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You ended up in the hospital

They sedated you and said
That you might not make it.

You slipped away four days later
Without saying goodbye...

In the newspaper and on TV
Was a story of a fatal car crash

You were in it
With three of your friends

Your friends survived
But you slipped away...

Muscular Dystrophy limited you
You were becoming weaker

You weren't in school one day
We all thought you were sick

The next day we were told
That you slipped away...

These are the people
I have lost this year,

That I wish I could see
Just one more time,

I will never forget them
Forever in my heart they'll stay

XoFireangel27
May 26, 2005
revised: October 13, 2005
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Loved Ones I've Lost (revised)

Contributed by xofireangel27 on Thursday, 13th October 2005 @ 08:18:06 PM in AEST
Topic: Grief

You grew ill and weak
You ended up in the hospital

They sedated you and said
That you might not make it.

You slipped away four days later
Without saying goodbye...

In the newspaper and on TV
Was a story of a fatal car crash

You were in it
With three of your friends

Your friends survived
But you slipped away...

Muscular Dystrophy limited you
You were becoming weaker

You weren't in school one day
We all thought you were sick

The next day we were told
That you slipped away...

These are the people
I have lost this year,

That I wish I could see
Just one more time,

I will never forget them
Forever in my heart they'll stay

XoFireangel27
May 26, 2005
revised: October 13, 2005

Copyright © xofireangel27 ... [ 2005-10-13 20:18:06]
(Date/Time posted on site)

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Re: Loved Ones I've Lost (revised) (User Rating: 1 )
by Mild_Tempest on Thursday, 13th October 2005 @ 10:26:10 PM AEST
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wow that really touched my heart. beautiful write. it mixed in a lot of missed emotions. thanks for sharing.

Re: Loved Ones I've Lost (revised) (User Rating: 1 )
by Archie on Thursday, 13th October 2005 @ 10:49:29 PM AEST
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This was a good write. I can really relate to this.

Re: Loved Ones I've Lost (revised) (User Rating: 1 )
by Puppy_dog_eyes on Thursday, 20th October 2005 @ 02:52:06 PM AEST
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This was very touching.I guess you get so used to people being there that you just never think that one day they will be gone.
I remember as a child in school losing a close friend.......one day he was there, the next ........his life blown out like a candle.
Like you say, at least they can stay in our hearts forever.

Steve

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