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this pain
Contributed by
vampyrekiss
on
Thursday, 17th November 2005 @ 05:21:18 PM in AEST
Topic:
selfstruggles
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This pain is mine
it is not to share
I wanna die
but i cant bear
to see you cry
this pain kills me
but keeps me alive
your happiness
is all I want
so I will go though
another day
for you I live
for you I die
Copyright ©
vampyrekiss
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2005-11-17 17:21:18] (Date/Time posted on
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Re: this pain
(User Rating: 1 ) by shelby on
Thursday, 17th November 2005 @ 06:03:45 PM AEST (User
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beautiful in its sadness. I felt helplessness and inspiration to hold on at the same time
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Re: this pain
(User Rating: 1 ) by EverlastingDawn on
Thursday, 17th November 2005 @ 06:33:28 PM AEST (User
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Awesome poem
Portraying two sides outstounding
Great contrast and blending
Good Write
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Re: this pain
(User Rating: 1 ) by Vermilion on
Saturday, 19th November 2005 @ 12:55:54 PM AEST (User
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The word 'wanna' does not fit at all. It's too common. Nicely done poem, very simple but very sharp.
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Re: this pain
(User Rating: 1 ) by mindless-wish on
Tuesday, 22nd November 2005 @ 09:20:17 PM AEST (User
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nice poem i can realate good writtting and use of words |
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Re: this pain
(User Rating: 1 ) by mindless-wish on
Tuesday, 22nd November 2005 @ 09:20:19 PM AEST (User
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nice poem i can realate good writtting and use of words |
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