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Array ( [sid] => 102457 [catid] => 1 [aid] => mick [title] => Rat Race [time] => 2005-08-01 20:10:19 [hometext] => just reflecting on my day to day life...........ohhhh the repetition arghhhhh! [bodytext] =>
~xXx~
Like a caged mouse, running on his wheel
Taunted, by a visible freedom he so desires
but cannot reach
So to, are you...
Caged and racing
Circling round and round
Pausing momentarily just to breathe...then
Frantically running again
Day in and day out
Trying to break free!
CLIMBING THE WALLS!
Only to discover......
You are exactly where you started again
Caged...by society
Part of a neverending rat race
Like a mouse, running on his wheel
Taunted by a visible freedom he so desires
but cannot obtain
Copyright ©CB 2005
~this write will be heavily expanded upon it the future, any comments or suggestions would be greatly appreciated~ [comments] => 7 [counter] => 169 [topic] => 63 [informant] => CarolinaBlue [notes] => [ihome] => 0 [alanguage] => english [acomm] => 0 [haspoll] => 0 [pollID] => 0 [score] => 10 [ratings] => 2 [editpoem] => 1 [associated] => [topicname] => hbadday )
Rat Race
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CarolinaBlue
on Monday, 1st August 2005 @ 08:10:19 PM in AEST
Topic:
hbadday
~xXx~
Like a caged mouse, running on his wheel
Taunted, by a visible freedom he so desires
but cannot reach
So to, are you...
Caged and racing
Circling round and round
Pausing momentarily just to breathe...then
Frantically running again
Day in and day out
Trying to break free!
CLIMBING THE WALLS!
Only to discover......
You are exactly where you started again
Caged...by society
Part of a neverending rat race
Like a mouse, running on his wheel
Taunted by a visible freedom he so desires
but cannot obtain
Copyright ©CB 2005
~this write will be heavily expanded upon it the future, any comments or suggestions would be greatly appreciated~
Copyright ©
CarolinaBlue
... [ 2005-08-01 20:10:19]
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by shelby on Monday, 1st August 2005 @ 08:21:20 PM AEST
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I can so relate to this. Nicely done
Michelle
Re: Rat Race
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by pUnKa_RaCh on Monday, 1st August 2005 @ 09:34:52 PM AEST
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Oh yeah I can relate to your angst.
I feel this all the time but sometimes we just have to stop for a moment and magic can be found in life.
Honest and moving piece.
Well done, I liked it
Re: Rat Race
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by hauntedscorp on Monday, 1st August 2005 @ 09:51:47 PM AEST
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Oh, I can relate to this...work....*groan*
I like the format you wrote this in, with the appropriate italics, and I thought your expression was well formed also...I personally wouldn't change a thing. The picture suits this piece perfectly too, and it gave me a laugh, and....a cry....lol ; )
Scorp.
Re: Rat Race
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by MorningDove on Monday, 1st August 2005 @ 10:39:21 PM AEST
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Splendid showcase of day to day grind just trying to survive. I love the graphic. It is exactly what it feels like sometimes. You run and run and stress and stress and still come up late and needing more. It is not the big traumas in life that wear us down, it is daily life.
Re: Rat Race
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by poisonpen00ad on Tuesday, 2nd August 2005 @ 01:27:20 AM AEST
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So very true. Great write.
Re: Rat Race
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by Man_On_High on Wednesday, 3rd August 2005 @ 08:39:17 PM AEST
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I also love it Blue..
and feel your frustration too as well.
Personally, I would like to see a bit more,
reflecting the whole "enslaved animal" metaphor..
as this would be a most fitting write to use it in,
as we ALL are, at one time or another.
I do love it though, as is.
It's wonderful.
(the image as well)
a "New Yorker Magazine" feel to it..
Billy
Re: Rat Race
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by priss on Saturday, 15th October 2005 @ 09:46:46 PM AEST
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how terrible it is to be on the inside looking out and unable to do anything about it. how do we keep from growing weary when everyday its the exact same process? i absolutely love this poem. nice!
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