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Array ( [sid] => 102447 [catid] => 1 [aid] => mick [title] => Shot in the Eye [time] => 2005-08-01 18:12:08 [hometext] => [bodytext] => Take me apart
And recycle my organs

Into the pits of desperation
Where hope is only a faint idea

Truisms that fail to relate
To the desires of the common thread

A precipice etched in stone
Outlines of chiseled features close to dead

Only on the rare occasion
Does a heart speak so fluid

Do tonsils fill a trachea
With chords of pristine music

Nothing unavailable
Resources scattered to edges and limits

All is preventable
The avalanche stood still before it plummets

Before our time ends
The target makes its way to the bullet

With your finger cocked
Why are you waiting, why not just pull it?

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Shot in the Eye

Contributed by mangos on Monday, 1st August 2005 @ 06:12:08 PM in AEST
Topic: oops

Take me apart
And recycle my organs

Into the pits of desperation
Where hope is only a faint idea

Truisms that fail to relate
To the desires of the common thread

A precipice etched in stone
Outlines of chiseled features close to dead

Only on the rare occasion
Does a heart speak so fluid

Do tonsils fill a trachea
With chords of pristine music

Nothing unavailable
Resources scattered to edges and limits

All is preventable
The avalanche stood still before it plummets

Before our time ends
The target makes its way to the bullet

With your finger cocked
Why are you waiting, why not just pull it?

_____________________________
_________________________________

Copyright © mangos ... [ 2005-08-01 18:12:08]
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Re: Shot in the Eye (User Rating: 1 )
by hauntedscorp on Monday, 1st August 2005 @ 06:42:57 PM AEST
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Hmmm...I think this is meant to be viewed ambiguous at best, and negative or even angry at worst. I however see it as a very positive piece, full of hope and even anxiousness...I love your use of symbolism in this piece, and how carefully you worded your thoughts...Well done: )

Scorp.

Re: Shot in the Eye (User Rating: 1 )
by vibes2go on Tuesday, 2nd August 2005 @ 12:37:11 AM AEST
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okeee dokee then

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