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[aid] => mick
[title] => millions are dying
[time] => 2005-09-24 15:36:51
[hometext] => this poem is my own origional work. to me it is dark and quite morbid. most people are amazed that i wrote this because i'm only a 14 year old girl. please post comments!!!!
[bodytext] => every second i live,
i feed on depression,
dying's a given,
can't stop my obsession,
feeling this hate,
traped deep inside,
the unknown knows all,
so there's no need to hide,
i'm lost here forever,
start counting the days,
that the millions will fight,
for freedom to stay,
this generations gone wrong,
it's just not the same,
it's driving the hatred,
of millions insane,
we've past the betrail,
but we're stuck in the past,
soon it'll be over,
so why make it last?
[comments] => 13
[counter] => 322
[topic] => 13
[informant] => grim6669
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[alanguage] => english
[acomm] => 0
[haspoll] => 0
[pollID] => 0
[score] => 25
[ratings] => 5
[editpoem] => 1
[associated] =>
[topicname] => DarkPoetry
)
millions are dying
Contributed by
grim6669
on
Saturday, 24th September 2005 @ 03:36:51 PM in AEST
Topic:
DarkPoetry
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every second i live,
i feed on depression,
dying's a given,
can't stop my obsession,
feeling this hate,
traped deep inside,
the unknown knows all,
so there's no need to hide,
i'm lost here forever,
start counting the days,
that the millions will fight,
for freedom to stay,
this generations gone wrong,
it's just not the same,
it's driving the hatred,
of millions insane,
we've past the betrail,
but we're stuck in the past,
soon it'll be over,
so why make it last?
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grim6669
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2005-09-24 15:36:51]
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Re: millions are dying
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by lostrelic on
Saturday, 24th September 2005 @ 03:51:41 PM AEST
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| lets hope you find more out of life then such depression as a thirty one year old i have many poems as you write and i hate the way i feel try to change your hope |
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Re: millions are dying
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by JenJen on
Saturday, 24th September 2005 @ 03:55:56 PM AEST
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wow this is reli gd well done keep it up
jenni
xxx |
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Re: millions are dying
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by Xsitm on
Saturday, 24th September 2005 @ 04:07:34 PM AEST
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| your right, i do like it and it's very well written... keep it up |
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Re: millions are dying
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by autumn_zephyr on
Saturday, 24th September 2005 @ 05:01:06 PM AEST
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| I the younger writers are sometimes under-estimated, good write. |
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Re: millions are dying
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by autumn_zephyr on
Saturday, 24th September 2005 @ 05:01:27 PM AEST
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| I guess* |
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Re: millions are dying
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by loura on
Saturday, 24th September 2005 @ 05:09:09 PM AEST
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this is a really good poem...well done!!
xx
laura |
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Re: millions are dying
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by LyricalTearz on
Saturday, 24th September 2005 @ 08:29:24 PM AEST
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Although this world does seem very depressing at times, especially since most of the negative attributes are overexposed by media and such, I hope you can try and focus on some of the more positive things in life. You are still so young and have a long way to go and will see many more things both good and bad before it is all said and done. Keep writing, you did very well on this piece.
Lyric ;-) |
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Re: millions are dying
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by upomik on
Sunday, 25th September 2005 @ 03:29:38 PM AEST
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good write
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Re: millions are dying
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by Former_Member on
Sunday, 25th September 2005 @ 04:39:26 PM AEST
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Hello grim;
Well, and do you believe in God, and if so, grab hold. I am christian, so you know I believe in Jesus and He is my everything, keeps me in the light.
If everyone dwelled on the past, we would never get our dirty dishes washed. Look forward to each day, always a bright day. Rejoice if you wake up in the morning, that is a wonderful start.
Keep writing,
Raquel Leah :D |
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Re: millions are dying
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by Dark_and_Cold on
Monday, 10th October 2005 @ 05:01:56 PM AEST
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| Very nice, short and sweet...well not sweet in a typical way....short...at least :P I like your hook at the end... |
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Re: millions are dying
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by de5tructo on
Sunday, 13th November 2005 @ 10:51:36 PM AEST
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| I like the way you rhyme even the most difficult of words. I very much enjoyed this dark write. |
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Re: millions are dying
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by skibblez on
Saturday, 3rd March 2007 @ 07:52:00 AM AEST
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| that waz sum deep stuff i felt that shiit in my heart but yeahh you a good writer and keep upp tha good workk......... |
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Re: millions are dying
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by skibblez on
Saturday, 3rd March 2007 @ 08:00:36 AM AEST
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| that waz sum deep stuff i felt that shiit in my heart but yeahh you a good writer and keep upp tha good workk......... |
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