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Broken
Contributed by
harlot20
on
Saturday, 9th July 2005 @ 02:40:10 PM in AEST
Topic:
Suicide
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Rain on my back and pound her into the soddened grass.
And from the shadows on her soakened hair.
She shudders and breaks out shouting I WILL NOT BE BROKEN.
YOU CAN'T BREAK WHAT DOESN'T RESIDE IN HERE.
She grabs at her chest.
Protesting against the winds howling brutal reasons for cursing her, till she cries.
That day where she gave up and didn't care anymore.
She cried.
But it weren't enough, her dues wheren't paid.
She still has a thousand tears to give up from herself yet.
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harlot20
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2005-07-09 14:40:10] (Date/Time posted on
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Re: Broken
(User Rating: 1 ) by Arden on
Saturday, 9th July 2005 @ 02:44:27 PM AEST (User
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i think this may have alot of hidden meanings in it.
"Protesting against the winds howling brutal reasons for cursing her, till she cries."
i like that line. the peom would be better if there was some sort of style to it. theres a few english mistakes. but all in all its a good poem. i wasnt feeling the emotion though. but thats prolly just me.
4/5
-Arden
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