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[title] => Always Loving you
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[bodytext] => I have always loved you since we first met it was like a ball going to a net. If you would just let me know if you have always had the same felings for me as I have had for you. It remains a fact though that I have always loved you. Even when we grew it is like a magnet my love for you. I will always be true and kind to you and hope you love me as I do you.
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Always Loving you
Contributed by
PolarBear
on
Tuesday, 16th August 2005 @ 01:00:01 PM in AEST
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I have always loved you since we first met it was like a ball going to a net. If you would just let me know if you have always had the same felings for me as I have had for you. It remains a fact though that I have always loved you. Even when we grew it is like a magnet my love for you. I will always be true and kind to you and hope you love me as I do you.
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Re: Always Loving you
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 16th August 2005 @ 01:18:52 PM AEST
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sweet poem... ty 4 sharin
~~~Michelle~~~ |
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Re: Always Loving you
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by Alibi on
Tuesday, 16th August 2005 @ 02:19:08 PM AEST
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| To be honest, the rhyming comes across as forced. A ball to a net and rhymes like that really take away from a write. Especially a love poem!! Also there's no format! You just wrote it side to side, and stretched it as far as you could go. If you cleaned up the layout a bit, it would look more professional. I would guess you're just starting out in poetry, so take helpful suggestions into account and grow as a writer. Good luck! |
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