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[sid] => 104039
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[aid] => mick
[title] => A Thousand Needles
[time] => 2005-08-20 23:41:23
[hometext] => I revised this poem recently since I first wrote it. I hope you enjoy it.
[bodytext] => A thousand needles
hammering on the roof,
reverberating
within my empty heart,
piercing the very fabric
of my soul.
Unheard agonies
utterly expressed,
long retained tears
finally relinquished.
The water drips,
slipping from the roof in tiny rivulets,
silent and constant
exhausting my resolve,
mimicking the torment
sliding down my coarse cheeks.
While the torrent will eventually end,
the pain will endure
[comments] => 16
[counter] => 1391
[topic] => 43
[informant] => xlguesswho14xx
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[ihome] => 0
[alanguage] => english
[acomm] => 0
[haspoll] => 0
[pollID] => 0
[score] => 15
[ratings] => 4
[editpoem] => 1
[associated] =>
[topicname] => oops
)
A Thousand Needles
Contributed by
xlguesswho14xx
on
Saturday, 20th August 2005 @ 11:41:23 PM in AEST
Topic:
oops
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A thousand needles
hammering on the roof,
reverberating
within my empty heart,
piercing the very fabric
of my soul.
Unheard agonies
utterly expressed,
long retained tears
finally relinquished.
The water drips,
slipping from the roof in tiny rivulets,
silent and constant
exhausting my resolve,
mimicking the torment
sliding down my coarse cheeks.
While the torrent will eventually end,
the pain will endure
Copyright ©
xlguesswho14xx
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Re: A Thousand Needles
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by xXxmegsxXx on
Monday, 22nd August 2005 @ 06:07:29 AM AEST
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a powerful write, well done
megs xXx |
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Re: A Thousand Needles
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by FlirtQueen on
Monday, 5th September 2005 @ 08:59:51 PM AEST
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| that was a powerful poem, there was so much insight to feelings that are sometimes forgotten!! great job!! flirtqueen! |
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Re: A Thousand Needles
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by car21221 on
Wednesday, 19th October 2005 @ 11:53:55 AM AEST
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| i think it is pretty good |
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Re: A Thousand Needles
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by ShadowFox on
Tuesday, 21st February 2006 @ 08:11:33 PM AEST
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| Power. Nice write. |
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Re: A Thousand Needles
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by Aeicha on
Thursday, 27th April 2006 @ 06:12:45 PM AEST
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| very emotional and sad. made me wanna cry |
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Re: A Thousand Needles
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by razrXbldXrmnc on
Thursday, 1st June 2006 @ 06:11:30 PM AEST
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| very well done...I love it |
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Re: A Thousand Needles
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by twbanter on
Monday, 21st August 2006 @ 05:32:56 PM AEST
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| Very well written. I liked it. It had some power, subtle, yet flagrant there. |
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Re: A Thousand Needles
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by darkangeleyes57 on
Wednesday, 1st November 2006 @ 08:34:34 AM AEST
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Powerful and deep... I enjoyed reading this... Great poem..
Take care
Christina |
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Re: A Thousand Needles
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by Errious on
Wednesday, 6th December 2006 @ 11:16:18 AM AEST
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Cool poem! Very vivid and a good use of methaporic language and imagery.
tom. |
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Re: A Thousand Needles
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by Saloni on
Tuesday, 30th October 2007 @ 01:31:11 AM AEST
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wow! i must say this is a really heart touching poem full with emotions and contrast.. i could relate with this poem its a beautiful write..
well done! jus hang on life's tough have to jus face it.. once again its a brilliant write enjoyed readin.. |
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Re: A Thousand Needles
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by ponginas on
Saturday, 16th August 2008 @ 11:43:11 AM AEST
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| deep man, i was captured in the poem withing the first lines..good poem |
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Re: A Thousand Needles
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by 3660Days on
Wednesday, 24th December 2008 @ 06:51:24 AM AEST
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| Good imagery. I love the concept at the ending, but maybe word it a little more subtle. Then again, maybe not... God bless |
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Re: A Thousand Needles
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by 3660Days on
Sunday, 5th April 2009 @ 07:30:45 PM AEST
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| well stated |
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Re: A Thousand Needles
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by Sheveg on
Saturday, 26th June 2010 @ 05:09:24 PM AEST
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If you don't mind me asking what caused the pain?
Sherry |
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Re: A Thousand Needles
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by shereal_14 on
Wednesday, 7th July 2010 @ 07:53:04 PM AEST
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| This write really moved me keep them coming! |
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Re: A Thousand Needles
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by Sheveg on
Tuesday, 16th November 2010 @ 02:37:47 PM AEST
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Excellent!
Sherry |
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