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[aid] => mick
[title] => Delusion
[time] => 2005-11-11 11:38:12
[hometext] => this is written in the third person...uhhhh i think thats how i would say it...
[bodytext] => she's got it mixed in obsessive reflection...looking for daylight to shine on her face...over her head and straight to her heart...and still she didn't get that part...wanted to play alongside in the show...her backdrop gained a bit of delusion...at a loss in your meaningless words...and for another they've been laid deep...so close the creeping eyes that twist these metaphors...in your disguise as the longing lover...sickness flows deep in your blood...bring on the boil of reality lost...bubbling up and pouring over from your fingers...i'll be making a mess of your face...if your mind wanders in that space of gratification undeserved...a listless lonely mind is search of the divine...colors of purple are a royal hue...dissolving all her sugar on me and a taste i know would set you free...how selfish i'll be when i get my candy...catch a ride on the first express that goes straight to your hell...sit in the fire and burn...because we're hand in hand now
[comments] => 2
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[topic] => 43
[informant] => absolutspin
[notes] => Edited for Spelling as Requested by Moderator_15
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Delusion
Contributed by
absolutspin
on
Friday, 11th November 2005 @ 11:38:12 AM in AEST
Topic:
oops
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she's got it mixed in obsessive reflection...looking for daylight to shine on her face...over her head and straight to her heart...and still she didn't get that part...wanted to play alongside in the show...her backdrop gained a bit of delusion...at a loss in your meaningless words...and for another they've been laid deep...so close the creeping eyes that twist these metaphors...in your disguise as the longing lover...sickness flows deep in your blood...bring on the boil of reality lost...bubbling up and pouring over from your fingers...i'll be making a mess of your face...if your mind wanders in that space of gratification undeserved...a listless lonely mind is search of the divine...colors of purple are a royal hue...dissolving all her sugar on me and a taste i know would set you free...how selfish i'll be when i get my candy...catch a ride on the first express that goes straight to your hell...sit in the fire and burn...because we're hand in hand now
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Re: Delusion
(User Rating: 1 )
by LostAmbition on
Friday, 11th November 2005 @ 12:23:44 PM AEST
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love this!
lots of thoughts
to digest here
i think it would be
better in stanzas though
and u spelled 'lonely' wrong :)
still very good & full of strong
emotions & contempt
good stuff! keep it up :p |
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Re: Delusion
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by absolutspin on
Friday, 11th November 2005 @ 02:42:09 PM AEST
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| yep i sure did spell it wrong...ehhh and i clicked the spell check button...so much for that and really there's only one main thought in the whole thing...yeah and my writing normally doesn't have a very good flow...maybe i should just post under abstract from now on... |
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