Welcome to Your Poetry Dot Com - Read, Rate, Comment on, or Submit Poetry. Browse Poetry Forums, or just enjoy other parts of our poetic community.
One of the largest databases of poetry on the net, now over 198,500+ poems!
Welcome to Your Poetry Dot Com    Poems On Site: 198,500+   Comments On Poems: 427,000+   Forum Posts: 105,000+
Custom Search
  Welcome ! Home  ·  FAQ  ·  Topics  ·  Web Links  ·  Your Account  ·  Submit Poetry  ·  Top 30  ·  OldSite Link 29-May 16:29:32 AEST  
  Menu
  Home
· Micks Shop
· Our eBay Store· Error Submit
 Poetry
· Submit Poetry
· Least Read Poems
· Topics
· Members Listing
· Old Site Post 2001
· Old Site Pre 2001
· Poetry Archive
· Public Domain Poetry
 Stories
· Stories (NEW ! )
· Submit Story
· Story Topics
· Stories Archive
· Story Search
  Community
· Our Poetry Forums
· Our Arcade
100's of Games !

  Site Help
· FAQ
· Feedback

  Members Areas
· Your Account
· Members Journals
· Premium Sign-Up
  Premium Section
· Special Section
· Premium Poems
· Premium Submit
· Premium Search
· Premium Top
· Premium Archive
· Premium Topics
 Fun & Games

· Jokes
· Bubble Puzzle
· ConnectN
· Cross Word
· Cross Word Easy
· Drag Puzzle
· Word Hunt
 Reference
· Dictionary
· Dictionary (Rhyming)
· Site Updates
· Content
· Special Content
 Search
· Search
· Web Links
· All Links
 Top
· Top 30
  Help This Site
· Donations
 Others
· Recipes
· Moderators
Our Other Sites
· Embroidery Design Store
· Your Jokes
· Special Urls
· JM Embroideries
· Public Domain Poetry and Stories
· Diamond Dotz
· Cooking Info and Recipes
· Quoof - Australian Story

  Social

Array ( [sid] => 108802 [catid] => 1 [aid] => mick [title] => just cut deeper [time] => 2005-10-31 09:52:34 [hometext] => i got bored and started writing it. i guess its a convo b/w a girl and the demon inside her [bodytext] => are you gonna finish what you started?
no i cant do it
but didnt you already cut?
come on do it more
you know you want to
it makes you feel better
yes but they think im crazy
ahh who cares what they think
its your body
come one just a little deeper
and then you'll be better
no i cant
you can
just give it a try
but im not ready to say goodbye
look they dont care about you
thats not true i know they do
no your wrong
they never wanted you
yes they did
i cant do it
im scared
dont be
you've cut deep before
show me how you did it
just pick up the blade
thats a good girl
now cut deeper
just like before
quit crying
your gonna be fine
but what if ..
what if what?
what if they miss me?
they wont
they'll be better off without you
yea i guess your right
thats my girl
are you ready?
yes i am
ok now take the blade and finish it
good girl
a little deeper and you'll be done with it
thats it
your my girl right?
yes im your girl
forever?
yes forever and always
thats good
look its done
its over
now follow me
your going to hell


[comments] => 3 [counter] => 247 [topic] => 59 [informant] => mjh0813 [notes] => [ihome] => 0 [alanguage] => english [acomm] => 0 [haspoll] => 0 [pollID] => 0 [score] => 9 [ratings] => 2 [editpoem] => 1 [associated] => [topicname] => psychoticpoems )
just cut deeper

Contributed by mjh0813 on Monday, 31st October 2005 @ 09:52:34 AM in AEST
Topic: psychoticpoems



are you gonna finish what you started?
no i cant do it
but didnt you already cut?
come on do it more
you know you want to
it makes you feel better
yes but they think im crazy
ahh who cares what they think
its your body
come one just a little deeper
and then you'll be better
no i cant
you can
just give it a try
but im not ready to say goodbye
look they dont care about you
thats not true i know they do
no your wrong
they never wanted you
yes they did
i cant do it
im scared
dont be
you've cut deep before
show me how you did it
just pick up the blade
thats a good girl
now cut deeper
just like before
quit crying
your gonna be fine
but what if ..
what if what?
what if they miss me?
they wont
they'll be better off without you
yea i guess your right
thats my girl
are you ready?
yes i am
ok now take the blade and finish it
good girl
a little deeper and you'll be done with it
thats it
your my girl right?
yes im your girl
forever?
yes forever and always
thats good
look its done
its over
now follow me
your going to hell






Copyright © mjh0813 ... [ 2005-10-31 09:52:34]
(Date/Time posted on site)





Advertisments:






Previous Posted Poem         | |         Next Posted Poem


 
Sorry, comments are no longer allowed for anonymous, please register for a free membership to access this feature and more
All comments are owned by the poster. Your Poetry Dot Com is not responsible for the content of any comment.
That said, if you find an offensive comment, please contact via the FeedBack Form with details, including poem title etc.
Re: just cut deeper (User Rating: 1 )
by shadowmoon on Monday, 31st October 2005 @ 10:19:05 AM AEST
(User Info | Send a Message)
creepy. this is something even i have
srugled with. good wright. strong and
thought pervoking.


Re: just cut deeper (User Rating: 1 )
by onedysturbdchick on Wednesday, 9th November 2005 @ 04:18:13 AM AEST
(User Info | Send a Message)
very sad.....but also a great poem. i deal with my own demons day after day, so i can totally relate


Re: just cut deeper (User Rating: 1 )
by PureAmethyst on Tuesday, 29th November 2005 @ 09:14:24 AM AEST
(User Info | Send a Message)
wow! i loved this, had to keep reading. Very sad and emotional but lots of detail. I love the questioning throughout the write and the way this girl seems to be talking to someone. Very well done with this. Keep up the great work :) x




While every care is taken to ensure the general sites content is family safe, our moderators cannot be in all places; all the time. Please report poetry and or comments that are in breach of our site rules HERE (Please include poem title or url). Parents also please ensure that you supervise your children well when they are on the internet; regardless of what a site says about being, or being considered, child-safe.

Poetry is much like a great photo, a single "moment in time" capturing many feelings and emotions. Yet, they are very alive; creating stirrings within the readers who form visual "pictures" of the expressed emotions within the Poem. ©

Opinions expressed in the poetry, comments, forums etc. on this site are not necessarily those of this site, its owners and/or operators; but of the individuals who post items to this site.
Frequently Asked Questions | | | Privacy Policy | | | Contact Webmaster

All submitted items are Copyright © to their submitter. All the rest Copyright © 2002-2050 by Your Poetry Dot Com

All logos and trademarks in this site are property of their respective owners.

Script Generation Time: 0.052 Seconds. - View our Site Map | .© your-poetry.com