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[catid] => 1
[aid] => mick
[title] => Leaving Her Sleeping
[time] => 2005-08-30 18:22:21
[hometext] => Perhaps it sounds a bit conceited, but ... this one is beautifully simplistic and if I say so myself, simply beautiful
[bodytext] =>
Reaching out slowly
I lay my hand on her
And I feel her tremble
'Neath my gentle touch
She is a vision of
Beauty, like none other
And at this moment
I want her so much
But
She is sleeping
I don't want to wake her
She is dreaming
I don't want to take her
From where she is now
And whatever place
Has left her with that
Smile gracing her face
Morning is breaking
I soon must be leaving
Now one whispered kiss
And then I'll make my way
Into the world where the
Wicked are waiting
To keep me from her
For another long day
And
She is sleeping
I don't want to wake her
She is dreaming
I don't want to take her
From where she is now
And whatever place
Has left her with that
Smile gracing her face
I pray for the days when I won't have to leave her
Lying in wait for me to return home
I wish she could know how I ache when I see her
Lying asleep in our bed all alone
Still
She is sleeping
I don't want to wake her
She is dreaming
I don't want to take her
From where she is now
And whatever place
Has left her with that
Smile gracing her face
Oh, where she is now
And whatever place
Has left her with that
Smile gracing
Her face
[comments] => 11
[counter] => 1051
[topic] => 34
[informant] => Nazmythian
[notes] =>
[ihome] => 0
[alanguage] => english
[acomm] => 0
[haspoll] => 0
[pollID] => 0
[score] => 45
[ratings] => 9
[editpoem] => 1
[associated] =>
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)
Leaving Her Sleeping
Contributed by
Nazmythian
on
Tuesday, 30th August 2005 @ 06:22:21 PM in AEST
Topic:
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Reaching out slowly
I lay my hand on her
And I feel her tremble
'Neath my gentle touch
She is a vision of
Beauty, like none other
And at this moment
I want her so much
But
She is sleeping
I don't want to wake her
She is dreaming
I don't want to take her
From where she is now
And whatever place
Has left her with that
Smile gracing her face
Morning is breaking
I soon must be leaving
Now one whispered kiss
And then I'll make my way
Into the world where the
Wicked are waiting
To keep me from her
For another long day
And
She is sleeping
I don't want to wake her
She is dreaming
I don't want to take her
From where she is now
And whatever place
Has left her with that
Smile gracing her face
I pray for the days when I won't have to leave her
Lying in wait for me to return home
I wish she could know how I ache when I see her
Lying asleep in our bed all alone
Still
She is sleeping
I don't want to wake her
She is dreaming
I don't want to take her
From where she is now
And whatever place
Has left her with that
Smile gracing her face
Oh, where she is now
And whatever place
Has left her with that
Smile gracing
Her face
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Nazmythian
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Re: Leaving Her Sleeping
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by poet_of_anger on
Tuesday, 30th August 2005 @ 06:39:36 PM AEST
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| Concieted? Not a chance, this is great work! Very nicely done, beautiful, just like you said. |
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Re: Leaving Her Sleeping
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by lostinmyself on
Tuesday, 30th August 2005 @ 06:45:20 PM AEST
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Not concieted at all, Scott. You should take pride in something as beautiful as this.
I love this. It's so...soft. Like, it's a very calm song. You can almost hear the feelings.
Once again, beautiful, and loving.
Great write,
Phil xxx |
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Re: Leaving Her Sleeping
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by GurlyTye on
Tuesday, 30th August 2005 @ 07:35:38 PM AEST
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| i really liked this one papa.. i really liked this one |
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Re: Leaving Her Sleeping
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by Archie on
Tuesday, 30th August 2005 @ 07:36:49 PM AEST
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| I like it. It appeals to me because that is what I try to do as a writer. Good write |
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Re: Leaving Her Sleeping
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by Willofree on
Tuesday, 30th August 2005 @ 07:57:16 PM AEST
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This is a beautiful work; and I don't respond to your comments as conceit. I think it is a good thing when we can think positively about our writting. While we want to be humble, false humility is not appealing any more then bragging.
So well done; and well said, my friend
Will/Terry |
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Re: Leaving Her Sleeping
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by MorningDove on
Tuesday, 30th August 2005 @ 08:53:26 PM AEST
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No conceit here, just beautifully penned perfection. Scott, this is so simplistic but radiates warmth, love and desire. It flowed so smoothly. The structure was great and the imagery had a gauzy-like sleep feel to it which in my eyes enhanced it.
Smiles,
Rita |
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Re: Leaving Her Sleeping
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by blowfish_jane on
Wednesday, 31st August 2005 @ 04:56:51 AM AEST
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*Sighs*
This was just beautiful Scott, you've always shown your sweet and caring side. Which unfortunately lacks in some men i know this days.
And no i didn't think this was a conceited write. Not at all.
Good poem as always Scotty.
Jane~ |
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Re: Leaving Her Sleeping
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by FleurdeSang on
Wednesday, 31st August 2005 @ 06:05:39 PM AEST
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See? What'd I tell ya, the introduction is perfect for this, cheri! ^.^ Not a hint of conceitedness in there, my friend.
This was... "simply" divine, for lack of a better word. You have this ability where you can manipulate these vivid paintings into a few phrases, and then you turn around and throw us a complex beauty with expressions of the most beguiling and intriguing proportions. I could see your gentle hand hovering over her face as she slumbered tranquilly, dreaming dreams of bliss and love with that enchanting smile upon her face... Delicate, and radiant in its simplicity, cheri Scott. You have outdone yourself, yet again!
My deepest apologies, mon ami, for my negligence as well... It has been too long without your words of exquisite magnificence. Thank you so much for sharing with us, as always, a wondrous pleasure to read your work again. I will begin my lengthy journey through your page ASAP, doux chasseur. :-). Adored this piece! All my love. Forever,
Votre petite fleur de bonheur et amour,
~*Stephy*~ P.S.-Merci beaucoup for your lovely comment on my latest! *squeezies* |
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Re: Leaving Her Sleeping
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by sweetangeluk on
Friday, 2nd September 2005 @ 04:16:08 PM AEST
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I could see this being a no 1 hit.
So very beautiful words fail me it was magnificent so tender and so full of love
love Angelxxxx |
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Re: Leaving Her Sleeping
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by Former_Member on
Friday, 2nd September 2005 @ 05:23:07 PM AEST
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So beautifully written.
What a patient person you are. And how wise too. If this write was you the character, than I say to you.. you do not lack love. You are kind, having a heart for someone you care so much for. Allowing that person to have their own space.. I can just see you touching her, not wanting to disturb a smiling dream.
*****She is dreaming
I don't want to take her
From where she is now
Just gentle patience.. love.. and I know she is dreaming of you.
Not conceit, just a knowledge of pure true love.
We poets all share your love for your write.
Raquel Leah :D |
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Re: Leaving Her Sleeping
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by Former_Member on
Saturday, 17th September 2005 @ 04:42:24 PM AEST
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Oh Nazzy, I think I love this one the most! This is the second
time I've been back to read it, but my mediocre comments
could just never do this justice. I am simply at a
loss for words....
How about stunning? gorgeous? sweet, gentle, romantic?
Simply beautiful? Yes, quite so. MAGNIFICENTLY so!
~Breezy
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