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[aid] => mick
[title] => D.O.A
[time] => 2005-11-22 16:06:31
[hometext] => I grew up in a rough neighbourhood, and got out. Others weren't so lucky...I actually wrote this over a month ago, but some sad news today prompted me to post this.
[bodytext] => The trip of a lifetime
the end of your lifeline
A deadly blow to your solar plexus
impeding vital heart to lung nexus
You only wanted to vent
but payback was more permanent
Hooked up to a breathing apparatus
his heart stops; code blue status
Ambulance attendants tried to intervene
but your spirit already fled the scene
Rocketing through the tunnel of light
shot over fifty bucks, your final plight
Dedicated to: Azim, Chief, Candy, Stretch, Pops, Indy, Goldy, Frenchie, Rolex, and Junior...to name a few.
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[ratings] => 30
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D.O.A
Contributed by
hauntedscorp
on
Tuesday, 22nd November 2005 @ 04:06:31 PM in AEST
Topic:
Lifepoems
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The trip of a lifetime
the end of your lifeline
A deadly blow to your solar plexus
impeding vital heart to lung nexus
You only wanted to vent
but payback was more permanent
Hooked up to a breathing apparatus
his heart stops; code blue status
Ambulance attendants tried to intervene
but your spirit already fled the scene
Rocketing through the tunnel of light
shot over fifty bucks, your final plight
Dedicated to: Azim, Chief, Candy, Stretch, Pops, Indy, Goldy, Frenchie, Rolex, and Junior...to name a few.
Copyright ©
hauntedscorp
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2005-11-22 16:06:31]
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Re: D.O.A
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 22nd November 2005 @ 05:02:19 PM AEST
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one of your most powerful poems scorp, and yes, " here's 2 the old neighbor hood be it be it bad or be it good", sorry 2 hear of your bad news, i can relate 2u , never the less a a strong and beautiful write . . .
((((((((((scorp))))))))))
Ben |
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 22nd November 2005 @ 05:19:25 PM AEST
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OMG, Scorperiffic, this is a heart wrenching tear jerker. So sad and powerful. Your talent never fails to exceed itself. Yes, a very very sad write but awesome nonetheless.
Admittedly it makes one wonder what type of news you got today to inspire posting it today instead of a month ago.
Must have been horrible.
*MAJOR HUGE HUG*
Tim
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 22nd November 2005 @ 07:21:05 PM AEST
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So you have the rough background - that's where you get that fiest lol. I think that particular surrounding has it's good sides though, I know it did for myself. While I'm well aware it has it's bad effects as well. Another heartfelt write scorpz. I think we make decisions that at that time seem most wise, but the consequences prove otherwise. A very truthful write, your emotion was quite profound, and my deepest sympathies for your loss. I can't wait to see more from you.
-Cassy |
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by Eternal_Dreamer on
Tuesday, 22nd November 2005 @ 07:24:05 PM AEST
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My dearest Scorp you never ever cease to amaze me. A very talented and gifted Miss whose writing never disappoints.
This is absolutely sad and heart breaking my friend. I wish you I could've spared u the news that u got. My heart and prayers are with u my dear friend.
*Tons and Tons of love and heartfelt Hugs to u my dearest Scorp*
~sue~
who tries to stop herslef from crying :-( |
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by AnastasiaN on
Tuesday, 22nd November 2005 @ 08:42:57 PM AEST
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| great write and makes me think of back home and about the kids who have been lost and those that are losing. it's a sad but common cycle that i'm sure many people have been affected by. sorry for your losses and take care. |
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by slogan on
Tuesday, 22nd November 2005 @ 09:39:10 PM AEST
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| great write..jh |
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by brokenwings on
Wednesday, 23rd November 2005 @ 03:46:16 AM AEST
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| a very good write, very raw and honest of what happens all to often in the streets of the cities.. |
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by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 23rd November 2005 @ 05:45:38 PM AEST
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| Scorp you are a fantastic write is brilliant,,,Our world is***** ..and your poem proves it ,,,,Eddy |
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by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 23rd November 2005 @ 05:48:57 PM AEST
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| A tragedy dearest Scorp, the smallest quarrels can be tragic. Prayers to you and those who got away. The Lord protects.... He has reasons for these happenings, and I am so sorry.... Better times ahead... its hard to say the right things.. My heart goes out to you nd the whole world....Raquel Leah |
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by jyssvw22 on
Friday, 25th November 2005 @ 08:46:11 PM AEST
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wow scorp, this was a powerful write, im sorry to hear about bad news. nice job here expressing and retelling,
loved it . |
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Re: D.O.A
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by secretwind on
Monday, 28th November 2005 @ 03:56:49 PM AEST
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The ol hood and it's memories,this flow made think about's going on with the old
crew......
so much saddness and sorrow
well done. |
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Re: D.O.A
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 28th November 2005 @ 08:11:20 PM AEST
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Holy crap scorpy! Rough neighbourhood indeed !! *huggles you*
Impressive piece of work here, sweetie. wow. Your words are
always so carefully chosen to exhibit the mood of the poem
ever so perfectly. This was no exception.
~Breezy
(like the dedication too)
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by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 30th November 2005 @ 01:10:09 PM AEST
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Very to the point, and yes raw, but honest.
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Re: D.O.A
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by LostAmbition on
Wednesday, 14th December 2005 @ 12:55:05 PM AEST
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strong thoughts & words
woa. tough life to escape
this is real here no joke poem
i like it scorp. Sorry to hear it. |
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Re: D.O.A
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by Man_On_High on
Sunday, 22nd January 2006 @ 05:53:15 AM AEST
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My Thoughts and Prayers to You,
The Victims and Their Families Scorp-
...and the bell tolls, metaphorically
in the form of the single most powerful
and driving force, (self destruction) continues... a means to an end.
Ya got me thinking.. and a bit ((rattled)) as well-
Peace to You Scorp.. and Throughout-
B |
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Re: D.O.A
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by needledancing on
Tuesday, 15th May 2007 @ 12:08:04 PM AEST
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Sad news indeed. Your capture of the" is" of life rings loud. The senseless loss and crazy no value attitude I can not ever comprehend.
What a write. The more thought I give it, the deeper I go, the more anger and pain surfaces. |
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Re: D.O.A
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by Sheveg on
Tuesday, 31st August 2010 @ 03:50:36 PM AEST
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I'm glad that you got out. Are you a medical professional?
Sherry |
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by allie_07 on
Friday, 18th March 2011 @ 02:57:08 PM AEST
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| wonderful write. |
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Re: D.O.A
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by ladyfawn on
Sunday, 25th May 2014 @ 03:59:14 PM AEST
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we never know when we wake up what will
happen that day; though so sad this is one of
your most heartfelt writes i've ever read, the
poem itself is perfection, but the feelings and
inner you in it are what impresses, you went
deep down inside to pull this one out and it
shows and is truly beautiful,
big hugs n' love nessa
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