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Rusty Strings
Contributed by
bubbletoes
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Saturday, 10th September 2005 @ 02:48:23 PM in AEST
Topic:
oops
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broken down melodys that never used to be broken
stepping stones in the pond that never used to be stepped on
dragonflies and rusty strings
puppys in pounds, a sad song they sing
bleeding hearts that never used to bleed
but mended together with the with sprouts from beans
thoughts and feelings that were never there
your sweet candy toes, and the smell of your hair
An old boat in the water, one paddel, two seats,
our friends the tadpoles they swim underneath
the humidity in the air is so thick you can taste
but its good for the skin and good for the face,..
rusty strings and dragonflies
the guitar is the only one that crys
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bubbletoes
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2005-09-10 14:48:23] (Date/Time posted on
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Re: Rusty Strings
(User Rating: 1 ) by WAE on
Saturday, 10th September 2005 @ 03:24:25 PM AEST (User
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Very good narration... Easy and flowing... Good writing..
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Re: Rusty Strings
(User Rating: 1 ) by Elayner27 on
Friday, 23rd September 2005 @ 09:40:53 PM AEST (User
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I love how it flows, in and out of beauty and mystery and wonder. I love the last 2 - 4 lines in every stanza. Strange and wonderful.
Elayna
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Re: Rusty Strings
(User Rating: 1 ) by The_Unknown on
Saturday, 24th June 2006 @ 02:10:49 PM AEST (User
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I really like your poem. It reminds me of a lot of things. it flows nice and has good wording. all I really can say is, I LOVE IT!!!
You like Jack Johnson; right? |
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