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[sid] => 102980
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[aid] => mick
[title] => VOICES
[time] => 2005-08-08 05:37:00
[hometext] => something I have been working on for a bit ... thanks for the help from one dear to me....
[bodytext] => Alone in the world
People all around
Everything spinning
And deafened by sound
Internal voices
Are somewhat profound
Yet still to this plane
I find myself bound
Listen well my friend
You’re better off dead
Angels save your soul
From lies that are said
Thoughts turn black as coal
Lie awake in bed
Come in from the cold
Confusion now shed
Shannon
[comments] => 12
[counter] => 329
[topic] => 21
[informant] => LoveStruck_Hippie
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[ihome] => 0
[alanguage] => english
[acomm] => 0
[haspoll] => 0
[pollID] => 0
[score] => 18
[ratings] => 4
[editpoem] => 1
[associated] =>
[topicname] => Lifepoems
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VOICES
Contributed by
LoveStruck_Hippie
on
Monday, 8th August 2005 @ 05:37:00 AM in AEST
Topic:
Lifepoems
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Alone in the world
People all around
Everything spinning
And deafened by sound
Internal voices
Are somewhat profound
Yet still to this plane
I find myself bound
Listen well my friend
You’re better off dead
Angels save your soul
From lies that are said
Thoughts turn black as coal
Lie awake in bed
Come in from the cold
Confusion now shed
Shannon
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Re: VOICES
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by emystar on
Monday, 8th August 2005 @ 06:08:40 AM AEST
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Sad but well written.
huggs,
emy |
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Re: VOICES
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 8th August 2005 @ 04:09:12 PM AEST
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| A very interesting write, I liked it. |
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Re: VOICES
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by MorningDove on
Monday, 8th August 2005 @ 05:23:35 PM AEST
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My personal belief is that life is not so bad. It takes internal fortitude to get through it, but I still think life is great and holds much beauty if looked for. You are much too young and beautiful inside to give up on life yet. If you ever need to talk to me, please do not hesitate. I will listen and try to see your point and maybe together we can figure out the problem. Worth a try at least?
Hugs,
Rita |
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Re: VOICES
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 9th August 2005 @ 01:40:44 PM AEST
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it's very rare one find perfection on these pages, i just found it, lovely peice of writting.
Ben |
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Re: VOICES
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by hauntedscorp on
Tuesday, 16th August 2005 @ 07:05:11 PM AEST
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Wow Shannon; this is far different than anything I've read by you so far....Your expression jumps off the page, and your insightful words are full of dark truths. Great job...keep it up!!
Scorp. |
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Re: VOICES
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 26th September 2005 @ 09:33:38 AM AEST
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Hi Shannon!
Amazing write. So naz is not the ONLY one with talent, eh?
This was wonderful. So profound and yet so simple.
I must peruse more of your work...
~Breezy |
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Re: VOICES
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by lostinmyself on
Tuesday, 15th November 2005 @ 04:48:28 PM AEST
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Youch Shannon, that first stanza seems so calm, and then BAM, there's anger there.
This is awesome, I love how it just jumps off of the screen at me.
Remind me to never make you mad. Heehee.
Great write, hun.
*hugs*
Phil xxx |
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Re: VOICES
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by Former_Member on
Saturday, 3rd December 2005 @ 10:55:58 AM AEST
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the thruth is, this, is the thruth, very revealing a beautiful peice of writting, it speacks of things that r so significant, beautiful peice.
((((Shannon))))
Ben |
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Re: VOICES
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by deadheadpoet on
Monday, 23rd January 2006 @ 04:06:59 PM AEST
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| Shannon, what a superb write. That first stanza has left me in awe. Powerful piece of poetry my friend. Peace, Laura |
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Re: VOICES
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by artjunkiekyle on
Monday, 3rd July 2006 @ 05:34:25 PM AEST
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| I don't exactly know what your message was but I liked it. |
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Re: VOICES
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by wheels on
Sunday, 22nd June 2008 @ 01:55:40 AM AEST
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| speaking from my soul - I love your work! |
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Re: VOICES
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by ham323 on
Tuesday, 29th December 2009 @ 04:48:42 PM AEST
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I get it.
Almost like, "better dead than sorry"
Rather than the original.
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