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[aid] => mick
[title] => In The End
[time] => 2005-10-17 19:31:23
[hometext] => Please...i am new to poetry so comment....good bad or otherwise
[bodytext] => If death lurks behind every loose brick,
If life can be ended by but a single slip,
Whats left for us, those such as I,
Only one thing is certain...Were all going to die
[comments] => 9
[counter] => 195
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[informant] => Chronos
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In The End
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Chronos
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Monday, 17th October 2005 @ 07:31:23 PM in AEST
Topic:
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If death lurks behind every loose brick,
If life can be ended by but a single slip,
Whats left for us, those such as I,
Only one thing is certain...Were all going to die
Copyright ©
Chronos
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2005-10-17 19:31:23]
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Re: In The End
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by nail-to-the-head on
Monday, 17th October 2005 @ 07:37:15 PM AEST
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short but to the point, i like it!
+ nail-to-the-head + |
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Re: In The End
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by emystar on
Monday, 17th October 2005 @ 07:42:14 PM AEST
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A great start.
huggs,
emy |
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Re: In The End
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by Mild_Tempest on
Monday, 17th October 2005 @ 07:45:36 PM AEST
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| Welcome to the site. Short but direct. I love it! Keep writing. |
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Re: In The End
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by Minus_Blindfold on
Monday, 17th October 2005 @ 07:51:44 PM AEST
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| good for a start... |
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Re: In The End
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by wizard on
Monday, 17th October 2005 @ 07:54:51 PM AEST
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i thought this was good, you should try a longer poem next...perhaps you can elaborate on this poem with a four stanza poem by using the first three lines to begin the first three stanzas...and use the last line to end the last stanza...keep writing!!
wizard |
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Re: In The End
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 17th October 2005 @ 08:56:18 PM AEST
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Hey your not so bad lol, you don't need others to tell you if your writings good though, write what you want, you don't need to base things on others opinions. If you like it, is what matters. But great write, I enjoyed reading it, can't wait for more.
-Cassy |
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Re: In The End
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by ChibiMiroku on
Monday, 17th October 2005 @ 10:07:47 PM AEST
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| Short poems are always a great start. I do have to say, though, that this was a good start indeed. Just remember to try and write poems that aren't dark once in a while. Try writing something really happy next. Good luck! |
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Re: In The End
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by Loende on
Tuesday, 18th October 2005 @ 05:50:06 AM AEST
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This is a great begining! Keep writing, and keep posting.
Be well,
Loende |
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Re: In The End
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by AshRayne on
Wednesday, 19th October 2005 @ 09:22:40 PM AEST
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First off, welcome to the site. i myself only became a member 2 months ago, and let me say that i love it here. i hope your experience will be as good as mine was.
Next, i would like to say that i like your little poem. very mysterious, as if holding a deeper meaning. one could only read, and re-read, hoping to find more peices to the intriguing puzzle.
exquisite writing that is your gift, be blessed, for you are perfection.
~Ash |
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