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[sid] => 109549
[catid] => 1
[aid] => mick
[title] => If It Was Enough
[time] => 2005-11-11 18:43:27
[hometext] => With thanks to Breezy, who forced me to post this :P
[bodytext] => These tears don't seem enough,
It's like I've forgotten how to cry.
Yet I know the tears are waiting,
Hidden behind these eyes.
They're pondering the moment,
Where will, will surely break,
And wail would be heard again,
These tears will soothe the ache.
And I can feel, my chest is burning,
Breathing is getting tough,
I'd cry out to the world, somehow,
If I felt it was enough.
But people's eyes are glazing,
Hard and cold like steel,
There is no one here to turn to.
And I'm lost in what I feel.
But my eyes are misting over,
Soon sleep will take its hold,
I'll burrow down into my bed,
And pray I will grow old.
For closer to the ending,
Will happiness begin,
But instead I'll die inside myself,
And find solitude, within.
So I'll close my eyes to block the light,
And sleep will comfort me,
For behind my eyes, lost in tears,
Dreams are reality.
Somewhere, I'll have a place to hide,
A place where pain will end.
And in the morning when I wake,
I'll remember life again.
[comments] => 13
[counter] => 347
[topic] => 61
[informant] => lostinmyself
[notes] =>
[ihome] => 0
[alanguage] => english
[acomm] => 0
[haspoll] => 0
[pollID] => 0
[score] => 49
[ratings] => 10
[editpoem] => 1
[associated] =>
[topicname] => selfstruggles
)
If It Was Enough
Contributed by
lostinmyself
on
Friday, 11th November 2005 @ 06:43:27 PM in AEST
Topic:
selfstruggles
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These tears don't seem enough,
It's like I've forgotten how to cry.
Yet I know the tears are waiting,
Hidden behind these eyes.
They're pondering the moment,
Where will, will surely break,
And wail would be heard again,
These tears will soothe the ache.
And I can feel, my chest is burning,
Breathing is getting tough,
I'd cry out to the world, somehow,
If I felt it was enough.
But people's eyes are glazing,
Hard and cold like steel,
There is no one here to turn to.
And I'm lost in what I feel.
But my eyes are misting over,
Soon sleep will take its hold,
I'll burrow down into my bed,
And pray I will grow old.
For closer to the ending,
Will happiness begin,
But instead I'll die inside myself,
And find solitude, within.
So I'll close my eyes to block the light,
And sleep will comfort me,
For behind my eyes, lost in tears,
Dreams are reality.
Somewhere, I'll have a place to hide,
A place where pain will end.
And in the morning when I wake,
I'll remember life again.
Copyright ©
lostinmyself
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2005-11-11 18:43:27]
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Re: If It Was Enough
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by Former_Member on
Friday, 11th November 2005 @ 06:57:05 PM AEST
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and rightfully so missy!!! lol
I'm so in love with this piece, as you well know sweetie.
It's so beautifully crafted and deeply profound. I mentioned
on one of Jarred's that I really adore it when I can feel and hear the
poet's heart. Yours is screaming it's lungs out !! But oh, so very
softly ... it's positively beautiful. Sometimes I am stilled by talent alone ..
this is one of those times ..
*hugs you tons*
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Re: If It Was Enough
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by sprinter27 on
Friday, 11th November 2005 @ 07:00:11 PM AEST
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wow, i loved this, it is great!!! i love the emotion built up in it and the way you expressed yourself. and i know exactly how you feel. i really loved reading this, just realize that you aren't a lone. it was a great write, keep up the terrific work!!!
~sprints |
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Re: If It Was Enough
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by Kie-Kie on
Friday, 11th November 2005 @ 07:03:01 PM AEST
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*cries* Philomena I'm sorry you've been feeling this way *huggles* You know you can always talk to me
This was very well written, and it obviously has impact on it's readers *counts self as exhibit A*
Love ya,
~Kiela~ |
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Re: If It Was Enough
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by Eternal_Dreamer on
Friday, 11th November 2005 @ 08:37:49 PM AEST
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I'm so sorry you have been feeling like this as of late dearest Phil. Your poem is packed with so much emotion and sadness. May your days ahead be much brighter sweet girl.
A truly talented Miss with such a beautiful heart.
*heartfelt hugs for u Phil*
sue |
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Re: If It Was Enough
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by Fionndruinne on
Saturday, 12th November 2005 @ 02:16:35 AM AEST
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Well, Phil. This has, I think, a little more raw you to it than usual, as if it was not written to be seen, which I suppose may be the case. Still, it's beautiful and very heartfelt. I like those italacized final lines, and I think you picked just the right words in each of them.
God bless you, my friend.
Andrew |
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Re: If It Was Enough
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by hauntedscorp on
Saturday, 12th November 2005 @ 07:19:34 PM AEST
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PhillyGirl, I really need to visit your account page more often...I am never disappointed with your heartfelt writes. They are always so very honestly expressed, and flow along so well, no matter the emotion. This had a very melancholy feel to it, and it tugs at the heart, for sure. Beautifully wriiten, as always.
((((((((((((((((((Phil)))))))))))))))))))))))))))))
Scorp. |
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Re: If It Was Enough
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 15th November 2005 @ 04:03:43 PM AEST
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oh you....sigh...such a sad and heartfelt write....makes me wanna give you a hug till everything is allright.
You write such emotional pieces Philly...um...yeah.... |
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Re: If It Was Enough
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by Willofree on
Tuesday, 15th November 2005 @ 04:05:42 PM AEST
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A sad lament, but beautifully written. The emotion and meloncholy really come through on this one. There is a soft gentle flow and and rhythum to the poem. I feel a lonely feeling when I read the poem, yet the ending is rather optomistic or hopeful.
Peace be with you, Phil. I hope you will be feeling better; and thanks for sharing this lovely poem. Thanks to Breezy for encouraging you to post it!
Will |
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Re: If It Was Enough
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by Eve on
Thursday, 17th November 2005 @ 07:27:02 PM AEST
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I agree with Andrew; the italics are placed at all the right points.
Potent with emotion. I enjoyed reading this.
-Eve. |
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Re: If It Was Enough
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by lovingcritters on
Thursday, 17th November 2005 @ 10:03:40 PM AEST
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Oh Phil the places you take my mind and heart, I love to tag along........and I'm never disappointed either. So many people now a days are afraid to cry......We suppress our feelings thinking if we stuff them deep enough they will never surface.........but this poem shows so eloquently that you can sleep them away, until another day, but someday, all those hidden tears will show themselves...........and I'm always afraid they will never stop.
My you are so talented in writing the truths of human nature, and I enjoyed this one so much.
Warm love
consue |
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Re: If It Was Enough
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by Former_Member on
Friday, 18th November 2005 @ 10:21:14 AM AEST
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| A wonderful write full of emotion I loved it ,,you get a very well done from me,,,Eddy |
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Re: If It Was Enough
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by Former_Member on
Friday, 18th November 2005 @ 03:08:20 PM AEST
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That was very sad and beautifully written, PhillyGirl. I'm glad Breezy "forced" you to post it :) You should always listen to the "Breeze."
This was an incredible write, yes, sad but do I detect a note of postitive hope at the end, where you'll wake and remember life again? I hope so.
Thank you for sharing and take care,
Tim
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Re: If It Was Enough
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by silent on
Sunday, 27th November 2005 @ 07:19:39 PM AEST
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I love poetry when it relates so much and this one hit a strong nerve. Now this shows what an incredible writer you are reaches far down and rips emotion out. I dont have any more words for you except you have touched me with this deeper than almost anything i have read before..well done and you look after yourself
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