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[aid] => mick
[title] => Plastic Walls
[time] => 2005-08-29 11:50:09
[hometext] => This is the first poem I've written in 7 months. It's nothing great, but I don't hate it. Inspired a good deal by Butch Walker's 'Don't Move'.
[bodytext] => Emptiness, constantly
I lost the words to say it right
To even say it at all
I never found my feet
My wings are far too tired to fly
To even move me at all
And there’s nothing I can do
I cannot fall to you
No safe place to land or firm ground to stand upon
And it all just feels so wrong
So alone all along
‘Cause you never cared, no you never shared a thing
I think I’d like to soar
But I’m too small to stand that tall
To even get up at all
Searching for something more
But can’t get past this plastic wall
To find anything at all
But something’s there, I feel it
A warmth that doesn’t fit
In my room of pain, endless bouts of rain that fall
Down the window of my mind
Into a place I hide
And I think it might just prove to be right in time
I hope you’re there to know
And see me make it out alive
If I make it out at all
Someday I’ll let this go
Maybe in time to realize
What this means, if anything at all
I’ll still be wide awake
Yeah I’ll be right here when you call
If you call for me at all
Because everything breaks
And you’re the one who’ll break my fall
Don’t ever move at all
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[informant] => MoonlitAngel
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[acomm] => 0
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[score] => 34
[ratings] => 11
[editpoem] => 1
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Plastic Walls
Contributed by
MoonlitAngel
on
Monday, 29th August 2005 @ 11:50:09 AM in AEST
Topic:
EmotionalPoetry
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Emptiness, constantly
I lost the words to say it right
To even say it at all
I never found my feet
My wings are far too tired to fly
To even move me at all
And there’s nothing I can do
I cannot fall to you
No safe place to land or firm ground to stand upon
And it all just feels so wrong
So alone all along
‘Cause you never cared, no you never shared a thing
I think I’d like to soar
But I’m too small to stand that tall
To even get up at all
Searching for something more
But can’t get past this plastic wall
To find anything at all
But something’s there, I feel it
A warmth that doesn’t fit
In my room of pain, endless bouts of rain that fall
Down the window of my mind
Into a place I hide
And I think it might just prove to be right in time
I hope you’re there to know
And see me make it out alive
If I make it out at all
Someday I’ll let this go
Maybe in time to realize
What this means, if anything at all
I’ll still be wide awake
Yeah I’ll be right here when you call
If you call for me at all
Because everything breaks
And you’re the one who’ll break my fall
Don’t ever move at all
Copyright ©
MoonlitAngel
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2005-08-29 11:50:09]
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Re: Plastic Walls
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by Willofree on
Monday, 29th August 2005 @ 12:50:28 PM AEST
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Welcome back, glad to see you submitting a poem again. I like the verse and flow of this write. It seems to represent a somewhat ambivalent romantic endeavor, where you experience a lot of uncertainty regarding this relationship.
Well done
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Re: Plastic Walls
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by Jenni_K on
Monday, 29th August 2005 @ 01:10:19 PM AEST
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Good to see you writing again, Moonlit...
This is very deep...
Hugs
Jenni
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Re: Plastic Walls
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by stellarview on
Monday, 29th August 2005 @ 03:16:23 PM AEST
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This poem pretty much kicks ass!
I hope to have time to read more of your stuff. |
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Re: Plastic Walls
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by MorningDove on
Monday, 29th August 2005 @ 03:28:46 PM AEST
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| Wow Dee, a lot of emotional depth here. I sense a fear of lack of inner strength. You are strong, you just have to try and see. You won't ever learn to fly if you don't try. You might fall once or twice, but you are smart, you will get the hang of it. If love is real, it will still be there to catch you on those falls. I may have interpreted this wrong, sorry if I did. I just know it is a wonderful piece of work. Rita |
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Re: Plastic Walls
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 29th August 2005 @ 06:46:17 PM AEST
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wow very powerful. I love the last part
"I'll still be wide awake
Yeah I"ll be right here when you call
If you call for me at all
Because everything breaks
And you're the one who'll break my fall
Don't ever move at all."
Hits close to home for me. Good write and thanks for sharing. |
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Re: Plastic Walls
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by Kie on
Monday, 29th August 2005 @ 07:37:45 PM AEST
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This touched my very soul and maybe even deeper. It may have been a long time since you have written but the poems from deep inside us always are the best.
I have to share a little something I saw yesterday---because your poem brought this to mind. I saw a hawk perched on a fence post in the rain. He or she had turned itself towards the wind (i'm thinking to try and dry their wings) but I knew, I just knew that when those wings dried---that hawk would soar again.
You are a strong woman. I've read this in your poems---very strong. May your heart longings come true.
Keep writing Moonlight---we are blessed to have your talent here...
Kie :) |
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Re: Plastic Walls
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 30th August 2005 @ 03:58:38 PM AEST
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I never knew you could write like this, i had an idea from the forum, and read somthing u wrote a long time ago this is very nice indeed very sincere and with a lot of depth 2 it, quite frankly, kind of refreshing, nice 2 see u writting more . . .
Ben |
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Re: Plastic Walls
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by arakrune on
Thursday, 1st September 2005 @ 04:25:04 AM AEST
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great poem
really good flow to it
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Re: Plastic Walls
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by blowfish_jane on
Thursday, 1st September 2005 @ 06:14:26 PM AEST
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Wow Dee what can i say. This was deeply moving.
It's good to see you posting a poem again. I really really loved this one, since i can relate to it.
So thanks for sharing it with us.
Jane~ |
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Re: Plastic Walls
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by Butterflygirl40 on
Monday, 21st November 2005 @ 01:45:29 AM AEST
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| very good poem |
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Re: Plastic Walls
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by Former_Member on
Friday, 31st March 2006 @ 01:55:04 AM AEST
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You have first class writing skills a very impressive piece.
J. |
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