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[title] => Can anyone Hear me????
[time] => 2005-10-01 19:31:44
[hometext] => Not suitable for A Weak Mind
[bodytext] => Have I siezed my final thought? Have I not grown, not paid the cost? Why can't they see or validate my claims, have I really become this unordained? if I took you there, you be so scared, you'd run and hide, inside you'd cry until you'd found just whats behind. Is this really fear I feel or something else thats closing near? Into these depths I've crept and crept, I still can't see just what is left? What happened here, I thought I'd cleared, my mind was fine, now I've been undermined? To what do I owe this clever infraction, is there something I did to cause this attraction? Do I really deserve what my mind does to me? Am I really this evil inside this disease? Can I not be saved or taken away, has this pain I feel inside enslaved.. Who will care when I become unaware, will they all look away and pretend to pray as they hope for the best for an untimely death? Do they really see me for what I believe or can they only see need through what they've percieved? The loss of innocence is an inevitable gain,but if I could go back I'd stay just the same. To the ends of the earth I'd go just to find,just what was lost and left far behind. If only once I had this chance I'd humbly go back and let my soul be enhanced. I'd take with me all that I'd need to see right through what doesn't bleed. How could someone take from what your heart breaks then look at you, as if it were true, after all you'd been through ? If God is above, why can't he free me? Can he not see? Does he not want to believe? And Why would he allow, all that I've embowled, can't he just take away the part of my brain that won't leave me alone so I can somehow move on? WHy do I have to be this way, why is it me whose minds' estranged? If I WISHED this all away, would it go or should I PRAY? "Dear God just release me from this prison I keep, take it from me before it can see, that I'm barely here, nothing left but my fears, and left so ungaurded I'd only be easy target. What is it with me, that I can never just be so happy and free, so full of intrigue over lifes little things? Why do i still try to become so defined by lifes complications, seeking out to embrace them? Let me go...Let Me go... Let Me go......Let me go and be free, stay out of my soul for I'm all out of control, Its taken its toll as only older I grow. I guess its just me, I cannot escape it, when the one that is causing it is the only one who can take it.. Overuled by Guilt, empowered by danger, I look at me know and I'm becoming a stranger. I dont want to forget the real me thats inside, so swallowing my pride I ask God to guide. Take me back to the place where my heart was erased, give me back my conscience and restore my faith. Just please take away all that is so crazed and give back to me all of those forgotten days. I keep this on fire so I wont expire without someone to know that my mind has been blown and it wasn't just "nothing" that kept me in suffering. My mind is a place where I'm only disgraced, and living in here is so severe that I had to bring forth just what drives my force, let you see inside so one day you'd find, that I never had the answers, I never had a clue, Ive just been doing what I thought your supposed to.
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Can anyone Hear me????
Contributed by
kerrah681
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Saturday, 1st October 2005 @ 07:31:44 PM in AEST
Topic:
selfstruggles
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Have I siezed my final thought? Have I not grown, not paid the cost? Why can't they see or validate my claims, have I really become this unordained? if I took you there, you be so scared, you'd run and hide, inside you'd cry until you'd found just whats behind. Is this really fear I feel or something else thats closing near? Into these depths I've crept and crept, I still can't see just what is left? What happened here, I thought I'd cleared, my mind was fine, now I've been undermined? To what do I owe this clever infraction, is there something I did to cause this attraction? Do I really deserve what my mind does to me? Am I really this evil inside this disease? Can I not be saved or taken away, has this pain I feel inside enslaved.. Who will care when I become unaware, will they all look away and pretend to pray as they hope for the best for an untimely death? Do they really see me for what I believe or can they only see need through what they've percieved? The loss of innocence is an inevitable gain,but if I could go back I'd stay just the same. To the ends of the earth I'd go just to find,just what was lost and left far behind. If only once I had this chance I'd humbly go back and let my soul be enhanced. I'd take with me all that I'd need to see right through what doesn't bleed. How could someone take from what your heart breaks then look at you, as if it were true, after all you'd been through ? If God is above, why can't he free me? Can he not see? Does he not want to believe? And Why would he allow, all that I've embowled, can't he just take away the part of my brain that won't leave me alone so I can somehow move on? WHy do I have to be this way, why is it me whose minds' estranged? If I WISHED this all away, would it go or should I PRAY? "Dear God just release me from this prison I keep, take it from me before it can see, that I'm barely here, nothing left but my fears, and left so ungaurded I'd only be easy target. What is it with me, that I can never just be so happy and free, so full of intrigue over lifes little things? Why do i still try to become so defined by lifes complications, seeking out to embrace them? Let me go...Let Me go... Let Me go......Let me go and be free, stay out of my soul for I'm all out of control, Its taken its toll as only older I grow. I guess its just me, I cannot escape it, when the one that is causing it is the only one who can take it.. Overuled by Guilt, empowered by danger, I look at me know and I'm becoming a stranger. I dont want to forget the real me thats inside, so swallowing my pride I ask God to guide. Take me back to the place where my heart was erased, give me back my conscience and restore my faith. Just please take away all that is so crazed and give back to me all of those forgotten days. I keep this on fire so I wont expire without someone to know that my mind has been blown and it wasn't just "nothing" that kept me in suffering. My mind is a place where I'm only disgraced, and living in here is so severe that I had to bring forth just what drives my force, let you see inside so one day you'd find, that I never had the answers, I never had a clue, Ive just been doing what I thought your supposed to.
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Re: Can anyone Hear me????
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by PrincessJen on
Saturday, 1st October 2005 @ 11:07:17 PM AEST
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| I love the way you expressed yourself this is absolutely an amazing write that I can relate too. Keep your head up....good luck and take care |
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Re: Can anyone Hear me????
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by toddy29 on
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| I know how rough times can be, and I'm in one right now....but always try your best to be positive. Best of luck to you, and there is always someone who cares about you out there, even if you don't realize it! :) |
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by emystar on
Sunday, 2nd October 2005 @ 07:02:36 AM AEST
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Ah yeah, loud-n-clear!
Very powerfull, meaningfull write.
huggs,
emy |
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Re: Can anyone Hear me????
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by justme03 on
Sunday, 2nd October 2005 @ 06:55:26 PM AEST
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Heard you loud and clear! I love this poem so much! It makes me feel like im not alone. I'm going through some stuff right now too within my mind and its reeeally getting me down. Just kno ur not alone. *huggles* If you ever need to talk id b more then glad to talk with you and listen. If you got msn you can add me. my address is black-rose614@hotmail.com. If you don't have msn, just PM me netime.
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by Former_Member on
Sunday, 2nd October 2005 @ 07:06:50 PM AEST
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| WOW an amazing poem....... Awesome job!!! |
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Re: Can anyone Hear me????
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by Archie on
Sunday, 2nd October 2005 @ 10:58:07 PM AEST
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I see alot in this.
In the end you ask God for something but let's take it one step further, does God ask you for anything -there is no repaying God for what he's done but is what you ask for free? |
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by Lin54 on
Monday, 3rd October 2005 @ 04:34:53 PM AEST
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I love this one! Thank you for sharing--You added hope and hope there is.
Thank you!
Linda |
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Re: Can anyone Hear me????
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by Fionndruinne on
Monday, 3rd October 2005 @ 07:26:57 PM AEST
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Well spoken. I found this moving, and I identified too, I think. I like the ending.
What this needs is flow, I think. It was gripping, but if the words and lines could be more spaced, it would pace it, and improve the feeling.
Just experiment, try things out. There's no hurry to make the perfect poem, and it all takes practice. Keep it up.
Andrew |
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