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I'd take my love back from you.
Seems no matter how I try
There's something else I can't get through;

Can you show me how to hate?
You do it so well...
I tried to walk your path
You laughed as I fell.

If I brought it to the surface
I'm sure I'd be consumed;
I drink of my fermented madness,
We'll all be wasted soon.

If I could go back in time
I'd leave you behind;
Seems no matter where I look
There's something I can't find.

Can you teach me not to care
When my heart fails?
I tried to wear your cross but
Couldn't stand the nails.

If I brought it to the surface
I'm sure I would die;
I'll always need to need you,
I'll always long to cry.

If I brought it to the surface
You'd have to run away;
Worth its weight in feelings,
Too high for you to pay.

© Barry Veinotte

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Under the Surface

Contributed by LabWolf on Wednesday, 3rd August 2005 @ 12:05:33 PM in AEST
Topic: DarkPoetry

If I could turn back the hands of time
I'd take my love back from you.
Seems no matter how I try
There's something else I can't get through;

Can you show me how to hate?
You do it so well...
I tried to walk your path
You laughed as I fell.

If I brought it to the surface
I'm sure I'd be consumed;
I drink of my fermented madness,
We'll all be wasted soon.

If I could go back in time
I'd leave you behind;
Seems no matter where I look
There's something I can't find.

Can you teach me not to care
When my heart fails?
I tried to wear your cross but
Couldn't stand the nails.

If I brought it to the surface
I'm sure I would die;
I'll always need to need you,
I'll always long to cry.

If I brought it to the surface
You'd have to run away;
Worth its weight in feelings,
Too high for you to pay.

© Barry Veinotte

Copyright Â© LabWolf ... [ 2005-08-03 12:05:33]
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Re: Under the Surface (User Rating: 1 )
by vibes2go on Wednesday, 3rd August 2005 @ 12:49:52 PM AEST
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very expressive.

Re: Under the Surface (User Rating: 1 )
by Shnannon on Wednesday, 3rd August 2005 @ 01:45:16 PM AEST
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I really like this. Normally I'm not a big fan of rhyming, but you've done a really good job of it. I can picture things as they're said, great imagery. Keep up the good work.

Re: Under the Surface (User Rating: 1 )
by darkangeleyes57 on Thursday, 19th January 2006 @ 09:51:59 AM AEST
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This is amazing. I loved it and it had such meaning and it was composed beautifully.

christina

Re: Under the Surface (User Rating: 1 )
by Former_Member on Sunday, 11th March 2007 @ 05:26:25 PM AEST
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I know how you feel. I can't hate anyone but myself and it lead me to be broken hearted. I still can't hate but maybe once ytou learn, maybe you can teach me.

GREAT poem!!!!
Darkpoetress

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