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Array ( [sid] => 111345 [catid] => 1 [aid] => mick [title] => It's Done [time] => 2005-12-12 16:55:48 [hometext] => suggestions welcome on what i couldve done better.. [bodytext] => Its done, Im over with now
All time spent is forever lost
No longer able to understand
What went so wrong
No one could ever comprehend
What we saw in each other,
What we tried to be

Its done, Im over with now
Theres no way that this was going to last
We will just be figures of each others past
Like a story book that ends to soon

Its done, Im over with now
Is this the way you wanted it to be?
Is this the way you wanted it to end?
Its done, Im over with now

Its over, what was spent is now lost
All went wrong, figures from our past
A story book with a big imagination
One that cant make it work

Its done, Im over with now but,
This just turned into my show

Soon you will know what its like
And you wont make it trough this

Its done, your over with now [comments] => 3 [counter] => 498 [topic] => 43 [informant] => chanceof_promise [notes] => [ihome] => 0 [alanguage] => english [acomm] => 0 [haspoll] => 0 [pollID] => 0 [score] => 8 [ratings] => 3 [editpoem] => 1 [associated] => [topicname] => oops )

It's Done

Contributed by chanceof_promise on Monday, 12th December 2005 @ 04:55:48 PM in AEST
Topic: oops

Its done, Im over with now
All time spent is forever lost
No longer able to understand
What went so wrong
No one could ever comprehend
What we saw in each other,
What we tried to be

Its done, Im over with now
Theres no way that this was going to last
We will just be figures of each others past
Like a story book that ends to soon

Its done, Im over with now
Is this the way you wanted it to be?
Is this the way you wanted it to end?
Its done, Im over with now

Its over, what was spent is now lost
All went wrong, figures from our past
A story book with a big imagination
One that cant make it work

Its done, Im over with now but,
This just turned into my show

Soon you will know what its like
And you wont make it trough this

Its done, your over with now

Copyright © chanceof_promise ... [ 2005-12-12 16:55:48]
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Re: It's Done (User Rating: 1 )
by iodinelove on Monday, 12th December 2005 @ 05:01:14 PM AEST
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You could spell through right ^_^ beyond that it's great....the repetition is nice...but it does begin to grow old....i would take the fifth stanza out...unless you feel its needed....

also you are is you're although some say your out of sheer laziness....so i dunno...anyway, keep writing ^_^ always, abraham

Re: It's Done (User Rating: 1 )
by Jen54 on Friday, 23rd December 2005 @ 05:28:15 PM AEST
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It alright I didn't really like how you kept repeating that line but it works. Keep up the good work.

Re: It's Done (User Rating: 1 )
by Jackee_line on Tuesday, 28th February 2006 @ 07:11:13 PM AEST
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I like it , i don't think you need to change anything. Keep up the good work.

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