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Decaffinated
Contributed by
Nazmythian
on
Sunday, 24th July 2005 @ 01:05:36 AM in AEST
Topic:
MiscPoems
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Coffee colored dreams invade
My hours of conscious thought
Caffeine flavored memories
Of sleepless battles fought
Percolating visions
Slowly dripping into place
Filtered through the darkness
Steaming image of your face
Emptied of awareness
Cupping both hands to my head
Begging for a refill of
The words you once had said
Special roasted yesterdays
That from my mind now pour
Over filled emotions
Soon are spilling to the floor
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Nazmythian
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Re: Decaffinated
(User Rating: 1 ) by lovingcritters on
Sunday, 24th July 2005 @ 01:47:57 AM AEST (User
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Marvelous Metahoric images Naz, but I find them very sad. Spilling to the floor. I hope this is just another of your dreaming dreams, and not seriously considered in your life today. Loved the "roasted yesterdays" word master that you are.
Enjoyed the read, but guess I'm overly tired, it's very sad indeed!
Warm love
consue
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Re: Decaffinated
(User Rating: 1 ) by Spike on
Sunday, 24th July 2005 @ 05:26:41 AM AEST (User
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Broken heart keeping you up latte? If coffee be the drink of love, then pour another, barista!.
Okay, I'll stop there, but I enjoyed it - always a good write from you.
Spike
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Re: Decaffinated
(User Rating: 1 ) by blowfish_jane on
Sunday, 24th July 2005 @ 07:09:02 AM AEST (User
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Scott, what an inspiring metaphoric write. I like the latte-flavored images that you created. Kudos on a nicely written poem.
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Re: Decaffinated
(User Rating: 1 ) by vibes2go on
Sunday, 24th July 2005 @ 11:24:48 AM AEST (User
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my cup runneth over ..hehe
mary |
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Re: Decaffinated
(User Rating: 1 ) by hauntedscorp on
Sunday, 24th July 2005 @ 02:42:10 PM AEST (User
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You had to know this would get my attention; )
Great job with this Nazzy...coffee and love...what more could a person ask for? Metaphorically, I think you speak quite well! This was a creative and well written piece...Good job, I enjoyed this.
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Re: Decaffinated
(User Rating: 1 ) by Fionndruinne on
Sunday, 24th July 2005 @ 07:17:40 PM AEST (User
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*grins*
Nice double meanings here! Mocha makes a mighty metaphor for life, it does!
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Re: Decaffinated
(User Rating: 1 ) by MorningDove on
Sunday, 24th July 2005 @ 08:33:35 PM AEST (User
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Maybe if we paid as much attention when we were pouring out the mocha into the cup, as we did while preparing it, possibly it would not be wasted by the hindsight overflow?
Great write, Scott.
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Re: Decaffinated
(User Rating: 1 ) by lostinmyself on
Wednesday, 27th July 2005 @ 11:19:13 AM AEST (User
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*can't help giggling at what Mary said*
This is clever, Scott. I doubt anyone else would have been able to come up with something like this.
I do find it sad though. *hugs*
There is alot behind the words in this.
*wonders if the coffee is good for you*
*hugs* Phil xxx |
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Re: Decaffinated
(User Rating: 1 ) by xxbreathlessx on
Monday, 1st August 2005 @ 12:37:51 AM AEST (User
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very well written. i alternated between thinkikng if you were actually talking about coffee or about someone or about life. figured it was all of them in one...lol. anyways very well written. |
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Re: Decaffinated
(User Rating: 1 ) by critterhideaway on
Tuesday, 2nd August 2005 @ 12:02:30 AM AEST (User
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I like this Scott, Thank you for this another masterpiece. I do so enjoy your writing!!! |
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Re: Decaffinated
(User Rating: 1 ) by Willofree on
Tuesday, 9th August 2005 @ 06:59:26 PM AEST (User
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Naz,
A very clever use of the coffee metaphor. It is interesting that the poem is intitled "Decaffinated", but you refer to "caffeine flavored memories..." So is the decaff a more subtle or subliminal message. Maybe I'm reading too much in, but then I know how clever you can be with hidden meanings.
A very clever, albeit , sad write my friend
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