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[aid] => mick
[title] => Torn Apart
[time] => 2005-12-11 13:24:32
[hometext] => Well this poem is about my thoughts while I was locked up..... It's crazy how being away from the world can bring you back it... Anyways, please comment afterwards.
[bodytext] => I live in my nightmare, hoping I can still gain some dreams. My soul has traveled far, there ain't too much, I hadn't already seen.
Some say I was born to hate, and a little hostile on the side. Look I've tried to be humble, but you can't fix something when it's broken from the inside.
They say love is suppose to be the key to settling down. But its just I don't trust nobody anymore and as I see it; I don't think I'll ever come around.
I always prayed to God, asking Him "why He had kept me alive?" Expressing how much I missed my brother, understanding that the bullet never lies, since it took him before I had a chance to say goodbye.
Heaven or Hell? So who really wants me more? I feel like I'm a pawn in this game and only time is keeping the score, never knowing what life will have in store, when it's time for me to walk through those doors. "Living in a world of pain, there are just too many pieces to pick up from the floor."
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[informant] => THUGGIN4REAL
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Torn Apart
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THUGGIN4REAL
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Sunday, 11th December 2005 @ 01:24:32 PM in AEST
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I live in my nightmare, hoping I can still gain some dreams. My soul has traveled far, there ain't too much, I hadn't already seen.
Some say I was born to hate, and a little hostile on the side. Look I've tried to be humble, but you can't fix something when it's broken from the inside.
They say love is suppose to be the key to settling down. But its just I don't trust nobody anymore and as I see it; I don't think I'll ever come around.
I always prayed to God, asking Him "why He had kept me alive?" Expressing how much I missed my brother, understanding that the bullet never lies, since it took him before I had a chance to say goodbye.
Heaven or Hell? So who really wants me more? I feel like I'm a pawn in this game and only time is keeping the score, never knowing what life will have in store, when it's time for me to walk through those doors. "Living in a world of pain, there are just too many pieces to pick up from the floor."
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Re: Torn Apart
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by sararose1950 on
Sunday, 11th December 2005 @ 01:39:05 PM AEST
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thought provoking- let the pieces lay where they are- the soul is the immortal -self healing-will make new and better pieces to fill the void.
Peace and Light |
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Re: Torn Apart
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by Former_Member on
Sunday, 11th December 2005 @ 01:40:41 PM AEST
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| Wonderful poem, you gave it much thought. Important self-awareness, and yes a sense of self sacrifice to be shaped from the outside world. If one must be locked up, may as well lock up the Lord with ya, inside that is. Thank you letting me know of your post, enjoyed. Very, very formative field of experience.... Raquel Leah |
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Re: Torn Apart
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by Former_Member on
Sunday, 11th December 2005 @ 02:01:39 PM AEST
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| A good poem, very well thought out, I liked how the pain was expressed through out the poem, i've often had the same questions on my mind. Good job. *Rose* |
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Re: Torn Apart
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by Sahara on
Sunday, 11th December 2005 @ 02:05:30 PM AEST
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I have to agree very thought provoking, and a bit of it actually touches home with me. All in all great write.
Sonya |
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Re: Torn Apart
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by slogan on
Sunday, 11th December 2005 @ 02:16:51 PM AEST
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| Very good write... keep up the good work, there is a lot of talent here...jh |
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Re: Torn Apart
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by seci on
Sunday, 11th December 2005 @ 02:36:51 PM AEST
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i like this one as well. it seems as though you are sad? or something or someone you have lost in your past by the way you write and express your feeling. i like this poem. i think it is real good that you are expressing your feelings this way then another way. oh if you need someone to talk to you can always talk to me. i think we have alot in common by reading your poems, but truly if there is anything on your mind feel free to write me or either e-mail me.
with all love from seci |
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Re: Torn Apart
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by Patti on
Sunday, 11th December 2005 @ 03:04:53 PM AEST
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| Great poem. Good way to express those dark moments in life which you know you can't take away |
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Re: Torn Apart
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by priss on
Sunday, 11th December 2005 @ 08:28:16 PM AEST
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| wow, this is really good. you express yourself so honestly. |
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Re: Torn Apart
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by trini on
Monday, 12th December 2005 @ 05:38:19 PM AEST
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not a bad write. it's best to leave the pieces where they lay, if you try to force them together you may made a distorted image leaving yourself believeing something that is false. push them aside make room for the new, because you can't grow when broken shards still remain. keep up the good work. i hope to see more soon.
-trini |
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Re: Torn Apart
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by twinkey on
Tuesday, 13th December 2005 @ 05:14:05 PM AEST
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| i loved that poem alot! keep writing that was realy deep and meaningful you can feel your hurt in this good job! |
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Re: Torn Apart
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by NoSaint on
Friday, 13th January 2006 @ 02:31:17 PM AEST
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well written gets to the heart of things
NS |
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Re: Torn Apart
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by Jackee_line on
Tuesday, 14th March 2006 @ 04:48:28 PM AEST
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| well written thought provoking as well |
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