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OLE SNEAKIE SNAKE
Contributed by
emystar
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Monday, 11th July 2005 @ 07:39:17 AM in AEST
Topic:
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SultryRose's Signatures
Along comes da
lite shinen so brite
he done thought he got
her numba ya'll
wraped all tite
in his evil so brite.
Ole sneakie snake
he don eva noe
he's name he slitha's
in he slitha's out
then dances round
jus jump-n-shouts
no one noe who he
bout.
he noe he try
fool her 11 yeah's long
She gave up
2 fine her own song!
oh yeah, he pay
da money to take
picha's da prevertt
Dis gals chillens da
need shoes fo scool
he broke da
golden rules
she screamed all
on her way down
An angel he'd
hear say.
My God he look fine
but he a devil da worstist kine
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emystar
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Re: OLE SNEAKIE SNAKE
(User Rating: 1 ) by blowfish_jane on
Monday, 11th July 2005 @ 11:18:54 AM AEST (User
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This is so touching Emy. What beautiful words.
Loved it.
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Re: OLE SNEAKIE SNAKE
(User Rating: 1 ) by MorningDove on
Monday, 11th July 2005 @ 10:04:11 PM AEST (User
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Sorry Emy, but it just takes to long to read and make any sense out of. i have tried, but I just cannot make much sense out ebonics or whatever it is called and don't have the time. It ruins my enjoyment of the poem if I can't understand it.
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Re: OLE SNEAKIE SNAKE
(User Rating: 1 ) by venkat on
Tuesday, 12th July 2005 @ 03:31:58 AM AEST (User
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"he slitha's in he slitha's out then dances round jus jump-n-shouts no one noe who he
bout"....what a lovely description..Always
Emy does amazing lyrics..((hugs)) venkat
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Re: OLE SNEAKIE SNAKE
(User Rating: 1 ) by hauntedscorp on
Friday, 5th August 2005 @ 11:04:26 PM AEST (User
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Ahhh yes, the ol' snake in the grass...I hate those kind of people!! This makes perfect sense to me, and you wrote it wonderfully raw and I think that's what makes this the exceptional write it is: )
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Re: OLE SNEAKIE SNAKE
(User Rating: 1 ) by Former_Member on
Thursday, 18th August 2005 @ 09:14:22 PM AEST (User
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One of my best friends, she has this way of speech.. She could have fooled me.. she aint from arkinsaws, she aint from oklahomie. She was born right here in Oregon. LOL..
Your write.. the language style.. the verse.. the importance of this write is the dialect which you have chosen that truly brings these words across..
I like to hear people speak with a drawl.. its long.
If anyone heard me speak.. I tell you what they say.. I am french, so you may hear my accent.. or dialect.. but it comes off crazy.. people say where are you from lol.. Ever hear a french person speak in a western tone. well.. now that is what I sound like. lol..
I love your write.. reminds me of Oprah Winfrey, the sound of her voice speaking.. in "The Color Purple" and in "Beloved". Not so much what she says in these two movies, but how her voice carries out the message in her character speech.
*****My God he look fine
but he a devil da worstist kine
lol.. he look so fine.. da worstist kine..
I can hear it loud and clear.. I can visualize the message...
5 stars for this write.. it is uniquely wonderfully written..
I love the title.. Ole Sneakie Snake..
RLPoetess ; ))
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