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Array ( [sid] => 105598 [catid] => 1 [aid] => mick [title] => Breathing Fresh Air [time] => 2005-09-13 03:30:35 [hometext] => [bodytext] => I feel a little nervous,
My eyes search back and forth... stomach a little unsettled.
The words come across slowly, precisely.
My heart beats slower, my throat feels sandy.
The world gets a little heavier, stuffier.
I can only watch the last bits of you flutter away.

I've been here before, lost in some empty nothingness.
Where there are no sunrises, no theme music.
Every task is now more difficult.
The lights don't shine as bright, food's lost its taste.
I've been here before, there's nothing really strange about it.
Everything's familiar. Everythings still the same.

My eyes want to tear, I crave the wet streaks on my cheeks.
The pain, the helpless-ness. The clenched fists.
Time standing still? I think it is. Right?
I miss you, I think about you... I feel your hand in mine.
I remember your smell, the way your body laid next to mine.
Your arms held me a certain way. I remember.

I've been here before. The colors aren't quite as bright, the dark a little darker.
The world so much bigger, my role so much smaller.
I know this place...
I can still breathe, the air is still good.
Hope still has a scent; roses still are sweet.

You're not here anymore.
I still miss you, still think of you... in smaller breaths.
But I can still breathe the fresh air. [comments] => 8 [counter] => 262 [topic] => 22 [informant] => Aquaelius [notes] => [ihome] => 0 [alanguage] => english [acomm] => 0 [haspoll] => 0 [pollID] => 0 [score] => 31 [ratings] => 7 [editpoem] => 1 [associated] => [topicname] => LostLove )
Breathing Fresh Air

Contributed by Aquaelius on Tuesday, 13th September 2005 @ 03:30:35 AM in AEST
Topic: LostLove



I feel a little nervous,
My eyes search back and forth... stomach a little unsettled.
The words come across slowly, precisely.
My heart beats slower, my throat feels sandy.
The world gets a little heavier, stuffier.
I can only watch the last bits of you flutter away.

I've been here before, lost in some empty nothingness.
Where there are no sunrises, no theme music.
Every task is now more difficult.
The lights don't shine as bright, food's lost its taste.
I've been here before, there's nothing really strange about it.
Everything's familiar. Everythings still the same.

My eyes want to tear, I crave the wet streaks on my cheeks.
The pain, the helpless-ness. The clenched fists.
Time standing still? I think it is. Right?
I miss you, I think about you... I feel your hand in mine.
I remember your smell, the way your body laid next to mine.
Your arms held me a certain way. I remember.

I've been here before. The colors aren't quite as bright, the dark a little darker.
The world so much bigger, my role so much smaller.
I know this place...
I can still breathe, the air is still good.
Hope still has a scent; roses still are sweet.

You're not here anymore.
I still miss you, still think of you... in smaller breaths.
But I can still breathe the fresh air.




Copyright © Aquaelius ... [ 2005-09-13 03:30:35]
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Re: Breathing Fresh Air (User Rating: 1 )
by tonydread on Tuesday, 13th September 2005 @ 05:41:29 AM AEST
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yo ur realy good can u help me learn to write


Re: Breathing Fresh Air (User Rating: 1 )
by Jenni_K on Tuesday, 13th September 2005 @ 07:42:16 AM AEST
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Well done!! You have described the loneliness and pain so well here..
Thank you..
Jenni


Re: Breathing Fresh Air (User Rating: 1 )
by ladyfawn on Tuesday, 13th September 2005 @ 08:31:04 AM AEST
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sooo beautifully written, i totally love this poem,

hugs n' love nessa

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Re: Breathing Fresh Air (User Rating: 1 )
by anitajames on Tuesday, 13th September 2005 @ 10:11:19 AM AEST
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Hope still has a scent.

This is my favorite line in your poem. Very nice write.


Re: Breathing Fresh Air (User Rating: 1 )
by MorningDove on Tuesday, 13th September 2005 @ 04:36:53 PM AEST
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I've been there a couple of times and this like the shock before the pain sets in. Then the dark numbness sets in and eventually hope comes back through and life will begin again. The initial loss for me was always without emotion, just total numb trauma before the pain. But you are right, you can still breathe and "Hope still has a scent; roses still are sweet."

Rita


Re: Breathing Fresh Air (User Rating: 1 )
by gwenevere on Tuesday, 13th September 2005 @ 04:46:34 PM AEST
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A lot of emotion here.Alone but not quite so lost, Ros


Re: Breathing Fresh Air (User Rating: 1 )
by Former_Member on Monday, 19th September 2005 @ 09:30:16 PM AEST
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very good write. I got that bittersweet feeling from this poem. I can relate to this poem. Maybe you can give me some tips on how to still breathe the fresh air. Enjoyed reading this and thanks for sharing.


Re: Breathing Fresh Air (User Rating: 1 )
by emystar on Tuesday, 31st January 2006 @ 07:29:10 AM AEST
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This write is breathe taking.
I know the feelings.
huggs,
emy




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