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[aid] => mick
[title] => Demons In Between
[time] => 2005-09-18 14:55:58
[hometext] => *** The first stanza, laid down last night - begged to exist alone. I... didn't listen. That's either a horrible mistake... or... a very, very good thing. ***
[bodytext] =>
Daylight escapes their clutches
But Night never fares as well
Beneath a moon too far to reach
Their powers seem to swell
They creep into the darkness
Suck the air out of a dream
They claw and bite and sting and pull
These demons in between
And I, their favorite victim
Mute with fear I cannot name
Exposed there in bed each night
As they set the room aflame
I cower in the corner
Shut my eyes to what I’ve seen
They laugh and scream and squeal delight
The demons in between
This game we play each evening
With a skill that’s been refined
Through relentless repetition
Unwanted though each time
But this night, something changes
The fear lessened, it would seem
They wince and shrink and fade a bit
Those demons in between
For the first time I have seen
Through the flames' amber glow
In the mirror’s strange reflection
The truth at last is shown
Sound asleep in bed am I
Dancing in the fire of dreams
Each breath so deep that I push out
My demons in between
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[ratings] => 10
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Demons In Between
Contributed by
Silent-No-More
on
Sunday, 18th September 2005 @ 02:55:58 PM in AEST
Topic:
StoryPoetry
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Daylight escapes their clutches
But Night never fares as well
Beneath a moon too far to reach
Their powers seem to swell
They creep into the darkness
Suck the air out of a dream
They claw and bite and sting and pull
These demons in between
And I, their favorite victim
Mute with fear I cannot name
Exposed there in bed each night
As they set the room aflame
I cower in the corner
Shut my eyes to what I’ve seen
They laugh and scream and squeal delight
The demons in between
This game we play each evening
With a skill that’s been refined
Through relentless repetition
Unwanted though each time
But this night, something changes
The fear lessened, it would seem
They wince and shrink and fade a bit
Those demons in between
For the first time I have seen
Through the flames' amber glow
In the mirror’s strange reflection
The truth at last is shown
Sound asleep in bed am I
Dancing in the fire of dreams
Each breath so deep that I push out
My demons in between
Copyright ©
Silent-No-More
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2005-09-18 14:55:58]
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Re: Demons In Between
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by Mild_Tempest on
Sunday, 18th September 2005 @ 03:29:38 PM AEST
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| Completely stunning, beautiful. The picture is so clear and the descriptions are vivid. I loved this poem. |
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Re: Demons In Between
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by jambo on
Sunday, 18th September 2005 @ 04:09:14 PM AEST
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wow its great, it really paint an image in my mind
beautiful |
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Re: Demons In Between
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by Archie on
Sunday, 18th September 2005 @ 04:40:24 PM AEST
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| This is very good. I can definately relate to this on many levels. I liked the rhyme scheme and poise of your theme. |
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Re: Demons In Between
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by Former_Member on
Sunday, 18th September 2005 @ 05:54:42 PM AEST
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SNM, I sorely missed your poetry!! And I'm glad to have read
this tongiht. It is outstanding!! You have such an amazing,
imaginative talent! I am never disappointed when I visit
your pages. Something I am definitely going to make time to do....
And I have no shame in pilfering one of your made up words....
super-duper-fantabulous!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
~Breezy |
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Re: Demons In Between
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by Fionndruinne on
Monday, 19th September 2005 @ 03:11:36 AM AEST
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Well now! This is wonderfully written work, and vivid. The meaning behind it is even better - it is truly amazing, the meanings we poets are given sometimes, I think. And almost frightening.
Well done!
Andrew |
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Re: Demons In Between
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by anitajames on
Monday, 19th September 2005 @ 10:06:14 AM AEST
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| Breathtaking. I could feel myself in this like it was happening to me. Great Write! |
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Re: Demons In Between
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by lostinmyself on
Monday, 19th September 2005 @ 03:51:52 PM AEST
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Snemmy, I've missed you.
Hmmm, I do adore that first stanza, it's the best part of the poem... but I don't think it would have been complete if you hadn't carried it on.
I LOVE this. It's so...you... but like something has snapped, has been released. It makes it all the more real.
Fantastic write, my friend,
It's good to see you writing again.
*hugs*
Phil xxx |
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Re: Demons In Between
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by ArsenicMyst on
Monday, 19th September 2005 @ 06:37:02 PM AEST
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so very alarming, corrupt and evil ...
yet, reassuring all the well
beautiful
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Re: Demons In Between
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by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 21st September 2005 @ 04:38:11 AM AEST
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| Brilliant piece of potry I loved it ,,hugs Eddy |
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Re: Demons In Between
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by Man_On_High on
Thursday, 29th September 2005 @ 09:56:17 PM AEST
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I love the repetitive line..
"demons in between"
the well marshalled flow of that line,
coupled with the words..
"These..The...Those" ...and .."My"
..and in that order of stanzas,
made for a most enjoyable
and rythmic flow..
Think this would make a ..Bllboard song-
Sincerely,
Billy |
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Re: Demons In Between
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by Wachumiri on
Friday, 30th September 2005 @ 11:23:37 AM AEST
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The first stanza didn't know what it was thinking. Good job with not listening to it. I loved it, though.
Congratulations on a poem well written.
Take care.
David |
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Re: Demons In Between
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by ForeverAlone on
Saturday, 29th October 2005 @ 08:09:58 PM AEST
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Bravo Snemm, what a write, i loved it, it seemed to create the mood that it longed for, and in the same notion leave a bit of wanting more...hmm very good wording also.
~Clark |
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Re: Demons In Between
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by Former_Member on
Friday, 28th April 2006 @ 09:50:42 AM AEST
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Absolutely brilliant!!! Your words and imagery are absolute magic! I love the way you (or the person) fought off their demons!!!
I applaud thee.....seriously applauding.
Thank you,
So thoroughly enjoyable.
Timber
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