Your Poetry Dot Com

Welcome to Your Poetry Dot Com - Read, Rate, Comment on, or Submit Poetry. Browse Poetry Forums, or just enjoy other parts of our poetic community.
One of the largest databases of poetry on the net, now over 198,500+ poems!

Poems On Site: 198,500+ Comments On Poems: 427,000+ Forum Posts: 105,000+

Custom Search


Welcome !	Home · FAQ · Topics · Web Links · Your Account · Submit Poetry · Top 30 · OldSite Link	29-May 21:02:39 AEST

Menu

· Our eBay Store

· Error Submit

Poetry

· Submit Poetry

· Least Read Poems

· Members Listing

· Old Site Post 2001

· Old Site Pre 2001

· Poetry Archive

· Public Domain Poetry

Stories

· Stories (NEW ! )

· Submit Story

· Story Topics

· Stories Archive

· Story Search

Community

· Our Poetry Forums

· Our Arcade
100's of Games !

Site Help

· FAQ

· Feedback

Members Areas

· Your Account

· Members Journals

· Premium Sign-Up

Premium Section

· Special Section

· Premium Poems

· Premium Submit

· Premium Search

· Premium Archive

· Premium Topics

Fun & Games

· Jokes

· Bubble Puzzle

· Cross Word Easy

· Word Hunt

Reference

· Dictionary (Rhyming)

· Site Updates

· Special Content

Search

Top

Help This Site

· Donations

Others

· Moderators

Our Other Sites

· Embroidery Design Store
· Your Jokes
· Special Urls
· JM Embroideries
· Public Domain Poetry and Stories
· Diamond Dotz
· Cooking Info and Recipes
· Quoof - Australian Story

Social

Array ( [sid] => 103029 [catid] => 1 [aid] => mick [title] => Your Worst Critic [time] => 2005-08-08 21:25:18 [hometext] => [bodytext] => I hate the sight of you
that you're ugly and vain
and so self-involved that
Your composure's been slain

You'll never be good enough
At least not in my eyes
I can see you're conceited
though you're nobody's prize

You think you look great
you take every glance in
didn't anyone ever tell you,
that vanity is a sin?

You can't pass a mirror
without checking yourself out
you live in a world
that is unbound by doubt

Your nose is too narrow
your calves are too thin
you have so many flaws
there's no way you can win

Your eyes are far apart
and your toes are too long
"An image of beauty,"
you think, but you're wrong

And without brains or beauty
you'll never meet your goals
I guess God's perfect plan
just had too many holes

You're in a vicous cycle
because you need to look good
so you can't be yourself
you can't be what you should

One day you'll die
you'll have just been a face
no one will remember
gone without a trace

People lose who they are
in themselves, they can't see
everyone is their own worst critic
so, you're worst critic is...me [comments] => 7 [counter] => 210 [topic] => 61 [informant] => Unbreakable [notes] => [ihome] => 0 [alanguage] => english [acomm] => 0 [haspoll] => 0 [pollID] => 0 [score] => 10 [ratings] => 2 [editpoem] => 1 [associated] => [topicname] => selfstruggles )

Your Worst Critic

Contributed by Unbreakable on Monday, 8th August 2005 @ 09:25:18 PM in AEST
Topic: selfstruggles

I hate the sight of you
that you're ugly and vain
and so self-involved that
Your composure's been slain

You'll never be good enough
At least not in my eyes
I can see you're conceited
though you're nobody's prize

You think you look great
you take every glance in
didn't anyone ever tell you,
that vanity is a sin?

You can't pass a mirror
without checking yourself out
you live in a world
that is unbound by doubt

Your nose is too narrow
your calves are too thin
you have so many flaws
there's no way you can win

Your eyes are far apart
and your toes are too long
"An image of beauty,"
you think, but you're wrong

And without brains or beauty
you'll never meet your goals
I guess God's perfect plan
just had too many holes

You're in a vicous cycle
because you need to look good
so you can't be yourself
you can't be what you should

One day you'll die
you'll have just been a face
no one will remember
gone without a trace

People lose who they are
in themselves, they can't see
everyone is their own worst critic
so, you're worst critic is...me

Copyright © Unbreakable ... [ 2005-08-08 21:25:18]
(Date/Time posted on site)

Advertisments:

Previous Posted Poem | | Next Posted Poem

Sorry, comments are no longer allowed for anonymous, please register for a free membership to access this feature and more

All comments are owned by the poster. Your Poetry Dot Com is not responsible for the content of any comment.
That said, if you find an offensive comment, please contact via the FeedBack Form with details, including poem title etc.

Re: Your Worst Critic (User Rating: 1 )
by SiLeNtxxThunder on Monday, 8th August 2005 @ 09:43:29 PM AEST
(User Info | Send a Message)

"......I guess God's perfect plan
just had too many holes..."
i like that part.
well done with the poem =)

Re: Your Worst Critic (User Rating: 1 )
by SiLeNtxxThunder on Monday, 8th August 2005 @ 09:43:30 PM AEST
(User Info | Send a Message)

"......I guess God's perfect plan
just had too many holes..."
i like that part.
well done with the poem =)

Re: Your Worst Critic (User Rating: 1 )
by Essentially9 on Monday, 8th August 2005 @ 10:04:04 PM AEST
(User Info | Send a Message)

::applauds:: this is one the of the best poems ive read in a long time, which is surprising since i hardly like poems this long, the writer tends to bore me by 2nd stanza, but this one didnt. your ending was excellent. very good rhyme scheme.

Re: Your Worst Critic (User Rating: 1 )
by MorningDove on Monday, 8th August 2005 @ 10:05:49 PM AEST
(User Info | Send a Message)

This is a great write. Most people know this but won't admit it. We are our own worst critics. We might as well be ourselves for that is all we have. We may paint it, hide it, pretend otherwise, but you cannot truly change what you are. Facades are fake and people generally realize that. Hope you can bolster your strength and begin to see you are exactly who you are supposed to be in this universe.

Smiles,
Rita

Re: Your Worst Critic (User Rating: 1 )
by smilez101 on Monday, 8th August 2005 @ 10:48:08 PM AEST
(User Info | Send a Message)

This is a really good poem. The part I liked the best in your poem was when you said
One day you'll die
you'll have just been a face
no one will remember
gone without a trace
I liked this part because this is what many people are afraid of
a really good write

Re: Your Worst Critic (User Rating: 1 )
by pUnKa_RaCh on Monday, 8th August 2005 @ 10:50:40 PM AEST
(User Info | Send a Message)

your words do indeed hold a lot of truth....I like the realization at the end, very well written.

yes, sometimes we our worst enemy.

insightful write, I really liked reading it.

Thanks for posting!

Re: Your Worst Critic (User Rating: 1 )
by fielding88 on Wednesday, 12th October 2005 @ 10:30:08 PM AEST
(User Info | Send a Message)

Ah, the joys of vanity...*rolls eyes*

Brilliantly done here. I didn't notice how long the write actaully was either until I looked it over again. The rhyme scheme you had just allowed me to breeze through it, and I think that's one of the most important aspects of your writes that I enjoy. It was so easy to relate to this write of yours as well, as I've longed to write a piece on this topic but could never find the words. It's nice to see someone else do it so well. Beautiful piece, yet again.

While every care is taken to ensure the general sites content is family safe, our moderators cannot be in all places; all the time. Please report poetry and or comments that are in breach of our site rules HERE (Please include poem title or url). Parents also please ensure that you supervise your children well when they are on the internet; regardless of what a site says about being, or being considered, child-safe.

Poetry is much like a great photo, a single "moment in time" capturing many feelings and emotions. Yet, they are very alive; creating stirrings within the readers who form visual "pictures" of the expressed emotions within the Poem. ©

Opinions expressed in the poetry, comments, forums etc. on this site are not necessarily those of this site, its owners and/or operators; but of the individuals who post items to this site.
Frequently Asked Questions | | | Privacy Policy | | | Contact Webmaster

All submitted items are Copyright © to their submitter. All the rest Copyright © 2002-2050 by Your Poetry Dot Com

All logos and trademarks in this site are property of their respective owners.

Script Generation Time: 0.052 Seconds. - View our Site Map | .© your-poetry.com