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[aid] => mick
[title] => Legacy
[time] => 2005-08-05 12:10:48
[hometext] => I wrote this over a year ago and was startled to find I had somehow managed to overlook and not post it
[bodytext] => From deep within my tortured soul
Feelings of despair unfold
Emotional debris clutters my mind
Now as I lay me down to sleep
My eyes are dry and yet I weep
For childhood dreams I've lost and still can't find
Looking back through all the years
Of overcoming angst and fears
Trying to decide who I've become
What's led me to this awful place
Of dreadful dark distorted space
Just how much longer until I succumb
To a life of such obscurity
That no one looks or even sees
Passion burning deep inside of me
I want to shout, I want to run
Proclaim to all, those things I’ve done
Somehow finding immortality
One day soon I will find peace
Please help me set my mind at ease
Just say you won't forget me
~ When I'm gone ~
07-30-04
[comments] => 11
[counter] => 249
[topic] => 25
[informant] => Nazmythian
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[alanguage] => english
[acomm] => 0
[haspoll] => 0
[pollID] => 0
[score] => 29
[ratings] => 6
[editpoem] => 1
[associated] =>
[topicname] => MiscPoems
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Legacy
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Nazmythian
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Friday, 5th August 2005 @ 12:10:48 PM in AEST
Topic:
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From deep within my tortured soul
Feelings of despair unfold
Emotional debris clutters my mind
Now as I lay me down to sleep
My eyes are dry and yet I weep
For childhood dreams I've lost and still can't find
Looking back through all the years
Of overcoming angst and fears
Trying to decide who I've become
What's led me to this awful place
Of dreadful dark distorted space
Just how much longer until I succumb
To a life of such obscurity
That no one looks or even sees
Passion burning deep inside of me
I want to shout, I want to run
Proclaim to all, those things I’ve done
Somehow finding immortality
One day soon I will find peace
Please help me set my mind at ease
Just say you won't forget me
~ When I'm gone ~
07-30-04
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Re: Legacy
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by bernard2 on
Friday, 5th August 2005 @ 12:30:19 PM AEST
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| Naz we wont forget you or your splendid poetry. bernard2 |
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Re: Legacy
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by vibes2go on
Friday, 5th August 2005 @ 01:05:45 PM AEST
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my friend in the cool, Seattle rain .. how could we ever forget you. nice piece of writing ..
mary |
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Re: Legacy
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by MorningDove on
Friday, 5th August 2005 @ 01:40:37 PM AEST
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You will not be forgotten in my mind simply because of who and what you are in your poetry. We are generally our own worst critics and cause ourselves much unnecessary angst. Apologize to the universe and to the people that may need one. Wipe your slate clean and go forth my friend. Taking only from the past the lessons you have learned and only look toward a better future. Blessings.
Hugs,
Rita |
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Re: Legacy
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by lostinmyself on
Friday, 5th August 2005 @ 01:55:47 PM AEST
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I'll never forget you Nazzy.
I like this. It works well and seems very sad, but hopeful in some ways, too.
Shame on you for forgetting it :P lol.
Great write my friend,
Phil xxx
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Re: Legacy
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by anitajames on
Friday, 5th August 2005 @ 03:25:07 PM AEST
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| very touching and honest poem. |
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Re: Legacy
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by hauntedscorp on
Friday, 5th August 2005 @ 04:56:46 PM AEST
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Nice Nazzy, very nice!! So glad you found this...Isn't it wonderful to stumble across an old write? I like your overall expression in this piece, but the second and fourth stanzas really spoke to me...Good job with this find!!
Scorp. |
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Re: Legacy
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by Vampirequeen on
Monday, 8th August 2005 @ 01:07:06 PM AEST
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what a touching write Nazzy.
you did an awsome job.
hugs |
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Re: Legacy
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by Stitch on
Tuesday, 9th August 2005 @ 06:17:24 PM AEST
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The third stanza touched me the most...oh, the memories that one brought back. I look at the kids with so much ahead of them and then at myself and think "where did it go?"
I don't care much
about a legacy,
but it's sad to see
what I've made
of me
Stitch |
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Re: Legacy
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by Willofree on
Tuesday, 9th August 2005 @ 07:19:54 PM AEST
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A powerful poem..... and our need to be remembered, and to feel we contributed something worth while. The struggles with our identity and dealing with our demons. I must say I still struggle with some of these issus today.
I certainly can relate, thanks for sharing, my friend
Will |
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Re: Legacy
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 16th August 2005 @ 06:39:11 AM AEST
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Hehe, I definitely agree with Phil here! :D
How on earth could you have overlooked it?
Wonderful wonderful wonderful -
I'm totally loving the powerful ending.
The somewhat erratic flow.. almost as if it's chopped up in the wrong places.. seems to fit perfectly (not sure if intended or not). It signifies something deep.. fragmented, almost.. (to me, anyway.)
Sprinting off before I ramble on for another two or twenty pages..
~KayT (did I mention this was mind-blowing?!)
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Re: Legacy
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by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 24th August 2005 @ 03:33:15 PM AEST
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incredable, anguished, soul searching!
Yet still you find hope.
Truely great. |
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