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[title] => Staring into the abyss
[time] => 2005-08-04 21:18:56
[hometext] => A look into the depressed heart
[bodytext] => I stand upon the tranquil sea a black sheet of glass that stretches into forever.
There is nothing here but my own reflection and the echo of my own voice.
The sounds of the waves are hidden by my weeping.
The glow of the sun is smote by the shroud over my heart.
All who come here die
my rose is death
and my song is mourning
The petals from the tulip fall into the sea
and are frozen in the black of my memory.
They fall to never rise again
They fall to never rise again
Notes- I had to take some time off from writing to deal with my depression I am on the road to recovery but I realise this is just the beginning of my road and not the end. I am greatful to those who tried to help me in May and hope that one day that I will not feel grief the way this poem descibes but can always write what is encouraging to others. I hope that any one who is feeling this way will seek help from close friends who care about them.
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Staring into the abyss
Contributed by
Archie
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Thursday, 4th August 2005 @ 09:18:56 PM in AEST
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I stand upon the tranquil sea a black sheet of glass that stretches into forever.
There is nothing here but my own reflection and the echo of my own voice.
The sounds of the waves are hidden by my weeping.
The glow of the sun is smote by the shroud over my heart.
All who come here die
my rose is death
and my song is mourning
The petals from the tulip fall into the sea
and are frozen in the black of my memory.
They fall to never rise again
They fall to never rise again
Notes- I had to take some time off from writing to deal with my depression I am on the road to recovery but I realise this is just the beginning of my road and not the end. I am greatful to those who tried to help me in May and hope that one day that I will not feel grief the way this poem descibes but can always write what is encouraging to others. I hope that any one who is feeling this way will seek help from close friends who care about them.
Copyright ©
Archie
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2005-08-04 21:18:56]
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Re: Staring into the abyss
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by Daniela_Maria_Violin on
Thursday, 4th August 2005 @ 09:34:18 PM AEST
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| I took time off to deal with depression as well -- longer than you (5 months) but it does help immensely, I'm glad to see you back here, I'm glad to be back here and let me just say that I really can relate to this poem... a lot. |
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Re: Staring into the abyss
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by Vampire_Slander on
Thursday, 4th August 2005 @ 09:53:55 PM AEST
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| This hit me hard, I've gone and am going though similar experiences. Great work. |
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Re: Staring into the abyss
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by pUnKa_RaCh on
Thursday, 4th August 2005 @ 10:10:32 PM AEST
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Yes, I think you have described the depressed heart aptly. It is like staring into a never-ending abyss I know.
This poem was beautifully written and I loved the word imagery used, just wonderful.
I wish all the happiness for you in the world and thank you for sharing your feelings. |
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Re: Staring into the abyss
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by MorningDove on
Thursday, 4th August 2005 @ 10:13:47 PM AEST
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Depression is a cruel state. Yet the most cruel thing we can do is not treat it. If you continue to do as needed it will get better. It is a road that can be long, but I am so thrilled you finally sought help.
Blessings,
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Re: Staring into the abyss
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by vibes2go on
Friday, 5th August 2005 @ 12:02:53 AM AEST
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depression is like any other illness, and sometimes that's what we need.. a step back .. we feel crazy..but it's just that our batteries are low..and we need a re-charge.
thanks for sharing this..
mary |
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Re: Staring into the abyss
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by jmpy84 on
Friday, 5th August 2005 @ 01:32:48 AM AEST
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| heart felt well done |
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Re: Staring into the abyss
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by Vampirequeen on
Friday, 5th August 2005 @ 02:05:17 AM AEST
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WOW VERY SAD AND INTENSE
AWSOME |
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Re: Staring into the abyss
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by sprinter27 on
Friday, 5th August 2005 @ 10:54:34 PM AEST
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great write, and i am glad that you put your depression behind you and that you are moving on. i wish you lots of luck in your journey!!! good write, keep it up!
~sprints |
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Re: Staring into the abyss
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by Jenni_K on
Saturday, 6th August 2005 @ 08:10:50 PM AEST
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Just so happy that you feel well enough to share your thoughts again. That in itself is a sign of recovery... You're on the right track, my friend..
Hugs
Jenni |
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Re: Staring into the abyss
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by deadreckoning1983 on
Saturday, 4th February 2006 @ 10:02:45 PM AEST
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| i guess it depends on what mood i am in, but this was freakin' frackin' awesome. i almost pooped on myself after reading this poem. your stuff is great anyway, but this was really great. |
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Re: Staring into the abyss
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by kishdaswani on
Friday, 9th June 2006 @ 01:31:57 PM AEST
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| just checking out your poem, after your comment.....this is such a beautiful poem, i can relate immensely. your articulation of emotions is just outstanding. im glad that you got through this though as i always say 'tears of joy are for today, tears of sorrow for tommorow'.....great write! keep on writing! |
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