for trespassing and treason
We'll discuss the birds and bees and, the weather, or the season
Grant a promise to appear, for the one who's forsaken
a contusion rendered coma, will his dreams to awaken
Embark on a fairytale, a sleepy story to regale
of a train, destined to derail, the carnage sheds a bloody trail
The conductor walks away shaken, from the grisly scene
an eerie silence blankets the air, that's far from pristine
Flash forward several years, make note of the now dried tears
karma's destiny reappears, making sure guilt adheres
An angel with two first names continues on her lonely trek
bloody and limping, nevertheless; survives the train wreck
An opportunity missed, another one crossed off the list
reached out to be kissed, instead was categorically dismissed
And in conclusion, your honor, regarding my tale of woe
I'll point you to the resting place, where my heart lay six feet below
Now sir; kindly if you will, hand me that arsenic pill
once swallowed, my body grows still; joins my heart upon the hill
Copyright ©
hauntedscorp
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2005-12-20 13:32:43]
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Re: Time for Plan B
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by emystar on
Tuesday, 20th December 2005 @ 02:09:20 PM AEST
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Sad but well written.
huggs, happy happy holidays,
emy |
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Re: Time for Plan B
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by In_a_while on
Tuesday, 20th December 2005 @ 02:26:30 PM AEST
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Amazing write... and quite the tale of woe. It's been
a while since i've read your work, and it's only getting
better. I love the last two lines, but along with all the
rest!
Take Care!! |
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Re: Time for Plan B
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 20th December 2005 @ 03:23:16 PM AEST
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Love this poem and of course your style and presentation and the fact that u r in total charge of it's direction, as usual a most masterful peice of poetry second only 2 the
skillfull author who crafted it . . .
((((((((((((Scorp))))))))))))))) **********
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Re: Time for Plan B
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by Eternal_Dreamer on
Tuesday, 20th December 2005 @ 03:28:52 PM AEST
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Sue *applauds* loudly for Scorp. You can always deliver a smashing sensational write.
Although its sadness brings a silence to the air, this is brilliantly penned. I bow to ur excellence dearest Scorp. May ur beautiful heart find the love that it seeks and may it this time around last for a lifetime. You deserve the best girl.
love n hugs from ur fan/friend,
~sue from across the blue~ |
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Re: Time for Plan B
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by brew on
Tuesday, 20th December 2005 @ 08:29:48 PM AEST
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You always know, I love all you write.! Sorry for the tale-tale write.! Guess one cant SEE..........maybe they pretend to BE blind.! Well wonderful as always..it will happen, for you. Just have faith. Always, again wonderful. Hope you have a happy holiday
Brew~ |
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Re: Time for Plan B
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by Archie on
Wednesday, 21st December 2005 @ 01:15:39 AM AEST
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| Still writing pop poetr? This is good I still check in on poetry now and then. I am not surprised by you're noteriety |
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Re: Time for Plan B
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by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 21st December 2005 @ 01:30:08 PM AEST
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(((((((((((((((((((( Scorpawonderful ))))))))))))))))))))
This poem is sooooo powerful it breaks my heart, my Scorperiffic friend.
Yes, yes, you write brilliantly. Your style and use of words are so unique. Yes, talent so rare.
As for poetry, you never disappoint, yet please, I must plead your case. You can't leave such a beautiful heart and lovely person buried where the love you seek will never find you!!!!
Time for Plan N...as in Nooooooooo
Your honor, I object, my Scorperiffic friend acts in haste
I plead with you, as her defender, rethink this case
Trash that arsenic pill and dig up the heart upon the hill
It’s pitted and abused, show mercy for the plaintiff, if you will
Show her there’s always one who will care
Make her knight in shining armor aware
He’s out there and this I know,
For her fair heart his love will bestow
Show her by cleaning the dirt from her heart
Although the knight comes from worlds apart
Her tattered heart shall rise and glow again
Please help to convince my Scorperiffic friend
The pitiful scallywags that did never deserve
We can show if her heart she’ll preserve,
That by rescuing her heart, by cleansing the dirt
Show all the jerks that dare to be a lowly flirt
The knight yet to come for her heart he’ll shout
For her love he will be devoted & stout
For now our friendship will keep her heart so safe
So please your honor, I plead this case
Submitted as court evidence, Plan N.
TIMraider.....poetic attroney at law
1-800-SAVE-A-HEART |
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Re: Time for Plan B
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by Mangos on
Wednesday, 21st December 2005 @ 07:06:49 PM AEST
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a sad poem
a plan b is always good to have
keep writing, im sure it makes it feel better....and your really good at it..(writing poems that is).
nice job scorp |
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Re: Time for Plan B
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by Aquaelius on
Wednesday, 21st December 2005 @ 09:41:40 PM AEST
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Prostitution, train wrecks and dead hearts... Angels with 2 names. Now that's a recipe there. The last lines of the 3rd stanza got me, really stuck out to me. Seems so sad, I feel sad... sad and guilty, but I don't know of what. Just won't be riding any trains.
Aq. |
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Re: Time for Plan B
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by remote on
Thursday, 22nd December 2005 @ 08:55:55 AM AEST
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Whoa, nice one!!
-J |
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Re: Time for Plan B
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by Willofree on
Sunday, 25th December 2005 @ 09:38:23 AM AEST
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Scorp, who continues to write masterfully. Among the layers, there appears to be a journey of trials and tribulations. There appears to be a lot of pain and suffering. The heart is quite resilient if one doesn't give up.
I hope this write does not depict your personal state of mind, Scorp.
Well written, my friend
Will |
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Re: Time for Plan B
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by MrJeans on
Monday, 26th December 2005 @ 01:28:23 PM AEST
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Layered yes, but the sadness
is obvious and felt by the reader
Missed your work scorp.
I've been away, good to be back
Mr. |
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Re: Time for Plan B
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by LostAmbition on
Monday, 26th December 2005 @ 11:21:15 PM AEST
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u say alott in this poem
very depressing to read this:(
Love can hurt so bad
but u should keep lookin
Good poem |
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Re: Time for Plan B
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by Alibi on
Wednesday, 28th December 2005 @ 10:44:09 AM AEST
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| Oh my! This one is terribly, terribly sad and emotive! The visuals this gave me were vivid and heartwrenching. That ending! So very sad. Keep writing out your pain my dear. |
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Re: Time for Plan B
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by mistifi on
Wednesday, 28th December 2005 @ 09:05:55 PM AEST
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| this one is so sad! i felt in my core. great work. i'm new to this and well, its work like yours that tell me that i'm not alone. you have my support....mistifi |
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