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The Hurricane
Contributed by
Rae
on
Thursday, 14th July 2005 @ 07:36:07 PM in AEST
Topic:
ambiguous
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Everything must stop when it rains.
A seven year-old girl cries herself to death.
The sun won’t do me any good unless I face the sea.
All it does is turn me into a widow.
So let me go…
Take my cap off…
Make me some coffee.
Pretend this is forever.
I stay inside for this is where the sunflowers bloom.
It is a fallacy that they live for the sun.
They want to look away,
But temptation as always grabs their chins.
The wall supports the amputee,
The helpless soldier in this senseless war.
But unlike your character,
Our eyes grow old.
Cataract, inevitable.
We tried to run away.
Yet the sun is there to blind us.
Wake me up after 3.
Surprise me with a call.
I shall remember you under the trees,
I shall remember me kissing your knees.
This is forever.
-Rae ’05.
071405. Thurs. 7:04PM.
Copyright ©
Rae
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2005-07-14 19:36:07]
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Re: The Hurricane
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by Fionndruinne on
Friday, 15th July 2005 @ 12:57:54 AM AEST
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I like this. The imagery is masterful, I do think. And it is somewhat ambiguous, but that doesn't make it less compelling. Well done!
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Re: The Hurricane
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by Former_Member on
Friday, 15th July 2005 @ 02:02:01 AM AEST
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hello rae writting as well as ever, my
daughters r up from florida this is very
revealing and 2 the point very effective in it's
presentation, "make me some coffee pretend
this is forever" wow i'm feeling what your
writting as though i was right there, a good
writer u r, very convincing indeed . . .
Ben |
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