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Array ( [sid] => 109599 [catid] => 1 [aid] => mick [title] => I Am Asking. [time] => 2005-11-12 17:56:02 [hometext] => when u find her u better ask right a way or loose again,not me no way. [bodytext] => Can i trust u?
with my life.
Or should i ask u to be my wife.
Can i hold your hand?
o how i pray,to be your man.
Can i kiss u o my friend?
will you be with me till life end?
sharper than a knife
yet i love u wife.
smile so bright,
clean and white .
your words of wisdom
set my heart on firer tonight.
o how i love u to be my wife. [comments] => 3 [counter] => 162 [topic] => 2 [informant] => RICHARD_CAMPBELL [notes] => [ihome] => 0 [alanguage] => english [acomm] => 0 [haspoll] => 0 [pollID] => 0 [score] => 5 [ratings] => 1 [editpoem] => 1 [associated] => [topicname] => LovePoetry )

I Am Asking.

Contributed by RICHARD_CAMPBELL on Saturday, 12th November 2005 @ 05:56:02 PM in AEST
Topic: LovePoetry

Can i trust u?
with my life.
Or should i ask u to be my wife.
Can i hold your hand?
o how i pray,to be your man.
Can i kiss u o my friend?
will you be with me till life end?
sharper than a knife
yet i love u wife.
smile so bright,
clean and white .
your words of wisdom
set my heart on firer tonight.
o how i love u to be my wife.

Copyright © RICHARD_CAMPBELL ... [ 2005-11-12 17:56:02]
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Re: I Am Asking. (User Rating: 1 )
by Whisper on Saturday, 12th November 2005 @ 08:31:35 PM AEST
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Nice write. Thanks fer sharing

Whisper

Re: I Am Asking. (User Rating: 1 )
by Poetic_Influence on Saturday, 12th November 2005 @ 09:49:08 PM AEST
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Use more..."intense words", not being rude, because tis a good poem, but show more emotion

Re: I Am Asking. (User Rating: 1 )
by Silent-No-More on Saturday, 12th November 2005 @ 11:55:30 PM AEST
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This is personal opinion, so do with it what you will --- but... "sharper than a knife" seems terribly out of place here. Other than being an obvious rhyme for 'wife', it doesn't seem to fit with the general mood of the piece. I feel the same about "friend", I'm afraid... an obvious rhyme for 'end', but not particularly effective when speaking of someone you wish to be your wife. Sometimes near rhyme or imperfect rhyme is simply more effective than going with the obvious rhyme. I do hope you don't mind me adding my two cents here... as I said earlier, it is only this reader's opinon - disregard it if you see fit to do so.

~Snemmy

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